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Azure_Shadow


I write about high school girls on a site about ponies...nope, nothing out of the ordinary here.


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It's the first day of Spring Break, so the Rainbooms and the Dazzlings decide where better to spend it then at the beach? While there, Sunset is asked by Adagio if she'd be willing to see something alone with her.

Why does this request both excite and terrify Sunset at the same time?

Many thanks to a bunch of wonderful people who aided me in this endeavor. Thanks to Harmony Charmer for all of her support in the creation of this fic, BRyeMC for the edits, Calm Wind for the cover art, and all those who read the fic and told me that they enjoyed it.

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Sundagio? That's good

5810195 We all need a little Sundagio.

FINALLLYYYY the dawwww is up

SUNNY! WWHHHYYYYY!?

....On the other hand, nice work:pinkiehappy:

5810495 Many thanks my friend. Don't worry, this has no effect on your fic. Each fic has their own universe!

(Please don't forget to like it. I need it badly.)

I'm not the only one who sung the title, right? :rainbowlaugh:

5810710 When in doubt, name your fic something that sounds like the lyrics to a popular Disney song!

Haven't read it yet, but it must be very good because at the moment it's featured :D

It sounds quite epic. Time to dive in!!!!!!!!!!!
(jumps into story)

I wholeheartedly approve of this pairing and how you pulled it off. Well done!

Im not the world biggest fan onthis ship or human fic but i flipping loved this the characters were perfect the dialoge was funny this is wonderful:ajsmug::raritystarry::yay::pinkiehappy::twilightsmile::rainbowlaugh::moustache::scootangel:

Daaazzling, shiiimmering splendor. Tell me, 'Dagi, now when ... uh, hmm... "der"? Nevermind.

To to the top of the list you go for tonight. :twilightsheepish:

“SUNSET!” Adagio blurted out as she glanced back at Sunset.Her loud shout reached her friend's ears as she shook her head and looked at her

you forgot a space there.

“Yeah, good atmosphere, cool location, awesome food, ten out of ten would eat there again.” Sunset added

Confirmed Sunset works for IGN

9.5/10
Needs more Sundagio. also fire, needs more fire.
-The goblin arsonist.

We’ll let you know when we start packin’ up girls

You know, this is one of these times where a comma is really important.

5811954
She knows what she meant. Honesty, remember? :pinkiecrazy:

Isn't Shining x Shimmer.

You done fucked up.

5811954

What, you don't pack up your girls when you're heading home?

I've had plenty of sunburns, but not as bad as Rarity's:raritydespair:.

To be honest, I don't usually like bisexual fictions (to clarify, I have NOTHING against gay/lesbian couples) but this was written so well, I couldn't help but enjoy it! :pinkiehappy: awesome job!:rainbowkiss:

I'm sure I'll come back with more feedback when I'm done. I'm enjoying the concept so far as well. (I'm at the part where the Dazzlings just arrive).

I'm rather new to writing, but I want to offer one bit of hopefully helpful critique—so please take this in a good way. ;) Even though I'm probably 1/8th of the way in, already the LUS is nearly driving me to twitch.

I'd say it makes a sense to describe characters by appearance when there's some interaction going on where they don't know each others' names yet (and can be useful to an extent when there are this many characters in a single scene), but I feel the flow of the story would be quite a bit stronger with simply using their names more often. So again, not a harsh critique but still a helpful observation I hope.

Be back with more post-SunDagio, heh.

5813680

Heh, indeed.

And then to Azure -
Them warm fuzzies by the end. I'm always a sucker for the "sunset" metaphors, so those didn't go unnoticed either. ;)

5813454 Do you even know what bisexual means? :rainbowhuh:

5813874 I meant like gay/lesbian. I get them mixed sometimes:twilightsheepish: sorry

Well, I'll give you this, the story was cute as all hell, and that ending was perfect.

That being said, the formatting and grammar could use a lot of work. There's a lot that editing could do for this story. The concept and execution were great, and for that you get a like and a favorite, but I'd just like to point out...

For all intensive purposes, she decided to drop both subjects.

ALL INTENSIVE PURPOSES

That should be "all intents and purposes". That's the only thing that really stuck out to me like a sore thumb. That and I don't know if that's the correct place to use the phrase, but it reads well enough so that isn't too big a deal.

5815423 Alrighty then, thank you for your input and the fav. Admitably grammar is something I really need to work on with my fics. :ajsleepy:

A whole new world...
A new fantastic point of view
No one to tell us no
Or where to go
Or say we're only dreaming...

5815453
Nothing wrong with that, we all have things to work on. Like I said, I loved the story anyway, so I wouldn't worry too too much about it. :rainbowkiss:

Lesbian love (sniff) it's so beautiful :fluttershysad:

Q07

This... this is so good! I love, and I mean absolutely LOVE, SunDagio fics! This was one of the best setups and one of the best payoffs that I've ever had the pleasure of reading! :pinkiehappy: That kiss was so satisfying! Ahhh.... great story.

Also, I like how you had the girls go to Myrtle Beach their freshman year, simply because that was my family's vacation spot for most of my childhood. At least until I was about ten anyway :derpytongue2:

First time reading horse women romance between two female characters. Not bad, not bad at all. Still not sure how I feel about it. :rainbowlaugh:
I thought it was good though. :twilightsmile: Sunset fics are always awesome.

I don't ship Sundagio as much, but this is still pretty cute, and rather well-written. Good job!

I loved it! :heart:
You should do more sundagio friend :pinkiehappy:
I hope so :fluttershysad:
you are good :twilightsmile:

I loved this fanfic :heart:
maybe you should make a continuation :pinkiehappy:
but that is a decision that only you were to take :twilightsmile:
good story :raritywink:

Now Adagio knows what it's truly like to be adored without any freaky mind control. :twilightsmile:

Unless you count her body as hypnotic... :raritywink:

6307717 I think we all count her body as that.

This is the fic that does it- the nail in the coffin. I officially ship it.

“Dazzlings?” Adagio asked as she gave a slightly flirty look to Sunset.

Ha!

i love this and it is s cute

“Ok, it’s twenty three-nineteen.

TWENTY-THREE NINETEEN! WE HAVE A TWENTY-THREE NINETEEN!

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It's been so long since I've read my own story, I forgot the references I put into it. :rainbowlaugh:

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