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Sorry if some of this chapter feels preachy or odd. I will admit that this chapter was one of the many instances in which a character just wrote himself. I had an entire week planned for Nav as a maid, but then I realized that he could very easily talk himself out of it. What you see here is evidence of a character coming alive in a way the author never expected.
Bloody awesome, I'll post my thoughts after I read...
Well this gives more suspense! We now wonder if the Griffin King will retaliate with war! Loving this story though, took me 5 days to get up to the latest chapter, trouble is that now means I'm also one of the ones who have to wait in suspense for the next chapter! And that also means that I.WANT.MOOOOAAAAAR!!!!!
MOAR I SAY!!!
What da faq happend to my comment? o_O
Still i love this story, but i sense a real shitstorm coming. I would like to see a whole week but if you can talk your way out of anything that you don't like you should do it, so i am not mad about it. I feel that the Shinning Armor will have a big problem now xD. But the most importatnt question is when will next chapter arrive.
I felt my wings sag as I put the crossbow up yet ago.
yet again
Good chapter, imho. And i sure liked how Nav managed to work his way out of awkward country.
Thanks Luna! Once again you no sense of subtlety.
Magic place sounds pretty cool.
Ouch, I was wondering about the religion thing. Poor guy.
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Quite interesting chapter; did not really find anything odd or preachy about it. I actually like reading stories where a human tells them about how evil humans are and then reading the ponies reaction. I do not understand however, why there is no such thing as religion in ponyland. I would expect some ancient being with a grand amount of magical power to have had worshipers at one point. The one thing, I did not like about this chapter is the further antagonization (Is that even a word) of Luna.
Good chapter. I liked that he was not a maid for a week, and that luna fucked up. Cant wait for more updates.
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Based on Celestia's comments, i would say that there is, but in their case the objects of worship, luna and celestia, are tangible. Loosing faith in them would be treason.
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>>Well this gives more suspense! We now wonder if the Griffin King will retaliate with war! Loving this story though, took me 5 days to get up to the latest chapter, trouble is that now means I'm also one of the ones who have to wait in suspense for the next chapter! And that also means that I.WANT.MOOOOAAAAAR!!!!!
(I can't click reply on the other comment)
I know that feeling too, mate. Ain't nothing worse than catching up to someone that's updating something slowly. Still, at least it's a big chapter.
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The next chapter will come when it comes. Kinda like Shining Armor. I actually based Nav's conversation with Cadance off of this very nsfw pic: http://i.imgur.com/dCrhP.png
I will say this: I had to be talked out of putting that in the actual story by someone that realized the ridiculous amount of sex I was putting in.
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Things were a lot different back in Luna's day. Subtlety was not a big thing. Celestia is working on teaching her that. And yeah, the magic tower was designed to be awesome, as magic is pretty much inherently cool. Someone should try to count the references I used when describing the place.
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Humans aren't evil. Navarone did not even try to imply that they were. Humans are inherently good, but they are easily misled by herd instincts. That's pretty much what he said here. And I'm not trying to make Luna into a villain, I am trying to show that despite some parts of her changing, she is still the product of a different time. She is going to take some work to get up to speed; a thousand years of history and changing social norms can't be taught in just a few years. And yes, there probably was some manner of religion in the past, but the ponies might not have called it religion.
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Celestia and Luna are very much aware that they are not goddesses and they do not want to be worshiped. They really don't want to be in charge either, but that's where their lives went and they had to take it.
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If the griffin king does try to have Navi arrested I wonder how many of his pony friends will come to his defense.
Well after some time passed i realized that the situation could stop Nav from war games and i hoped to see some of the tactics that would be used there.
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Heh, still. This is the most detailed story I've ever read on here! :) The plot is always moving and changing and all links in. He's changed and gone through alot form chapter one all the way to here! Good job! :)
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Antagonizing doesn't necessarily mean make into a villain... simply you're making her seem evil and bad. Eh, in my opinion all humans are evil at heart, everyone of them can be 'swayed' to evil. In fact it isn't even hard with some people. Also, it seems you're running out of material. Don't let me stop you, I'm sure you're planning something big with Luna. I am just one reader with one opinion.
It is nice to see a new chapter update. Until I read the end, I could not help but think that Celestia might have orchestrated for Nav to screw up and result in him having to stay in her services using politics. Unfortunately I am not well read in fantasy besides Harry Potter as the majority of my interests lie in science fiction, however i am interested in the references that you used for the tower. Any of it Stephen King's Dark tower?
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Also, I confess towards the fetish of the french maid outfit. They are awesome.
Hmmm.... this pleases me. Yeeaaaaaasssssss.....
Okay, serious time. Nice chapter. I agree with what you said about Nav talking his way out of stuff.
The magic tower- sweet action.
The thing was Taya and Cadence- that part was weird, but in a good way. I just stopped and thought to myself for a minute about how awkward that would have been.
Also glad to see Nav not getting raped again. Poor guys seen enough of that.
The part with Celestia and the cuddles- I felt the feels man. They were good feels. I liked it.
And now something is going on in Ponyville? OH SNAP, LET THE IMPATIENT WAITING BEGIN!
While reading the Tower part of the story I began wondering if it would be possible for another human to come to Equestria. Discord might have wiped that dimension clean of humans but it hasn't been explained if he has any control over other dimensions. Would be crazy to see what would happen if a "Evil" human were to come.
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Nah, I haven't read any of King's stuff. Morrowind was the only direct reference. The tentacle monster was a Cthulu-type thing. There were more, but it's hardly fun to point them all out. Oh, and I have a plan for that outfit. No promises that it's a plan that will be used, but it's a plan.
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Yeah, that was really awkward. Taya just stared at Cadance for a few hours. I toyed with the idea of Nav getting raped again, but I knew that if it happened there would have been very little left of the griffin. Nav would have been eating barbequed wings, that's for damn sure.
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It's entirely possible. The humans are in the past, after all, and as we all know the ponies are able to manipulate time. Starswirl had an entire wing dedicated to spells. There had to have been more than one time spell there. I figure it is possible that there is a spell to open a portal to the past, like Nav was planning, and to yank a few humans out of thin air. The question isn't "Is this possible?", it's "How does it work?". Of course, another question is, would Discord allow it? How much would it conflict with his own plans?
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I wouldn't say that I'm running out of material, no. That said, we are probably getting somewhat close to the endgame. I'm pretty sure I'm not going to go with the depressing ending, at this point. The other idea I had just sounds so much more fun.
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A moving and constantly changing plot isn't always good. At least, not for everyone anyway. I'm still trying to get more readers, but it seems that this story doesn't resonate with most of the crowd here. Also, alot isn't a word.
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Naw... That's not what meant, you already used 'There is no number 6' with me, cept it was 'there is no number 4' but I proved you wrong...
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Oh, that joke. It's actually an even older one I got from someone else. It's a homage that he'll never see because he doesn't read me.
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Shame, I think it's pretty cool, but at this point you could kill every character in your story and I pretty sure I would still think you're cool.
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Oh um...wel, that#s just a new word! That I made up...honest! :3
Pretty good chapter.
I like how you average around 3k words a day so waiting for an update is actually worth it.
Fucking amazing.
MOAAAAAR!!!!!
That is all.
Please keep up the good work! I love the darkness and under currents :) I also like how you place many seeds/conditions in each chapter so when the next plot arc starts, it feels natural, already in place.
1572109 I think it was really great, although I really wanna know what will happen with the french maid outfit. A dragon, A cat, and so many other possibilities.
That was an awesome chapter, now for the fallout...
The next chapter is 64, and this one has 32 comments. This pleases me.
Although according to FIMFiction, the previous chapter is 64. The numbers are currently 2 apart. My power-of-2 penis is erect.
Alright it's a little late for me to ask this now but I have a question about Nav's axe. An axe that is heavier is normally better at chopping than another axe unless that other axe is made of a better material. So since there is an enchantment on it that makes it lighter does that affect its combat capabilities? Or does the enchantment only affect the one holding it?
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This axe is made of a really good material. That said, the ponies know almost nothing about making weapons since they can't really use them all that well. So yeah, his axe honestly isn't all that good of a weapon. There's more than one reason he doesn't use it.
2653051 How come Nav never mentioned such a flaw? Is it just another "fucks not given" moment since he didn't want the thing anyway?
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He doesn't know because he doesn't know weapons either. He only ever used the thing in combat once, against the ants. The axe was really fucked up after that fight and needed extensive repairs.
Did Nav get his night eyes back? I know he was "fixed" by Celestia but are his eyes normal again too? I'd prefer them to be, or at least look normal but keep the night vision
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Yeah, he has them back.
I am slightly disappointed that nav isn't going to be spending a week working as a maid, but understand that it would have been ooc for him to see an opportunity out of the entire thing and not take it. Though I was seriously looking foward to seeing nav deal with being a maid and maybe having some sexy funtimes on the side.
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Personally, I would absolutely love to read it. However, I got to the part where I was supposed to start writing it and just drew a complete blank. After some time, I realized that I honestly couldn't do it, as much as I wanted to. So I just took advantage of his intelligence instead.
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Just an interesting thought, regarding the ponies' ages: if you buy into what Granny Smith says about the Apple family reunions being every 100 moons, that places them at 8 years or so. Even if you try to account for a slower lunar orbit, that makes a maximum of 10 years, which makes a little more sense. Now take in to account that at the prior reunion AJ was an infant, that means at "present" the mane 6 are likely all ~ 11 yrs old, give or take. Further, with that in mind, we now look at the obvious fact of faster maturation rates vs. humans, that means that Taya's (and the Crusader's) current maturity levels likely place them at not much more than 3-4 yrs old.
Of course I could be way the hell off, but I just HAD to make an attempt to put a number to it. My marginal OCD demands it!
Found a typo "breath away"
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Um.. "If she does something you don't, like use magic to break her wings and run for it." That comma
I can not remove or edit comments, at all, why is this shit?
up and fire shot at me.:
I believe it should be "Shot fire"
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It's technically fine as it is. I don't want to go through and fix four versions for a simple thing like this that might look better but doesn't technically need to be changed.
You know, when I first read through this story, I recognized that Celestia and Luna were blowing Nav off whenever he made connections to his home and didn't think much of it besides the fact that they didn't want to lose control over him. But is it possible they knew the entire time? Did they know he was from the past when he first arrived? And even more importantly, could Celestia have tried figuring out a way for him to get home from the very beginning, but just chose not to? This could be another betrayal that Navarone could discover after his journey if more conflict was needed between him and Celestia. Conspiracies sure are fun.
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But isn't Nav a persona copied (or created) by Discord so he can play out whatever game he's playing? Nav IS Discord, not an actual human... or did I read that wrong?