Chapter 7: The Last Day
Sunset's available funds were starting to wear thin, so on Sunday morning, the group grabbed a quick, greasy fast-food breakfast before heading to the mall. Everybody else in Sunset's circle of friends had their own plans for Sunday, so it was just the "Equestria Club".
"So what's this 'mall' place like?" Starlight asked as they settled in on the bus.
"Huge," Sunset said. "There's...there's no real Equestrian equivalent for it." She went through her wallet, wincing. "We won't be able to do any actual shopping, but I think I can at least pop for lunch at the food court."
"Well, it's not as if we'd have any use for anything we'd buy here back in Equestria anyway," Twilight said. "Just the experience will be enough."
"Window shopping is pretty fun," Starlight said. "I've been doing a lot of that lately with...well...you know."
"So what kind of shopping are we talking about here, anyway?" Ember asked.
"Well," Sunset said thoughtfully, "about two-thirds of the stores at the mall sell clothes, shoes, and accessories. There's also some music stores, some book stores, a video game store, about five hair salons, a couple of nail salons...oh, then there's the specialty stores, the jewelry stores, that place that has all the overpriced gift baskets of smoked meats and cheeses, ummm..." She thought. "Well, the movie theater of course, and the food court..." She tilted her head. "Bunch of other places. Honestly, I only ever go to like, five stores. I mean, when I'm with the girls, we do a lot of window-shopping, but I never really pay much attention unless I see something I really want, y'know?" The bus stopped with a squeal of brakes, and Sunset looked out the window. "Well, here we are," she said.
The girls filed off the bus with about half the passengers and walked down a sidewalk flanked by a dozen evenly-spaced skinny palm trees planted in a narrow dividing island. At the intersecting curb, cars were coming and going at a steady clip. Sunset led them up another sidewalk; they emerged on an expansive concourse. The out-of-towners looked up...and up...and their jaws dropped.
"Holy cow," Starlight said, eyes wide.
"This is a store?" Moondancer gasped.
"This is a mall," Sunset said.
"It looks like a castle," Ember said, clearly impressed.
"It's bigger than any castle I've ever seen," Starlight said.
"It's bigger than Celestia's castle," Twilight added in an awed tone.
Sunset laughed. "I don't think it's that big," she said. "But it's pretty big." She frowned. "And if we get split up, it could be a problem. Hmm." She tapped her finger against her cheek. "Alright. At the main mall directory, they have mall maps you can take for free. We'll each take one. If we get split up, we'll pick a landmark in the mall, a place we can meet up." Sunset clapped her hands together and rubbed them briskly. "Alright! Let's go in."
The group approached a series of glass double doors which were admitting a steady trickle of people in either direction. There were five sets of doors in a row; when Sunset opened one door, the girls filed into a space roughly the size of Sunset's living room which was tiled with black marble, dotted with potted plants, and led to another row of glass double doors. At either end of the doors, a framed map of the mall hung on the wall; below each map was a row of free-standing wire racks boasting various colorful pamphlets. Some of them were ad circulars, some were coupon leaflets. Sunset walked over to these, scanned them briefly, and extracted several folded maps of the mall on glossy paper, which she distributed among the girls. "There," she said. Twilight and Moondancer immediately began reading the maps with interest. Ember shoved hers into her pocket, while Starlight carefully tucked hers away.
The group proceeded into the mall proper. They were greeted by garish storefronts to the left and right; the broad, open mall that stretched out seemingly endlessly before them was decorated with small islands of potted trees, wooden benches, trash receptacles, and standing ad placards. In the wide entrance atrium stood a broad concrete fountain that sprayed water several feet into the air.
"Wow," Starlight breathed. "This is a shopping center? It's more like...like some kind of plaza!"
"It's a bit of both," Sunset said.
Moondancer looked all around and drew in on herself. "So many people," she muttered.
"It...is pretty crowded," Twilight said. "Is it always like this?"
"More or less," Sunset said. "Actually, it's usually worse. Today's Sunday, Sundays are slow days at the mall."
"This is a slow day?" Starlight echoed, eyes wide as she scanned the dozens of people coming and going.
"Yeah, tons of people go to church on Sunday or just sleep in," Sunset said.
"Church?" Ember asked.
Sunset shook her head. "Not a subject I wanna get into. Let's just say it's something you probably wouldn't be interested in and leave it at that."
"I'll lend you the copy of the Holy Book I borrowed from Sunset sometime," Twilight said. "I find it fascinating, studying this world's history through religion."
"Those sound like two really boring words," Ember said. "Think I'll pass."
"I'd like to read that sometime," Moondancer said. She turned in a slow circle, taking in the closest stores. "Are we going into any of these places?"
Sunset bit her cheek, her brow furrowed as she studied the closest shops. "No point going into Cards & Tchtochkes," she said. "People only go in there if they need a card. Or a tchotchke." She studied the next store over. "We could go into Pop's Music..."
"Pass," Starlight said. "I think we all had enough music yesterday to last a few years."
Sunset chuckled. "Fair enough."
"Let's just walk for a bit, have a look around," Twilight suggested. She studied her mall map. "If we get split up, we can meet back...hmm...there! The fountain plaza at the center of the mall."
"Works for me," Sunset said. "Let's try not to get split up, though. Keep to the left, we can walk around more slowly and not get caught up in the mall-walkers."
"Mall-walkers?" Ember asked.
Sunset pointed at a middle-aged couple in workout clothes who were walking at a brisk pace; groups of senior citizens, younger people, and out-of-shape people with noticeable weight problems were right alongside them. "There are people who come to the mall just to walk," Sunset explained. "It's good exercise. Of course, the walkers are supposed to come early and clear out before the stores open, but you'll still see mall-walkers throughout the day, especially on Sunday."
"They come to this incredibly fascinating place just to walk?" Starlight asked.
"Well, after all, to most humans, the mall isn't all that special," Sunset said with a shrug. "It's just here and it's a place we go when we're bored or need to do some shopping."
"Or lose some weight, apparently," Ember said.
The girls walked the length of the mall's main plaza on the first floor, looking around with interest. There were clothing boutiques, jewelry stores, a comic book and trading card shop that Sunset referred to somewhat disparagingly as 'the nerd store', places that sold handbags and wallets and other assorted accessories, mostly made of leather. There were 'gift stores' that seemed to sell nothing but the kind of junk you'd buy as a last-minute 'gee, I forgot to get you a gift' gift. There was a toy store, a couple of hair salons, a bank (which Sunset stopped at to get some more money out of the ATM), and one place that caught Starlight's attention with its interesting blue sign. "Equal Rights Vape Club?"
Sunset groaned. "It's a shop for vaping enthusiasts," she said.
"Vaping?"
"It's..." Sunset frowned. "Okay, you know how tobacco was a thing for a while in Equestria, but it fell out of fashion pretty fast?"
"Ugh, yeah," Starlight said with a grimace. "I remember reading about that one time. Ponies used to actually put burning leaves in their mouths and suck on them! Gross."
Ember raised an eyebrow. "Really? Hardcore!"
"And toxic," Twilight said.
"Yeah, well...tobacco's been a thing in this world for hundreds of years," Sunset said. "Especially the last couple of centuries. Only recently, they've been banning smoking in public places pretty much everywhere. A lot of people are pissed about that, so someone invented these electronic cigarettes that, I dunno, somehow they're supposed to be less disgusting than blowing cigarette smoke in everybody's face? It's still a pretty new thing, so there's still a lot of debate about it, but it's created a whole new niche industry." She shook her head. "A couple of the teachers at CHS vape. I think Snips and Snails are doing it too since it's a lot harder to keep minors from getting hold of e-cigs and they think it makes them look cool."
"Does it?" Twilight asked.
Sunset snorted. "We're talking about Snips and Snails here," she pointed out.
Twilight giggled. "I guess...I guess not," she said.
"Wow, that was kind of mean," Starlight said, staring at Twilight.
Twilight raised an eyebrow. "Have you met Snips and Snails?" she asked.
Starlight frowned. "I don't...think so?" She scratched her head. "The names sound familiar..."
"They're the idiots who lured an Ursa Minor into Ponyville for Trixie to vanquish the first time she came to town," Twilight explained.
Starlight's eyes widened. "Oh yeah, now I remember!"
"They did what?!" Moondancer and Sunset cried in unison.
Ember blinked. "Wait. Wait. Hold up. You mean there's a couple of ponies who are actually that stupid?! What if the mama had come looking for it? Even dragons aren't stupid enough to piss off an Ursa Major!"
"Yeah, well, Snips and Snails aren't...the brightest colts around," Twilight said. "They bought into Trixie's hype word for word and decided they'd bring an Ursa to town so she could vanquish it."
"Vanquish a...Trixie can't even do a simple transmutation!" Starlight said.
"So what happened?" Sunset asked. "How...how is Ponyville even still standing?"
Twilight fidgeted. "I, umm...I got rid of the Ursa," she said sheepishly.
Moondancer's glasses slid down her nose. "Got rid of...how?"
"I had to cast a bunch of different spells and since I was still a unicorn back then, it really wore me out, but basically I..." Twilight took a deep breath. "Broke the Ponyville water tower to make a baby bottle, milked every cow in Ponyville with my magic, gave the Ursa a big bottle of fresh milk, made wind through the reeds to play a lullabye, and levitated the Ursa back into the Everfree Forest."
The others stared at her.
"How the hay did I ever beat you?" Starlight wondered.
"I've been wondering that myself," Twilight muttered. "Anyway, let's...let's keep moving. There's still a lot of mall to see!"
Unfortunately, "a lot of mall" quickly revealed itself to be "more of the same". There were some interesting and different stores here and there—a place that sold giant cookies, a store that sold bulk mix-and-match candy, and a store whose merchandise apparently changed with each new upcoming holiday—but the number of clothing stores, jewelry stores, accessory stores, shoe stores, and the like never seemed to change from one part of the mall to the next.
And there were kiosks every thirty feet, it seemed, where someone in a brightly colored polo shirt tried to get the girls to sign a contract for mobile phone service.
"My feet hurt," Starlight complained once they'd reached the other end of the main strip.
"Mine too," Moondancer said. She made a beeline for a bench near another fountain and plopped down; Starlight joined her. The others looked at each other, shrugged, and sat down as well. Except for Twilight, whose eyes were fixed upon one storefront.
"Twilight?" Sunset asked. "See something you like?"
Twilight was gravitating toward a brightly-lit store whose awning proudly displayed the name Le Stay Connected. "Think I'm gonna go in there," she said. "It looks really interesting."
"Oh, that! That's a high-end gadget boutique," Sunset said. "They cater to the too-much-money crowd who always have to have the latest tech..." She smiled. "But go ahead and have a look!"
Twilight zipped into the shop with a giddy expression on her face.
"Wow," Starlight said. "She is such a nerd."
"Yeah, she kind of is," Sunset agreed with a smile.
After a brief, awkward silence, Starlight asked, "Sunset Shimmer? Do you...do you really prefer living here to Equestria?"
Sunset thought about that for a minute. "I...I'm not sure," she admitted. "I mean, I know I need to go back to Equestria one day. Either my luck's gonna run out here and I'll have to go back, or..." She shook her head. "No. I'm not planning to go back for good. I...I have a life here, one I'd never have back in Equestria."
"Are you sure?" Starlight pressed. "I mean, you're friends with these versions of Princess Twilight's friends. You could make friends with their Ponyville versions, start over in Ponyville—"
"But it wouldn't be the same," Sunset said. "I have memories with the girls here that...that I'd never be able to have with the other girls." She smiled sadly. "Besides, it sounds like they already have enough wayward unicorns wandering around Ponyville." She poked Starlight in the shoulder with a wink.
Starlight rolled her eyes. "Yeah yeah," she said. "But seriously, you really like living in this world? With no magic, and all this strange...stuff this world has?"
"I think this world's kinda cool," Ember said.
Sunset shrugged. "I've been here a long time, Starlight," she said. "When I went back to Equestria, when I had my unicorn magic back, sure it was...exciting, for the few minutes it lasted, but..." She shook her head. "Ever since I gave up on my plan to ruin Princess Celestia, ever since, y'know, I learned the magic of friendship..." She gazed off in the direction Twilight had gone. "Well, so much has happened since then, and...and this place needs me. No, it's more than that." She folded her hands in her lap and looked down at them. "If I went back to Equestria...I'd miss my friends here. I'd miss my life here." She smiled wistfully. "There's so many little things I've gotten used to, you know? If I went back, I'd...I'd have to start all over again. Find a new home, make new friends, learn how to be a pony all over again. I don't...I don't think I want to do that, not when there's so much I'd be giving up here."
Starlight smiled. "I think I understand," she said. "It's like me, I...I had to pick up and start over again after my whole evil revenge thing went south. I'm...I'm enjoying living in Ponyville, learning how to make friends. I still make a lot of mistakes, and I'm learning that Twilight isn't the easiest pony to live with, but..." She gazed into the fountain. "It's becoming my home, you know? I'm...I don't know where my future leads, but I do know that where I am, right now, is the happiest I've ever truly been." She paused. "I mean, the living in Ponyville and learning from Twilight thing, not the whole...this."
"We know what you meant, goofball," Ember said with a smirk.
Twilight came charging out of the store she'd run into, a beaming smile on her face and a twinkle in her eyes. "Sunset! Girls! You should totally check it out! That store has a ton of cool devices!"
Sunset let out a strangled snort. "Wh-what?"
"Cool devices!" Twilight said eagerly. When Sunset started snickering, Twilight gave her a put-out look. "What? I'm just saying there's a lot of cool devices over there!"
Sunset doubled over laughing. The other girls stared at her.
"Your friend is weird," Starlight informed Twilight.
* * * * *
After another hour and a half of exploring the mall, during which they actually went into a couple of clothing stores and tried on a few things, the girls headed for the food court to get some lunch.
"So what are you all in the mood for?" Sunset asked. "There's just about everything here. Burgers, tacos, hot dogs, nachos, soft pretzels, noodles, egg rolls, sushi—actually don't try the sushi here, it's toxic—"
"That place seems popular," Starlight interrupted, pointing to a crowd of people milling around one shop whose marquee read THE CALZONE ZONE.
"Huh? Hey, this place is new," Sunset mused.
"The Calzone Zone," Twilight read aloud. "Catchy name!"
"What's a calzone?" Ember asked.
"It's kind of a stuffed sandwich type thingie," Sunset said. "Usually full of pizza toppings. Let's go check it out! If that's okay with you girls."
"It must be good if that many people want to eat there," Starlight said.
The girls joined the crowd around The Calzone Zone, glancing up at the menu that hung over the order counter. Sunset's brow furrowed. "Huh," she said. "Some of those things...don't really sound like a calzone. More like...a turnover? An empanada?"
"What's the difference?" Ember asked.
"Well, a calzone usually has pizza dough and Bitalian ingredients," Twilight said. "I see Sunset's point. Pretzel calzone filled with cheddar cheese and smoked bacon? Sourdough Filly steak calzone? I'm no expert, I mean I've only had a calzone once when I went to Manehattan, but..."
"But that's what's so cool about this place!" a girl standing beside her said. Twilight turned to see Lyra Heartstrings in the line waiting for service. "Sure, a Bitalian might look at some of that and say it's not a calzone, but the whole point of this is to have a calzone you can call your own! You know? With whatever you want inside, on whatever kind of dough you want."
"Hey Lyra," Sunset greeted. "So this place any good?"
"Bon Bon and I come here every weekend since it opened," Lyra said. "Of course, Bonnie's down with a sprained ankle right now, so I'm getting a couple to go."
"So what do you recommend?" Starlight asked.
"Me? I like the barbecue brisket and baked bean calzone," Lyra said. "Fair warning," she added in a stage whisper. "It makes you fart like nobody's business."
"Uhh...thanks for the warning," Starlight said.
Lyra blinked and looked at the group with Sunset. "Huh, never seen any of you before," she said. "And...Twilight? Where are your glasses?"
"Other Twilight," Twilight said. "You know, the one from—"
"Oh right, right, the magical one," Lyra said, nodding. "Cool." She tilted her head. "And the others?"
"They're with me," Twilight said. "We came for a visit."
"Cool." Lyra nodded again. "Well, see you around!" She shuffled up in the line.
"So that's Lyra Heartstrings as a human," Starlight said. "Are she and Bon Bon still, y'know, 'best friends' here?"
Sunset snickered. "Remind me to tell you about the time Vice-Principal Luna caught them 'befriending' each other in the restroom at school." She made air quotes and smirked.
"How about let's...NOT talk about that!" Twilight suggested brightly, face flaming.
When their turn to order arrived, Ember ordered the barbecue brisket and baked bean calzone, Sunset and Twilight ordered the supreme pizza calzone, Moondancer ordered the pretzel, cheddar, and smoked bacon calzone, and Starlight decided to try the Filly steak calzone. It took a while for their orders to be ready; when they were handed their food, the calzones turned out to be fairly large—not quite the size of a foot-long sub, but definitely larger than a six-inch sub. They found a table in the food court to sit down and eat.
"This is good," Twilight said.
"It really is!" Starlight agreed. "There's more cheese in this than I thought there'd be, though."
"You don't like cheese much, do you?" Sunset asked.
"I don't like the way I gas up when I eat cheese," Starlight said.
"Eh, farting's just nature's way of telling you you really enjoyed your meal," Ember said with a grin.
"Yes, but it's also not something you want to be doing in polite company," Starlight said through clenched teeth.
"Hey Sunset, what time is it?" Twilight asked.
Sunset wiped her hands on her napkin, pulled out her phone, and checked it. "It's just after one-thirty, why?"
"Hmm," Twilight said. "Hate to say it, but...we don't have much time left." She sighed. "We need to be back at the portal at five. I have...kind of a long day ahead of me tomorrow and I have a lot of scheduling to go over with Spike before bed. And I definitely need to get to bed early."
"Aww," Ember said.
"I'll need to catch the evening train back to Canterlot," Moondancer said. "I hate walking around after dark, no matter how safe Canterlot is."
"Well, it's been fun having you girls here for the weekend," Sunset said. "We should totally get together and do this again sometime."
"Yeah we should!" Ember said with a grin. "This place is pretty cool. I'd like to spend more time here."
"Next time I can get a break from my schedule, we should definitely all come back," Twilight agreed.
"Hey, maybe I can even bring Trixie with me next time!" Starlight suggested brightly.
Sunset and Twilight looked at each other and rolled their eyes. "We'll see," Twilight said with a smile.
"Well, if you need to be back by five, that gives us enough time to see a movie before we leave," Sunset said. "Sound good?"
"Works for me," Twilight said. "Girls?"
"You'll love the movie theater here," Sunset said.
"Sure," Starlight agreed, wiping her mouth and hands and finishing up her soda.
* * * * *
After a movie about a ragtag group of misfits in a broken-down spaceship getting caught up in epic shenanigans, the girls got on the bus that would take them to CHS. It was just past five when the group stood at the base of the shattered statue. Sunset looked around at her guests. "I had a great time this weekend," she said.
"Yeah, same here," Ember agreed.
"I needed this little vacation like you would not believe," Twilight said. "Thanks for everything, Sunset."
"This was very educational," Starlight said. "Thank you so much for hosting us."
"It was fun," Moondancer added.
"I'll write soon," Twilight promised, hugging Sunset. She looked at her other friends, then at the statue, and let out a heavy sigh. "Well, girls," she said. "Time to go home."
One by one, they disappeared through the portal, each waving goodbye to Sunset. Twilight was the last to go. Once she was gone, Sunset rocked on her heels, giving the portal a longing look. Then, with a smile and a shake of her head, she turned and walked away, hands in her pockets, whistling one of the Rainbooms' songs as she made her way home in the fading light of day.
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Okay, this was a great story, and a absolute riot with all the awkward fish out of water moments along the way. ...Well, nothing more to say here really embarrassingly enough.
Glad I decided to follow and read! Thanks for the story
This was an entertaining slice of life story and really it was just nice to read. No need for character development or plot. Just teenagers doing teenage things, except these teens are from WAAAAY out of town.
Also, funny how Twilight said "Cool Devices" and yes, I get the reference. No wonder Sunset snickered. With the Internet, I'm not surprised if Sunset ever came across the title. Or does she have a collection.
So, sweet and easy. Nothing too serious.
Well done.
This was a nice little story. I like it.
7281403 That's like saying Zecora would become a bird or something because she isn't a pony.
"Cool devices."
I don't geddit. Not even after running the words together, mangling the pronunciation, and speaking the phrase aloud in Tara Strong's voice. Help a fellow out?
Roll credits. *dinh*
Long story short, it's where people of a specific religion go to pray.
And incredibly toxic. I could go on a whole rant, but I won't.
No.
They're not terribly popular, in universe and out.
Well, you were a good deal more aggressive, not to mention blinded by the desire for revenge, and Twilight's not a fighter by nature. Not to mention, she didn't really have time to think of a plan.
She is. But we love her for it.
From what little I know, calzones are Italian, empanadas are Spanish.
You're taking this fairly in stride.
Please do.
Sure, kinda want to see her meet other Trixie, see who can out ham who.
Sounds like a fun ride.
Sunset Shimmer is going back to equestria which means everything done in the EQG world is cannon!
I like the story but this chapter felt a little rushed, I feel the film could have deserved a chapter by itself and maybe a little more to the saying goodbye section.
I... If they were watching 'Serenity', I really don't want to guess what sort of ideas that might give the ponies (and dragon). Bonus points if, during the next crisis, Twilight makes a crack about there being an 'unanticipated change to the plan... followed by crashing, blowing up and dying'. Starlight responds: "Did you say we're going to crash, blow up and die? I don't wanna crash, blow up and die!"
Sequel and bring Maud and Trixie to the EG universe.
8160514 Didja ever think of trying to Google it?
8160571 They were watching Guardians of the Galaxy.
8160559 Author fatigue. Thirty thousand words of "these girls do normal teenage things" gets to be a bit much after a while, even for the guy writing it.
nice story and even to there are no promise on epilogue or sequel i hope we get one if you get inspired for it.
shame you cant add Likes multiple times or i would have spammed it lol
so you will get 10 mustaches
8160627 No. Though now that I have, that fact is memorialized in my Google search history for all time. Thanks a bunch.
This was a really fun story. Just Twilight bringing a few close friends over so Sunset can share some human culture with them. I wouldn't mind a sequel but I am not demanding one wither, since this seems like a good stoping point.
Well to be fair, Starlight didn't "beat" Twilight in the traditional sense. All she did was run out the clock until she changed one thing in the past and Twilight was able to go back multiple times to retry; and they only fought after Twilight cast a time-travel spell multiple times which would weaken her magic. Chances are if they fought one on one with nothing at risk and at full power, Twilight would win with Starlight only barely keeping up due to her apparently high stamina.
Twilight Sparkle is like Jack Raken. Even when you beat him, you can't understand how.
This was an enjoyable, if quiet ride. I do feel the ending was really rushed, though. It feels less like it ended and more like it just stopped.
The thing about Spike being a tunnel drake was really interesting. Of course, I really like Spike, so of course I'd zero in on the one line that referenced him.
All I gave to say is.........
They didn't go with Low Cal? Eh? Eh?
PARKS AND REC REFERENCES!!!!
This was fun! Like others have said— "teenage characters doing teenage things." Didn't need a major plot, just some fluff with a few 'getting-to-know-you' moments. Very nice!
8160668
If it makes you feel any better, I didn't get it either. Didn't do the search until I read your comment, though, so thank you for prompting me to pull up an incognito window first.
For the movie I'm guessing in descending order of likelihood: Star Wars, Serenity, Guardians of the Galaxy.
Guardians is last because I don't recall the Milano being broken-down.
Sounds like Starlight would get along great with Bob Newhart.
Another great chapter, and what a way to end it.^^
Sounds like they saw Power Rangers. Wonder if they commented on the movie's first "joke"?
8160920 True, I mean, from what I recall of my research on Ronin, most became drunks, hobos, manual laborers, traders, or even government officials. Heck, from what I know of the Battle of Shiroyama, a majority of the government troops sent to end the rebellion where themselves former Samurai
8160921
I was thinking Guardians of the Galaxy.
An enjoyable story overall, and a good way to end it. Well done.
I understood that reference and I feel so dirty for it.
8160514
The one thing I could think of was a 'adult'
anime that I heard of at some point.
8161136 That was the reference, yes.
She didn't.
In their duel in the season 5 finale, Starlight never outright BEAT Twi. At best, they tied, since they were both too exhausted to continue.
Yeah, it's a nitpick, but it still bugged me.
Having looked up what that is... I actually had to face palm.
For some reason THAT is the weirdest thing to me to come out of the story...
As a whole, though, this was a pretty entertaining fic.
8161190
Yes, but that was when Twilight already was The Element / Alicorn of Magic and Friendship.
If she had still been a unicorn, that would have been over with quick and dirty with Starlight as the clear winner.
Hell, technically, Unicorn Twilight probably would not even have been able to do the timey wimey spell casting.
Good planning, more rage than every political forum on the Internet put together, and lots of innocent bystanders that would trigger catastrophic butterfly effects if either of you nudged them.
This says volumes about the weirdness around CHS, and I love it.
All told, this was a most enjoyable slice of life. Thank you for it.
Moondancer doesn't like being out after dark?
Although if that's the part I get hung up on, I guess the rest of the story was pretty good.
Please tell me that's a hint for a future clopfic
Hmm... Would Ember actually understand the probably non-draconic concept of 'losing weight'? A dragon would probably believe that bigger is better, as long as it is proper muscle instead of just fat.
Apart from this nitpick, good job in this story, even if author fatigue made the ending a bit abrupt.
Loved it. I hope you write more!
Have you traveled much? Your characterization of Sunset is really interesting in that reverse culture shock, returning home after a long time abroad, can be much worse than the initial culture shock of moving to a new country in the first place.
8161190 Yep, I caught the Cool Devices reference immediately. It's a particularly explicit series of hentai anime, for those not in the know. All of them involving unusual S&M and bondage. It's actually been banned in a few countries because of scenes of explicit public rape for profit in a few of the OAV's.
Filly steak....hahahaha keep the CMC away from here
Reminds me of Novi and Kogai from the 80's Shogun C-64 game...
This was a fitting end to the story. It'd be nice someday if Twilight hosted an Equestria Club in Equestria for Shimmy Shakes. Just to see Shimmercorn talk to Tia and have some good old fashioned pony shenanigans. Or even bringing along Trixie and Discord over to earth on the next Equestrian Club (Dissy can shapeshift to an Eris?).
But even without those. This is a really fun story. Thank you very much for making this memorable fic ^_^.
This was a briliant and realy enjoyable story.
This was a fun story. Very glad you wrote it.
8161114 I second that.
A good thing the mall apparently lacked a book store, or they'd never have gotten Twilight back to Equestria on time, of at all.
8172102 Agreed
to be fair, its confirm that with no concentration. doesn't ,matter Physical God or not, your actual power's useless without proper focus (which can often be broken (A) by preoccupation(s), (B) in the heat of the moment, etc.). One stray thought, one missed detail in one's thoughts, etc. can cause a spell to go wrong or simply not happen at all. and lets all be honest, twilight the poster child of fretters.
hence why snail so freaking good with telekinesis (He really has a empty head).
but e-cig aren't good for you, they cause popcorn lung ( its a disease that results in obstruction of the smallest airways of the lungs (bronchioles) due to inflammation.). which means yeah there not the best source of information
I have to get this off my chest. The "Spike and Ember are different species, that's why he becomes a dog and her a human" premise is extremely stupid. That is like saying that if Twilight had brought Zecora along, seeing as she is a different species, she would turn into a bird or something.
8195759 Thank you for your opinion.
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I thought of it as a way for the author, who wanted all the characters as the same species so they could explore relationship issues, explained away what would have been a plot hole with out retconning spike as a human. Spike as a dog was a shortsighted idea by the script writers that makes it tougher on writers so give them a break on changing it.
Why the Sex tag?
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for earlier when the girls got naked and stuff