During her coronation, Twilight Sparkle celebrates with her Mane Six friends after becoming Equestria's newest princess, but they suddenly take a dramatic alternation in life after being taken into the future by a mysterious comet! Now they've ended up in a modern-day world, where ponies are using modern technology! Twilight and her friends even discover future versions of themselves, and that life isn't what it used to be in the very past. Because of their discoveries, they must find a way to get back home.
Chapters (10)
Where’s Discord?
Will there be a sequel?
Not bad for a first story, can't wait to see more stories from you in the future.
That's quite the non-description description you've got there. By that I mean you don't even say what the plot of the story is, or the hook, or hint at what's going to happen. It's just a brief tease, but not one you'd read.
Edit: to be fair you do bring up a comet. But as to what actually happens in the story, as opposed to saying what the story represents meta-textually... Well, you're a bit lacking.
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Well, it's not perfect. I do struggle and tend to be 'lacking' because of my autism. So at least I tried.😔
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I'm not really a good story writer, so it's really hard for me to come up with new original ideas. But I'm sure Discord could return, even Cadance!
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It may take a lot of time, but I'll see what I can do.
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Hey, I commend the effort, and arguably writing a story's description is a difficult thing for anyone to do. My advice is to see how other stories with similar premises have their descriptions written. See what beats they're doing, how they're framing summary with hooks. Copy that form and apply it to your story.
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Okay, thanks for your feedback.
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And don’t forget about Celestia, Luna, and Flurry heart
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I certainly won't!
They traveled through time into the future! That's what happened.
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They certainly did!
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I’d also like to see how the allies are doing.
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Okay, what allies are we talking about? Fizzlepop Berrytwist or something?
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I was actually talking about the other creatures. I know that they are still in this universe because of Gallus and Yona appearing.
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Oh, Smolder, Silverstream and Ocellus are okay, I'm sure. I may add them in the sequel!
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What about Autumn blaze and the Kirin?
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They could also appear as well. Although I haven't seen what they would look like in 'future' form yet.
Pretty interesting.
Though a missed opportunity with how we didn't get to see how Luna and Celestia are doing in the future there. And reacting to the changes that the comet caused. Only thing we got was a mention them living in Silver Shoals and that was it. Which is disappointing..
Yeah.. just makes it sting a bit more on how The Last Problem didn't bother showing us how are Luna and Celestia doing after the timeskip even though their dumb retirement thing is what caused all of this to happen.(said retirement really caused Luna to get the short end of the stick too..)
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Yeah, we only saw Celestia and Luna in flashbacks in 'The Last Problem' and that was it. A real shame we didn't see them living in Silver Shoals during their retirement...
But I am planning to bring them back in a sequel. Maybe, based on your feedback, I could also add a post-credit moment featuring them looking around and seeing the changes, too!
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Post-credit moment?
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Yeah, of course! As a nice surprise.
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Wonder how big it might be?
Let me know if it that scene gets posted there.
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Will do! And thanks for your feedback!
OMG Best story EVER!!!
RIP a moment of silence for Granny Smith
SEQUEL!!! SEQUEL!!! SEQUEL!!!! SEQUEL!!! PLZZZ!!!
Please tell me when you finished the sequel! You just got yourself a new follower!
Is the sequel almost out?
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I'm still working on it! Don't worry, I'll let you know when it's done!
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I’m excited to see what Silver shoals, the Crystal Empire, and the lands neighboring the former kingdom
As I promised in the blog, I have read the story.
In my opinion, it's not all that great. It's not bad either, as the idea about the Mane Six coming into the future sounds like a good idea, but the story executed it a bit poorly. The writing, not so good. It has too many dialogues and barely any details on what is going on. The length of each chapter is short, and I think this story could have been a bit longer and a few more chapters. It also felt a bit rushed in the end and, as I said before, could have had more chapters between it.
And the idea of Future Twilight giving wings to Spike: strange in my opinion. I mean, no offense, but I don't think it's possible for an Alicorn to give wings to any other creature. Though then again, it's your story and you make the choices.
Other than that, I did enjoy it with my imagination. I give this story a 5.5/10
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My autism is the reason why the writing is not so good. I'm also not really a good story-maker, to be honest.
How is there a lotta things in my hair XDDDD this line is forever funny
Oh come on guys you don't need to be sad because Shadow Storm is right here to help you go back in your time
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Till All Are One!
Ummm...
Yeah its kinda GONE
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Never say that
As a autistic person myself
You need to find the spark inside
It may take time but You'll find it