Nobody has seen the Sirens since the Battle of the Bands, and nearly everyone is fine with that. Months later, Sunset Shimmer feels her entire life is going better then it ever was since the Fall Formal. She has her best friends, the school no longer hates her, and it's summer vacation.
One night on her way back home from band practice, she finds the three powerless Sirens who are now homeless. Deciding to be a nice person, she takes them in, but the question becomes how long will they stay? And what will happen to them in the future?
Commissioned by: Dashhole
Edited by The Myth and DBZorDie and InsanityCorps
Chapters (8)
it should be capitalized.
Eliminate the ]
No Rule 63 please.
That's all I found, nice work man!
I can't resist:
Awesome so far. Can't wait to see where this goes.
only*
This sentence is missing something.
resistant*
Statement? Stare?
anyone*
This sentence is weird as well.
gulp*
once tried to doom*
or
once nearly doomed*
Superfluous comma.
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Thanks
Read the first chapter and I like this story so far!
Can't wait to read more!
This story is pretty awesome so far, keep up the good work
This is amazing! Next chapter, please!
I like how Adagio make conditions there, good job!
This is certainly interesting. I'm curious how it will unfold. Great start!
Amazing start waiting for more chapters
good start. i want to see how it goes.
I'm glad that all three of them moved in with sunset, it's a lot less common than only sonata, or aria, and even rarer adagio but it is a really great start keep up the good work
great chapter
so far this charming me much
I hope you can upload another chapter
please
Chuck Norris wants another chapter...
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Wrong "too". Should only be one 'o'.
Uh... first Equestria Girls, clearly seen walking and using magic near effortlessly.
Add a 't' on the end to make it "meant". Take out the "a", and it should be 'EMT', e.g Emergency Medical Technician. Dunno what you were going for with "EMC".
Don't overuse a word in a sentence, try "They got everything they could on their pizza's" instead.
That's 'welcome'.
The word you're looking for would be 'redeemed'.
That would be 'were'.
Supposed to be 'you', not "your".
I love that this adresses Sunset's plans and future after the school, and reason to even stay in the human world. It is always highly surreal for me when this is not adressed, as if the entire human world is the high school and Sunset got brainwashed into needing to attend when she arrived or something like that.
But I think maybe you went a bit too far in making the sirens suddenly super sympathetic and nice. It's not harming the story, but it's a bit of a pet peeve of mine when someone takes a villain (usually it's Chrysalis though) and makes them much less evil than they were portrayed as, explaining their actions in canon as some sort of act of desperation or another excuse. Usually because in the villain's canon appearance we get a good enough look at their personality to be able to tell that they aren't in such a situation and are in fact evil to a certain degree.
Anyway, as I said, this isn't harming the story at all, because on it's own it certainly works, and it would be unfair of me to judge this direction based on how much I personally encounter similar things in other fanfics.
Watching Lingo, ey? Never knew equestria girls took place in the Netherlands...
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It used to be an American TV game show
Yeah baby, here we go!
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Wow, this was great so far, can't wait to see the next chapter.
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I still question how I didn't get the reference, but still it's a dang good reference
Hahaha. Those poor fools. They didn't realize that NOBODY messes with someone under the protection of the Phoenix Queen of Canterlot High.
Huh....I wished you wrote the part where Sunset beat the crap out of Gilda and the others
Fist of the North Star sonata version was genius , loved this chapter and glad sunset got to teach those girls a lesson ( nice job including starlight glimmer now that she has been introduced in the show)
Should be 'her'.
Wrong name.
What do you mean it doesn't excuse them for what they did if you were in their shoes, if you're dad said he wished he never had you. You'd be says something different I guarantee it.
There was a lot of telling not showing going on in this chapter. It just glossed over all the events that would've made for excellent character development in the span of a few paragraphs. That was my biggest problem with the chapter. I understand wanting to move the story along, but those events would have been perfect to write some chapters about to show how the Sirens and Sunset's friends started to like each other.
i would liked to see some things more worked. Like the fact that they know the applejack´s grandfather that would be an awesome chapter. but you are too focused in sunset and ignore the other mane 6 and that´s a lot of wasted material for more chapters.
i am loving this fanfic, the things that you are doing are excellent. You really know what you´re doing
REMEMBER "SHOW MORE AND TELL LESS" the same develoment that you are doing with sunset shimmer/ dazzlings you should do it with the mane six with the dazzlings and sunset
but is a pretty good chapter
dont dissapoint me
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I was commissioned to do a five chapter story. Meaning I have to do an intro, a chapter for each siren, and the ending. I had to make with what I had.
that good chapter
I hope the next chapter soon
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Pretty much this, exactly. This is probably the last time that I try to read one of your commissioned stories. It's easy to tell when a story of yours is commissioned, because the quality of writing is that much lower.
5857355 And the fact the description mentions the word commissioned doesn't clue you in?
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Excuse me?
See, I already knew it was commissioned. I was simply pointing out that the commissioned stories are consistently of a much, much lower quality than the non-commissioned stuff, to the point that one could easily identify the commissioned stories, even without the "commissioned-by" tag in the description.
5863923 You're consistently of a much, much lower quality!
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Hey! None of that. If she doesn't want to read it she doesn't read it. She has a right to her own opinion.
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Thank you.
Sorry if I came across as disagreeable.
aww so cute! Please continue
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I had to go back and check that- you're so right XD Oh my god those mistakes doe
THE PICTURE MADE ME READ THIS, BUT THIS CUTENESS IS MAKING ME STAY!
SONATA!
I cannot wait to hear more of this story!!! XD
NEED NEXT CHAPTER!!!
I thought this was cute. I don't have an objective verdict, so I hope this suffices. Hope you don't mind, but I just love giving my honest opinion, be it praise
or disgust 
Jeez, if that shit happened to me I be just as mad as aria, this chapter was full of feels man, and I loved it, it was freaking amazing the way sunset found this old movie, which I could totally see becoming popular because of the backstory, but the clincher for me was the message at the end of the movie where she thanked aria for all of her support, that just made me die inside(in a good way), this chapter was so worth the wait, keep up the good work
Looking at the cover....
Reading the story.....
It's official Sunset Shimmer is an erogame protagonist.
THE COVER IS A LIE!
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All aboard the "yes" train.
Adagio:
Aria:
... Uwha? Am I missing something?
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Crap, thought I fixed that. Sorry, it's the latter