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WARNING: Slow-burn romance!


Tempest Shadow would be the first pony to tell you she's not worthy of friendship. All she deserves after a life spent helping the Storm King conquer and pillage is four walls, bars, and solitude. But she's getting a new life in Ponyville anyway, at the side of Twilight Sparkle, Princess of Friendship.

Tempest Shadow isn't a friendship kind of pony. She's not a party kind of pony. She's not a happy kind of pony in the least. So what could there possibly be for her in Ponyville? More than she thinks, as it turns out. Come join her as she discovers what she's truly meant to do, what she's truly worth, and who she's truly meant to be with. Her life is going to change far more than she ever would have expected.


A serial that will update as individual stories are completed. Incomplete until the whole thing is finished, but the reader is urged to keep up with uploads. Individual stories may also be comedies or adventures. Warning tags may be added as necessary.

Cover art by Firimil!

Chapters (6)
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Tempest not knowing what Cutie Marks are seems rather strange, as there must have been adult ponies in her village. I understand she probably didn't encounter anypony else outside of Equestria, but it still seems strange.

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You'll find the answer to that conundrum in the next story!

I'm looking forward to reading your story, but did you mean to mark it incomplete?

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The story called The Princess's Captain is complete. The series called The Princess's Captain won't be for quite some time. :) So feel free to check this out, it'll likely be a while before the next installment.

Looks like Fizzlepop is off to a good start.

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Ah, I'd read the description on my phone, I must have skipped past your disclaimer explaining the serial format. My mistake, thanks!

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Until you consider that we don't know just how old she was when she left, nor how old she is now, unless I missed something in the movie. It wouldn't be that contrived for her to have forgotten what they're called, or perhaps even remember that she has/is supposed to get one. If she wore armor most of her life...

But we'll find out eventually, I'm sure.

Well, well. This appears to be an actual well-written Tempest story. Interesting.

"This is to be my prison, then," she intoned, her sonorous voice reverberating in the chamber.

"Oh, no, no, no!" Princess Twilight rushed up before her, shaking her head. "Don't think of this as a prison! It's the start of your new life!"

Tempest gazed into the princess's eyes. "I have committed grave crimes against Equestria. Though I have stated my genuine wish to atone, I neither expect nor deserve clemency."

Yeah, I can tell she's going to be a regular ray of sunshine.

"Awesome couldn't bite me. My armor is too thick."

"Nothing goes over my head. My reflexes are too fast, I would catch it."

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There's going to be another one?! Oh, this is just super!

"It's kind of adorable. Just one of the things I love about her!"

Starlight paused as redness crept onto her face. Tempest's eyebrow raised slowly.

I get the sense this story is also going to have StarTrix in it. :trixieshiftright: I'd be down with that.

They did not find Tempest a hobby.

I would have loved to have seen them try though.

and the Amulet the most corruptive

It's the Alicorn Amulet, isn't it?

"As it turns out," she said, "the Amulet is thought to be somewhere in the Everfree Forest."

Pretty sure it's the Alicorn Amulet.

And many a would-be warlord has fallen to the Amulet's influence

Like, 95% sure that's going to be the big plot twist, Since the Staff stole alicorn magic, and all the clues are pointing in that direction.

"And we stopped Trixie when she was using the Alicorn Amulet," finished Rainbow, leaning over the table. "So even if we hadn't done all that, we still know what we're doing when it comes to corrupty amulets.

At this point if they don't find it with giant neon signs pointing to it that say "Duh, of course this was the amulet you were looking for" I will be incredibly disappointed.

but her mien radiated hesitation and a lack of confidence.

At first, I thought this was a typo. Then I double checked and found out that it's a real word. So...Vocabulary win.

Starlight coughed. "The whole Alicorn Amulet incident, from what I hear, involved some kind of artifact that amplified her magic, drove her insane, and made her take over Ponyville."

Now both of Tempest's eyebrows raised.

Giant. Flashing. Neon. Sign.

There's no way this won't backfire.

WARNING: Slow-burn romance!

Thanks for the warning! I'm allergic to slow-burns and would've had a reaction if I read this.

She pulled out the stopper, in the shape of an intertwined sun and moon, and shook her head, casting a few droplets of the water onto the ghost, where they stuck fast.

"In the names of Celestia, Sol Invicta, and Luna, Mare Tranquilitatis, I bid thee, spirit, leave this plane for thy rest eternal in the great beyond!"

Did Pinkie just perform and exorcism? :twilightoops:

"What?" She shrugged. "I've been an ordained cleric for like, three years now!"

So, Pinkie Pie is a religious personnel. Okay.

I admit, I'm digging Tempest and Rainbow's dynamic here.

Looks wonderful! I can't wait for the next installment.

Thank you for sharing with us!

One of Tempest's eyebrows raised. "So you are all much more suited to going on picnics, is that it?"

The rookie snorted. "Hey! The Annual All-Guard Picnic is a time-honored tradition!"

That is hilarious.

"Rainbow, be nice. Tempest, no ending anypony today."

Twilight, are you suggesting that it will be okay for her to end people tomorrow?

The Part with RD and the Traps reminds me of the Raid on Zecora's house in Friendship is Dragons. Although, that Dash could stand to Improve her dexterity score a bit more...

"What?" She shrugged. "I've been an ordained cleric for like, three years now!"

Somehow, I'm not surprised to know that Pinkie Pie has Mad Exorcism skills.

Also, I was totally wrong about the amulet. Go figure.

>story has epilogue, considered complete
>incomplete

Presuming that's a mistake.

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I will laugh so hard if it isn't the alicorn amulet, mainly at the though of how you might react :derpytongue2:

"What about your cutie mark?" said Fluttershy. "Oh, or a combination of yours and Twilight's! Wouldn't that be lovely?"

"Forgive me, Your Highness," she said, measuring her words. "My what?"

CMC, we've got a case for you.

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Damn, was hoping for something more energetic

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This is going to be an anthology of stories involving Tempest Shadow. It will continually update as long as Present Perfect continues to have ideas. Think of this story as the main place to see all of Tempest's own self-contained adventures together without him having to make tonnes of sequels.

I gotta say I love the start of this story, and the format you chose is interesting. I'll eagerly wait for more.

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Likely just an epilogue to this arc of the story.

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Any way to not have to get views at the beginning is good in the eyes of all story writers.

But if there was an anthology planned wouldn't there be the anthology tag?

Or 'random'?

Slow burn!?

What kind of monster are you, anyway?

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He explains it in his blog about the story which came out around the same time, as blogs promoting stories often do. :raritywink:

Although I haven't read a fic revolving around tempest before, this was a great one, and I enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

P.S. I especially loved the comedy in this fic.

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Mea culpa, I couldn't help it.

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That's why I'm trying to be up front about it! :)

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Actually, having the Anthology tag is a good idea. Done!

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The honest kind. :V

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Note the symbol on her armor! We're going all out! V:

Tbh another gripe that it's called The Princess's Captain.

Shouldn't it be "Princess' Captain"? I don't grammar well lol

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Nope! Trust me, I grammar good. :V

Yess. Good story. I quite enjoyed how confused and off-balance Tempest was during this story.
I guess you are going on "fish out of water" portrait of Tempest?

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Note that Tempest is bemused, not confused. She knows just fine what cutie marks are (she even had a short mental monologue about the ones on the thrones a few chapters back), she probably just can't believe none of them ever noticed her not having one.

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No no, you're right, that is the more correct spelling. It bothered me a bit, too, but I guess it's a personal preference to write it this way?

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Well, at least you're upfront about it. Nothing sucks more than going into a story expecting something soon and not getting the first blush until 500 chapters in.

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It can be either or. It's really up to preference. Same thing with list commas.

The last two paragraphs are so true on so many level. :pinkiehappy:
For one, the sanity of the mane six can sometimes be quite questionable a lot of the times. They do have knack pulling things out of knowhere. Both figurately and literally.
So yeah , I think only reason the Stormking got as far as he did was because he had Tempest. She is very competent and the Stormking would probably have won if he had not told Tempest that he wasn's going to fix her horn.:rainbowderp:

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Yes indeed! It'll become even clearer just how as more stories are added. :)

Exquisite stuff all around, especially Tempest's characterization. (And Pinkie's surprising choice to multiclass.) This looks like the beginning of a beautiful series. I look forward to future installments.

Is the title a reference to Vorkosigan Saga, or am I reading too much into it?

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Meh. I'm not really upset or disappointed that I was wrong, just kind of apathetic. It would have made a lot of sense if I had been right, but what actually happened didn't detract from the story any, so it still works out okay.

Pacing feels a little wonky though, but not sure why.

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Now both of Tempest's eyebrows raised.

Giant. Flashing. Neon. Sign.

Open up your eyes, see the glowing neon sign!

One thing I'm really excited for is watching tempest train the eventual new recruits. I'm hoping that some of the background characters we all seem to love will be apart of it.

"Awesome couldn't bite me. My armor is too thick."

Whatever you say Drax.

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I'll guess the latter, as I have no idea what that is. c.c

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I know that it was at least suggested I use the Alicorn Amulet. I'm not sure why I decided not to, and I'm starting to wonder if maybe I didn't get my own wires crossed...

Tempest didn't answer. But as Twilight turned to the door, she asked, "Twilight? Would you say you are strong?"

Twilight paused. "No." Ever so slightly, she turned to show Tempest a lopsided smile. "But when I'm with my friends?

"I'm unstoppable."

Hot damn, THAT is a good line to end on. Hell, that should be canon somewhere.

"What?" She shrugged. "I've been an ordained cleric for like, three years now!"

... I pictured you as more of a bard.

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