Sunset Shimmer's life was turned upside down in an instant, leaving her not only to battle her inner demons but to also try to make amends but it isn't easy to forgive or forget when someone has hurt you and it seems only a few at Canterlot High are willing to even try to see the good in her. Will the few friends she has be enough to stop her from doing something rash?
this story is pff to a great start. keep up the good work.
good job on this. i have seen and read many stories and this on caught my attention.
keep going with this.
hope to see more chapters sooner or later.
i have said this to many people but take your time and dont rush.
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Thanks for the feedback. Glad you like it so far.
I enjoyed this chapter. Spitfire stepping in to defend Sunset wad unexpected.
It wouldn’t be too long until someone else from the Wondercolts soccer team defends Sunset. Is Soarin’ a student or an alumnus?
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Soarin is a student and he will make an appearance soon.
I love that Luna is the first who helps Sunset after the formal fall
This story keeps getting better. I loved how you portrayed Spitfire at the beginning of this chapter.
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I am glad that you are enjoying this story.
Are Sunset and Sunburst related in this fic?
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Yes. (A lot will be explained through the story.)
thank you for this fine story,and thank you so very much for portraying luna like you have in your story. it is so refreshing,and she so deserves it. well done to you!
The foreshadowing... I always thought there was some serious self destructive thoughts running in Sunset's head...
Luna, what mischief are you up to?
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If you look at Sunset just before she transforms in to the demon in Equestria Girls, the look on her face seems to show surprise at what is happening to her.
I thumbs up this chapter.
Yay, another fix where Sunburst and Sunset are related!
Poor Sunny
Aah I'm enjoying this!
Hope to see more soon ;v;
JEEZE! Man hope Sunset tells Twilight all this sure it will make Celestia regret treating her the same way she treated her sister Luna!!
The fact that Princess Celestia willingly did this to Sunset while allowing a motherly realationship with Twilight and Cadence makes everything she did for Luna seem bittersweet. It’s even worse since Celestia somehow demolished many ponies’ lives for Luna and especially since Twilight and Sunset may or may not be the result of a eugenics program.
Did you mean "to"?
"wouldn't"?
an interesting story for sure. Though sometimes you fail to separate paragraphs when the speaker changes. That and some random little typos were the only problems I saw.
Trixie is awesome, but why was her hat smoking?
Trixie should do something about her smoking hat and Sunset has serious abandonment issues.
Ok, caught up. Not the best written fic, but far from the worst. I don't get why some people have issues with some of the clichés often seen in these kinds of fics (back scars, Chrys, horrid abuse, etc.), but I certainly don't mind them. I mean, the whole reason they become cliché in the first place is because they work so well as story elements. I also like some of the ideas being played with here involving Sunset's past. I don't know what there is or isn't original to this fic, but it's stuff I've not seen done in this way before, so I'm quite interested.
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you just took my words out of my mouth.......i dont know how to feel bout dat....
ARE YOU PHYCHIC?!?
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In a word...
yes.
Honestly, if I had a choice to live with either of the princesses... I would always go with luna In both worlds.
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Why the smoking hat?
I like it. The chapters are short and leave me wanting more. It helps me stay in the story and wanting to read on.
I really love How you are portraying Luna in this story.
wtf i caught up already...damn it
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Another great chapter!
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Breaks the tension and lights the mood of the scene.
Well, way to wack over the head with that one. ‘Oh yeah, you’ll be fine. You just need to find someone who loves you in a foreign world where everyone you know has a very legitimate reason to hate you. Shame you don’t have any family here; they make it way easier to find those people.’ Having friends is one thing, “love” is something different.
YES PLEASE! I enjoyed the insight into Sunset's feelimgs, and as always the banter between Celestia and Luna was great. No if Sunset punches Discord that would be awesome, like when Commander Sisko punched Q in that episode of DS9.
This! All of this. Oh, I want to see this picked apart from every angle: Celestia’s thoughts, Sunset’s desires, everything! I need more of this fic.
I find ironic that Discord’s counterpart works with the law.
That was cute.
So is this slight of hand or is Discord actually magical here?
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That would br telling.
So... wouldn't this be the Pony equivalent of being introduced to someone with the name 'the devil'? I'm pretty sure Discord is taught at . That would make me suddenly pretty wary too.
Oh shit. This may set things back twenty steps.
....dis gonna git gud
Some one is trouble!
look at that window! throws all trust out of it
Look at that PO teenager i quickly follow the trust
A wild Tempest appears!
Sunset uses Bluff.
It isn't very effective.
Tempest uses Snark!
It's super effective!
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The wild sunset retreated!
Short, but a great chapter! Keep it up!