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JBL


I have been known to put a jabroni or two through a table.

Nov
24th
2017

I Have Discovered Who I Was in My Last Life. · 12:00am Nov 24th, 2017

Carry on with your day.

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JBL #125 · 2 weeks ago · · ·

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Heh, glad to meet a fellow fan

i love how your name is a reference to one of my fav wrestler's names and also a bio referencing wwe super stars too

2874461 That's fine, and I totally understand. You can consider this version of the story the Alpha version, and like you said, there really were way too many moving parts which kinda got away from me. I really meant it when I said I was turning this into a publishable story, and for that I needed to plan out how things were going to go, which is the main purpose of this version: a way for me to plan out my story, while receiving constant feedback of what works, and what dosen't. When I finally get this finished, you'll find that a lot of the extra characters will have been combined into one or two characters, or eliminated completely as I further refine and complete this story. This isn't a final product by any stretch of the imagination, and I really think the quality of this story reflects on that. Thank you for taking the time to read this, though, it really means a lot to me!

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My bad, placed it in the wrong bookshelf. I have my own ranking system with my bookshelves lol.

I've been following the story for a long while now (gods, it's been years hasn't it?), and as the story's universe has expanded, albeit a bit unavoidably, my enjoyment and interest in it has waned. The increased number of POVs meant that the tight efficiency you wove in your storytelling started to unravel.

I think the straw that really broke the camel's back for me was the involvement in the stereotypical macho US soldiers. Plus, I'm not a fan of overly long combat action, and the last few chapters was chock-full of them.

Overall, I'd say that I enjoyed about 60% of the story but there were simply too many moving pieces to really pin this down as a great read.

Um... what I am isn't an abandoned flick. It's still ongoing, we're just finished with this part. Also, I'm sorry you didn't like it. If you could, I would appreciate it if you told me what you didn't like, since I'm only writing this to become a better author.

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