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CrazedLaughter


I write weird stuff.

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Jack Spicer and Wuya find themselves in a strange new land without Shen Gong Wu. Together, they must find out how the way of this new world works so they may be able to conquer it and enslave it's inhabitants.

Of course, this may prove difficult as Wuya is in spectral form and the "Evil Boy Genius" isn't too bright. Join this dynamic duo in their quest to rule the pony world!

I am reformatting this one myself. It is a reformat of a greentext I wrote around S4 based on Xiaolin Showdown

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Two things
1. Comedy Gold
2. Oh boy!:facehoof:
In all honesty though, if Jack had not been up against plot armored martial artists he MIGHT actually have won in the end

GASP

Xiaolin Showdown! This gon' be good.

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It's already fully written too from 3 years back. so all it needs is proper formatting for FiM rather than 4chan

you know I kinda hope the CMC help Jack turn to good I mean he really is a genius imagine what good he could do with all his inventions

This can only end one of two ways; a lynching or a bit of comedic irony. :twilightoops:

Who wants to bet Pinkie's gonna make Wuya blowup again? :applejackconfused:

I always was rooting for Jack in the show.:pinkiehappy:

It's rare that the villain comes off as the underdog.

You have something fun going here. Nice work.:twilightsmile:

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Thank you. I mean, it is fully written. and theres some screw looses in the final chapters I'll try to fix. But I'm glad it's been enjoyable thus far

Jack was honestly my favorite character on the show and here I fear when the CMC turns on him cause he generally seems to like them well at least scoot and he was able to help her fly making her number 2 dream come true (after her cutie mark)

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I do my best in keeping Jack in character. I have noticed in most fanfictions that hes far less dopey or smarter than usual. others have him at sudden great levels of power or give him too many deus ex machinas. I hope my version of jack has been entertainig thus far

This is hilarious and Jack is completely in character here. The only thing I don't like is the caps lock when they are yelling. An exclamation point would work just as fine without cappsing a whole sentence.

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well I mean it's no doubt that he is really smart I mean he was able to build a time machine for Pete's sake altho it was limited but that was for power source reasons but I agree Jack is really smart but tends to be forgetful like using a shen gon wu as a power source but still it's amazing what he can actually make

This is really entertaining I remember watching the cartoon and enjoying it (though hated Omi) I know they came out with another show but the fact that the animation switched to CG for the showdowns really turned me off so I never really got into it long enough to find out if it was any good.

Anyways looking forward to the rest.

I only had to read the title to know that Jack Spicer will always fail, I have seen the show and my god is this character the best *cough* worst *cough* at the job of beating a group of 4 people to acquire relics of immense power. I got jacked by Jack.

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The sequel, Xiaolin Chronicles, is absolutely TERRIBLE.

So terrible, Christy Hui and Warner Bros. decided it isn't canon.

Didn't Jack actually conquer the world and defeat all the other villains in the 'Bad Future' that came about because Omi wasn't around.

I really like that Jack has developed a bond with Scootaloo, and she seems to reciprocate it after he made her that helipad. I just fee bad thinking of what might happen if she learns that Jack and Wuyu are both bad guys.

I'm starting to wonder if maybe Scootaloo can do what Omi failed to do and manage to actually get Jack to switch to good. Omi came close, but Jack was too afraid of failing at being good to give up on his evil. Maybe Scootaloo can give him the courage he needs to take those first steps.

Wow, he may not have let go of his evil plans for domination of his world, but that he is willing to play the hero to save another world solely on his friendship with Scootaloo is a big step for him. He may be evil, but deep down he's a lot closer to good Jack then he may want to admit.

Make better use of periods. And commas.

Really awesome and wonderful story. Any chance of a sequel?

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Probably not. The story, I feel, is perfect as is

You left in all the > s on this chapter.

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Holy crap. I didn't even notice. I'll fix it when i get home

He wrote down "drop off the alicorn amulet here in the clubhouse, will pick up later..Regards - Jack"

I thought this was just Jack being an idiot until I read the next chapter. Looks like Alicorn Amulet was an error, since when the CMC read it out they say:

"Hey! It just says what we were gonna do anyway and leave the Shen Gong Wu here. But he says he'll pick it up later"

Since they were getting the mirror, this is an error.

I can't be bothered to go through and correct all the various grammar errors and stuff, but in general, this is a pretty nice, succinct story. Does what it wants to do and wraps up. 6/10, held my attention the whole way through, not special but it does what it does well.

Considering the abundance of complete crap on this website with a ton of likes, it's a bit sad this doesn't have more; but at least your other story is getting attention.

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I understand. It was originally a greentext story I had converted and I'm not too great with my grammat invthe first place. I'm glad it was ok enough though

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Well it got a like from me. Glad you've made more stuff.

Well, it was funny, I wonder if Twilight can manage to 'reform' Jack... Also... What happened to 'Good Jack'?

Jack is not that kind of evil like Hannibal or Wuya, he just want to prove that he is important and he thinks conquer the world would do that. In the series it was proved that Jack have a good side, just it hard to get rid from bad habit. Not mentionong evil offer an easyer way, but i could see Jack be redempted by the natural kindness of the ponies.

I agree, xiaolin chronicles nothing more, than a parody of the original show and yeah i also feel that after season one they made Jack a completely idiot, never ever winning anymore important showdowns. But i hope Applejack's hat come out unscatched:fluttershysad:

It is a possibility, Jack truly showed that he too had a good side and it not at all impossible that Scoot could reform Jack. I mean Fluttershy reformed Discord and Twilight reformed Starlight and they forgive them their past deeds even if it was hard to them first.

As Chase said a person only could be evil (or in this case good) if they do it from their own free will. Jack can't change unless he decide to do so.

And I've actually managed to learn a lesson in this world...and that is....THAT FRIENDSHIP IS MAGIC!" Jack's blast had now fully overtaken Wuya's, smashing her entire body in a gigantic beam.

I knew that he will say that at some point!:scootangel::twilightsmile:

It was an interesting journey, the characters were well made and felt real without OOC-ness. While you may not plans a next story you may could make spin-offs about this.

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I've thought about it. but at the moment i'm working on my big main story

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Ok no hurry, good luck to your main story!

Interesting. Bit light on proper English throughout the chapter, but understandable considering this used to be greentext. Can't say I'm a fan of Jack's attitude, but I suppose I'm just remembering him with a pair of nostalgia goggles.

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He gets his moments. Such as during the first showdown

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Eh. I dropped the story after the third chapter. The grammar eventually got to me and nothing else was really keeping me hooked.

I kept expecting Jack to insult Twilight for sounding like Omi (Same VA), but otherwise nostalgia all around. I miss this show.

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