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"Anything described can be described s'more." -the Lolly Family


The Circle was everything.

His walk in the mechanical walker had been everything for as long as he could remember, and the Circle it forced him into would be everything for the rest of his life.

But could one random child - out of the hundreds who had paid to ride the ponies - have a way for him to escape the Circle and the perpetually gray land that held him captive?

Zen and Ponies

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And thus it begins.

For a change of pace from my usual writing style, this story is complete and will update daily from now until Nightmare Night-ish.


Georg #3 · Oct 27th, 2020 · · · One ·

The Circle is a zen-like thing with thousands of metaphorical references. This is one of them. It gets better for our protagonist.

I must admit, I much prefer this kind of story - the kind that starts dark, and gets brighter. Especially this year, we need that.

Perhaps. I was merely expressing my own opinion. I'm not a fan of dark stories for darkness' sake, though I know others are.

People this is how to paint a picture with words.
holey shit this is good.
i know G1 as i grew up with it and i am at a loss as to who this can be.

I do not normally comment but wow... this story hit hard. It is beautifully written and the moment he saw the old woman I realised who he was here for. Impactful as tartarus.

Ah, sorry, I misread that.

Okay... I'm hooked already.

This is an amazing story. It took me a couple of seconds to catch that it was Megan. It has me intrigued and I'd like to see a sequel to this.

Your wish is granted. The next chapter will be out tomorrow. :yay:

I'm glad you went easy on me, because I noticed well after I posted the comment that this was just the first chapter. I has the dumb.

Happens to everyone. No worries. :yay:

"There, peeping among the cloud-wrack above a dark tower high up in the mountains, Sam saw a white star twinkle for a while. The beauty of it smote his heart, as he looked up out of the forsaken land, and hope returned to him. For like a shaft, clear and cold, the thought pierced him that in the end the Shadow was only a small and passing thing: there was light and high beauty for ever beyond its reach."
— J.R.R. Tolkien, The Return of the King

he glanced over his shoulder. The grandmother and granddaughter were walking away, but they both glanced back.

A little perplexed by this. It seems to me that the thing to do in this scenario is to offer to buy him, then and there, consequences be damned.

Ok, now I'm curious to see what's next.

“And that is why we must hurry,” said Megan. “This world can feel it too. If you are here, loose and unrestrained, it will try its best to stop the magic before it can be released.” She laughed, a much more youthful sound than her old body seemed able to produce. “We’ve stuck a feather up the world’s nose, and we need to run away before it sneezes.”

...so, the world doesn't want him there, and he wants to leave and they're trying to help him leave...so maybe, if they just ask the world very nicely to let them leave the world will say "ok!" and they'll leave and everybody gets what they want that way? :fluttercry:

really loving this story. it is time i dig out my old dvd of G1.

In just a few words you have defined the parameters of how the world works and given the characters motivation all at the same time - very nicely done.

Nothing bad could come of this, right?

Glad to see the little guy with better people now. I expected the miserable part to last longer, frankly. Not that I'm complaining. :)

Yeah, you'd think the world would have more sense that way...

Man... the world's an absolute yay.
The idea of an entire universe being... hostile, to whatever it doesn't like is honestly terrifying. And like how others have said, the world could have just let Rocky go home instead of giving him the equivalent of a slow painful death.

The most intense kinds of hatred rarely settle for something being merely away from them. They want it gone from existence completely.

I hate to say it, but the idea of the universe, or fate, or whatever being actively hostile toward magic and doing everything in its power to stamp it out really reminds me of another story. "Your memories removed, your body confused..."

What I really want to know is, WHY is this world so hostile to magic?

I'm mildly buzzing with nerves! I gotta know what happens next! God this is an amazing example of a thriller novel WHAT'S GOING TO HAPPEn!?

10504144 I doubt it would be 'hostile' to magic, however it could certainly make it unstable or unsupportable.

If magic relies on principles absent from this universe, it simply couldn't exist.

Anymore than we could exist if we went into a universe where neutrons had a net charge.

Seeing grandmum Megan reminds me a bit of Robin Williams' Peter Pan from Hook

That world wasn't really hostile to magic though, heck it had a mirror portal, that part was just Discord being a sore winner

This world is hostile to anything it doesn't understand or fit into it's neat little (and confining) boxes.

No, that's people.

Coors beer. Time to add the "horror" flag to the story.

10505618 chick-fil-a billboards from pony perspectives hmmmm.

Hey! I know of two people who will gladly pay $80,000 to have Coors illegally shipped east of the Mississippi, just so they can have some to celebrate with at a racetrack! :trollestia:

so many questions ,, and only one real way to get the answers.

What a hook!

Congrats! You have me hooked! Keep this up and you will end up on my "must reads" list. You're already very close.

Earth pony magic expressed through wishes, huh? Reminds me of Paradise in the PonyPOV series, specifically Jordan179’s interpretation.

I'm definitely hooked. If Dream Valley was part of Equestria and considerable time has passed since Megan was there last, Would Celestia and Luna recognize her when she shows up or would they have been born well after her last visit?

Huh so the story will be told as a flashback?

Gee willickers, what a concept! I loved this story. It would work perfectly well if you just ended it here, but I'm sure you have plenty more to tell

I think that this story ends with Megan dying. The torch has been passed, and it is no longer about her. She has returned home, to where her heart is. There is no kindness in sending her back to Earth, to wither slowly away a world apart from the ponies she loves.

I think so too, she is a hero of Equestria many times over, but I think she will meet her old friend Celestia once more

Doubtful. The story of Penny's adventure is irrelevant. The story being told is that of Megan going back to Equestria with her granddaughter. The fact that there was an adventure is important so that Penny will be able to take Megan's place as the hero for the ponies, but what the adventure was doesn't matter.

It's interesting how you have linked G1 to G4 and beyond. In fact, it links to a theory I have about what G5 will be like.

Only issue I have here in this chapter is that the whole group seemingly consists of ponies, where we saw Luster Dawn meeting with a group of creatures AND ponies before the book closed on Equestria.

Also, I’m curious how so much time could have passed for Equestria, and yet when Lodestone went over to Earth for years it was only 15 minutes for Equestria.

you are close but i am thinking of a different road. she is staying.

this chapter is just amazing as is the hole story.

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