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Hearths Warming Day is almost upon the village of Ponyville and no two ponies are more excited then Sweetie Belle and Button Mash. For the energetic gamer, it's a chance to get as many new games as he wants, but for Sweetie Belle she's excited because she'll be living a dream. After a year of saving their money, she and her sister are going to the Manehatten Hearths Warming Show where all the best actors, musicians, and performers play for one night only.

However, when disaster strikes leaving Sweetie Belle's dreams shatterd, Button resolves to help his best friend.

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an accident involving Derpy Hooves, parasprites, gasoline, peanuts, and a cart full of fireworks.

Derpy... What did you do this time?
Great story, by the way :pinkiehappy:

wow that was awesome :pinkiegasp:

Ha ha, that was great! Bravo! That's what it's all about!

First SweeiteMash story i'v seen in a while. And the best!:twilightsmile:

Amazing story man it made my day :trollestia:

i found this sad and very touching and always pulling at the heart strings as you keep reading the story, this is by far the best hearths warming eve story i have read thus far good job sir or madam you get 10 claps for the good storyline, plot, keeping it at a good pace, using my fav ship and it relates to the season right now so i thank you for this great work of written art, and that i was able to read it, good job, you earn a fav a like and a follower keep up the good work

A sweet mash up.


I see what i did there. :shifty:

Beautiful and perfect in every way.

I really, really wanted to like this. I think the way the story was designed and the general theme was good, but there was just something that kept punching me in the face.

All of the damn meta/real life references. I know Button Mash, by his very nature, is a slightly meta character, but there is more to it then just adding in real world games and calling it good. Every time I saw a real world reference it just sucked me right out of the story, and made me groan in annoyance at how forced and obnoxious they felt.

An interesting take of the Gift of the Magi, but I think the way you used Video Games and pop culture in the story was quite lazy, and the story suffered for it.

I'll give it a thumbs up, but I can't justify a fave on this one. Thank you for making another ButtonBelle, it is nice to see these two getting more attention.

-Lumino

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Aw, sorry to hear that. I really like Drama King so I was hoping you'd like it too. Oh well. I guess I did over do it with the references, but I'm one of those people who doesn't mind them personally. Maybe I should have lessened them, but what's done is done. Thanks for the thumbs up. Maybe I'll do better in the next SweetieMash idea I get

Wow...That was beautiful...It was heart warming to be honest. I'm glad I got to read a great Button Mash story! It's stories like this that make a Button Mash Tag required on FimFiction! A Spike moustache for you! :moustache:

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I'm honored you've read my story. :raritywink:

With me, I even have trouble imagining Minecraft in universe, despite how awesome "Don't Mine At Night" is. I just start thinking of all of the implications of having computers and the internet in Equestria. I may not like EG, but Twilight had no idea how to use a computer, therefore it is impossible to assume that they are fairly common. I tend to imagine most games as incredibly crude, like 80's arcade cabinets or such.

Button Mash, by his very nature, causes waves in that understanding of Equestria. Finding a middle ground is one of the biggest challenges in writing him. He's a simple character, but writing him is anything but.

I look forward to seeing what else you can produce. Keep up the good work!

-Lumino

first YOU ARE AWSOME!
second Pip and Dinky ref!:pinkiehappy:
third: YOU ARE AWSOME!
fourth: any chance of seeing a future epilouge where sweetiebell ends up fufilling her promise to marry them?

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Who says I won't have a possible Squeal? Hint hint

Yeah, I know some of this isn't so much related to the Button's fandom from the Ask the Crusader's blog, but I never read it. I only know about Button Mash from the episode he had as well as what I heard about him on forums. That being said, I hope you all enjoyed this and I'll take praise or criticism for what I've wrote.

No one cares. All the other iterations of Button Mash I've seen are annoying. This is super cute. It needs to replace the other shite.

That good sir, was quite the story. My scorpion nipples lactated at the end :)

So heartwarming.

this is an adorable story.

words cant describe how awesome this was.

This was a wonderful story.:twilightsmile:
Thank you and a Merry Christmas to you to Rated. :scootangel:

I had tears in my eyes for almost the last third of the story. Thank you for such a beautiful fic. :heart:

please don't be another gift of the magi sapfest, please done be-

dangit.

A lovely little Hearts Warming tale.

And yes, I prefer the typo because it makes sense.

I think the best I can say I had for rare games, or at least second hand worth, was Nights and controller, and the Gold Cartrige Zelda for NES.

I wonder, given agility, just how good is Scootaloo at DDR? :scootangel:

Cute little story. Glad I read it.

Are you going to make a sequel? :twilightblush:

“Green glass balls next to purple?! Outrageous! I should slap myself for thinking such a thing. Red should go with green and purple with blue!”


I see what you did there :trollestia:

:rainbowkiss::heart::raritystarry::scootangel: SO. FLIPPIN. ADORABLE!!!!!!!!!!!

Words cannot describe how wonderful this story was.

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Maybe a Valentine's Day story?

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That was simply marvelous.

Wondrous Work. :moustache:

ohey look what's featured :pinkiehappy:

D'aww, that was a cute little Christmas story, fave'd

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! snfdnowenffkdsldfvlcx-- please hold while I suffer from the unbearable amounts of cuteness- :twilightblush: :facehoof:

Okay, this was perfect. The pacing was wonderful, word choices were great, and Button Mash was amazingly written considering you haven't watched the pilot and only heard about it in the fandom. This was a win for me, it truly showed the spirit of christmas. :pinkiehappy:

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Oh I've seen the pilot and videos surrounding him, I just never read the blog he originated from "Ask the Crusaders"

Beautiful, simply beautiful. :pinkiesad2::heart:

:pinkiegasp: I LOVE THIS! :rainbowkiss:

I had a feeling on how it was going to end by the midpoint of the story, but never the less, it's the best, heartwarming ending to expected in this special holiday story! :fluttercry: It... nearly brought tears to my eyes! Well done as always!

oooh. Got it. :facehoof: :derpytongue2:

That was the most beautiful Hearth's Warming fanfic I have ever read! :twilightsmile:
Could use some minor tweaking... and you missed out a couple of words.
What about Opal? Did she escape the fire, too? :unsuresweetie:

That was all kinds of cute, thanks for sharing this. :twilightblush:

However, when disaster strikes leaving Sweetie Belle's dreams shatterd, Button resolves to help his best friend, but it will take a personal sacrifice to do so.

I think it would have been nice if you didn't mention this last part in the description, or at least hinted to it in a different way. It would have been more entertaining from a readers prospective if I didn't know in advance Button was going to make a personal sacrifice and it didn't take long to figure out what that was going to be.

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OH SHIT! I forgot about Opal! Umm.....

The power of the flames turned... Opal into... FIREROAR!
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Blessed by the powers of the eternal flames of Anonia, Fireroar uses her magical powers against the forces of darkness and to cleanse the world of it's sins through purifying flames!

Or... I just simply forgot her.... oops

GMP

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You could say Opal was at fluttershys place, easy fix.

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This is now canon with the story.

3677206 You can always add that to the story. You've got time.

Omigosh... that was so beautiful! :heart::heart::heart:

Honestly, Button could probably have written a great letter to Celestia with what he learned that day :twilightsmile:

Awesome story! Lots of warm fuzzies. :pinkiehappy:

Meanwhile, Sweetie Belle was thinking about her relationship with the colt that had only moved to town only a few months ago.

Only need one 'only'

With that said, the students watched silence as Button Mash ran out the room, his bladder guiding him down the hall.

watched 'in' silence

She thought of her sister, whose was a dress designer, but in truth her special talent was finding gems.

whose --> who

“What?” Sweetie Belle could only say as Button Mash start sucking on his milkshake at intense speeds.

only --> barely?
start --> started

She watched as the giant spiked turtle demon fall into the red hot lava while the red plumber pony she had been playing exited the castle.

fall --> fell

Buttons wined.

Buttons --> Button
wined --> whined

around the tree , the various

Sweetie Belle sighed, a dreamy smile on stretching across her face.

Don't need 'on'

Once he was done, Button dash out of his room,

dash --> dashed

Suddenly his fears of moving were replaced with an even worse won

won --> one

At the rare chance that hedid make a friend

hedid --> he did

bought a shiver down Button’s spine.

'bought'? I think you meant brought, but that doesn't work either.

This only made Sweetie Belle lower her head even more as both Scootaloo and Apple Bloom glared at her for mention them.

her for mentioning them --> him for mentioning them

only to final return today on the last day of the year before the break

final --> finally

“They're nothing to talk about. I just want to be alone.”

They're --> There's

He was even surprised the day after when he was facing the biggest crisis of his life that day…

don't need 'that day'

but I learned he family moved soon after we did

he --> his

Rubbing his tears away, he turned around and muttered. “Sorry, you must think I’m kind of a baby for crying like this.”

double spaced at beginning of sentence

Button’s mouth dropped before he started checking his heard to make sure he heard that right

heard --> head

he knew that there was only way he was ever going to get those tickets

there was only 'one' way

who levitated Sweetie Belle her back to her hooves.

don't need the first 'her'

He then saw what made her gasp and cursed himself for not getting rid of the glass case where is former prized jewel was

is --> his

Note: Check through the 'and's a lot of them were missing commas.

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