• Member Since 4th Feb, 2012
  • offline last seen 1 hour ago


A teacher, student, writer, and opinionated reader. Retired from fanfic (mostly), but not writing. Responsible for the cleverpun's Critique Corner review series: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3

Recommended Groups/Resources

The Proofreader Group -- As long as you read the rules and are willing to vet people before asking them, this group is a fantastic resource for writers of all types.

The Big Master Review List -- A list of all reviewed stories with links to those reviews. It is maintained by Singularity Dream. Obviously such a list can never be truly complete, but SD does a fantastic job maintaining it. This is a great resource, whether you are an author, reviewer, or reader.

Writers and Reviewers Institute for Technical Excellence -- I've had excellent experiences with reviewers from this group; they are thorough and don't pull any punches. Sadly, they appear to be inactive at this time

Recommended Stories

  • Gateway Drug For Rainbow Dash, Daring Do was only the beginning. by bottled_up 1,097 words · 1,512 views · 152 likes · 4 dislikes
  • The Wrong Fork During a lull in the conversation at an upper class charity dinner, Rarity takes a moment to contemplate some commonly held assumptions made of Princess Celestia. Specifically, her table manners. by PoweredByTea 1,138 words · 13,175 views · 1,545 likes · 20 dislikes
  • A Good Princess Prior to the events of A Canterlot Wedding, Princess Celestia asks Cadance what ought to be done with the changelings that have been discovered living hidden in Equestria. Cadance's ruthless response surprises her. by HoofBitingActionOverload 6,190 words · 4,984 views · 368 likes · 7 dislikes
  • Happily Ever After Shining Armor will do anything to save his marriage. Anything. by Benman 2,697 words · 7,796 views · 491 likes · 13 dislikes

More Recommended Stories

  • Bonafide Bon Bon and Lyra's life together in Ponyville was perfect - and then Bon Bon showed up. by Sharp Spark 11,111 words · 17,743 views · 1,744 likes · 27 dislikes
  • The Destruction of the Self Buckwheat would like to be a farmer. But what he wants isn't important, and that's alright with him. by Cold in Gardez 6,147 words · 2,977 views · 500 likes · 13 dislikes
  • The Writing on the Wall Beneath the earth rests something beyond equine understanding. by Horse Voice 5,658 words · 26,362 views · 1,112 likes · 19 dislikes
  • Twilight, Revised Twilight Sparkle gets brainwashed. Mind controlled, sort-of Twilight x Celestia. Nightmare Moon too. by Vimbert the Unimpressive 33,727 words · 18,565 views · 836 likes · 69 dislikes

Taking Review Requests [OPEN] · 11:36am Jan 23rd, 2016

If [OPEN], I am accepting new requests. If [CLOSED], I am working on current requests (check back later :twilightsmile:)

If you follow me, then you are likely aware of my ongoing review series. In order to mix things up a little, I am now taking requests for stories to review. Like everything in life, there are some caveats:
*Only request reviews for one of your own stories.

Read More

"If Titanium Dragon is the final boss of Fimfiction, cleverpun is the optional boss that's even harder to beat!" — Horse Voice

"You're hard mode. Or maybe I'm hard mode and you're nightmare difficulty, where there are demonic spiders lurking around every corner and you only get one heart." — Titanium Dragon

The Best of my Stories

  • Blitzkrieg Poison Kills Assassins The ultimate action stallion ninja hero is back. In this critically acknowledged sequel, everypony's favorite demolitions expert must confront his old mentor. …And this time…it's poisonal… by cleverpun 2,921 words · 1,372 views · 102 likes · 8 dislikes
  • Pictures of Lily After purchasing a pin-up calender, Fluttershy learns that crushes don't always turn out quite the way you pictured. by cleverpun 3,641 words · 3,815 views · 254 likes · 11 dislikes
  • I Am Not the Actor After one of Pinkie's clones wins the paint-watching test, she slowly finds that "being yourself" is never as simple as it sounds. Especially when everypony has a different idea about who you are, and who you should be. by cleverpun 23,773 words · 8,226 views · 629 likes · 31 dislikes
  • If You Came to Conquer Nightmare Moon won. She defeated Celestia, broke the Elements, banished the sun. This all happened a very long time ago. So long ago, that she has had plenty of time to change her mind. Not that fixing it will be simple. by cleverpun 5,959 words · 16,148 views · 1,599 likes · 21 dislikes
  • “Princest Is Wincest,” It Said Luna reread the graffiti, but it came no closer to making sense. “Princest Is Wincest,” it said. It was confusing enough to be offensive; did nopony spell correctly anymore? Perhaps Tia would be able to explain it. by cleverpun 4,588 words · 16,052 views · 1,721 likes · 27 dislikes

The Worst of my Stories

Improvement is inevitable, and that means that not everything one writes is going to be good. This is a list of stories I wrote which are bad. Please start with stories besides the ones in this list. I could un-publish them, but even terrible writing has value sometimes. I could do better now, but they are important reminders of how far I've come.

“It's hell writing and it's hell not writing. The only tolerable state is having just written.”
― Robert Hass


Writing 101: Neologisms and Technobabble (How Much Is Too Much?) · 8:48am October 2nd

So I recently finished playing Tales of Berseria. Like many games in its genre, it was a dense experience, both in terms of gameplay and story. This density has many expressions, but one that I noticed in particular was its use of invented terms and technobabble. Here’s a partial list of some of the world-specific terms it uses;

* Malevolence – Evil energy. Related to the next item.
* Demonblight – A disease that turns people into demons.

Read More

Comments ( 155 )
  • Viewing 151 - 155 of 155

Dude... that trilogy was deep.

2332777 The problem with Mayael is that she turns you into a big target. That's the reason I gave up on building Kaalia: she just draws too much attention to herself. But I guess I still run Jhoira, so maybe that's not the best excuse :derpytongue2:

Sanguine+Exquisite is already going in there. The whole reason why I wanted to build it was because I realized how many ways there are to abuse Serra Avatar. I'm waffling between Ayli and Mayael, though. Mayael has stuff like Predator's Rapport and Dazzling Reflection to take advantage of the fact that the Avatar's P/T is equal to your life total.

2332764 To me, Atraxa seemed the most fun. The themes of the other decks didn't really appeal to me. She's also looking like a popular target for superfriends (free loyalty every turn), but I don't have anywhere near the budget for that.

The power level of my group is pretty high, so I'm used to lots of shenanigans anyway (Augustin stax, Narset infinites, Progenitus superfriends, the list goes on).

My version of Karlov is more midrange/gradual poke. It's mostly an excuse to play my favorite color combination, though, it started as a pre-con and didn't necessarily develop a major game plan. If you're going for lifegain-as-weapon, don't forget sanguine bond :raritywink:

  • Viewing 151 - 155 of 155
Login or register to comment

cleverpun's 2016 reading journal · 11:04pm Feb 4th, 2016

A common piece of writing advice is that to become a better writer, one should read a lot. There is truth to this, of course, depending on what one reads.

Read More