It has been two months since the invasion of Canterlot and Equestria is learning to heal. But even with Hearth's Warming around the corner, one pony can't find it in herself to be cheerful.
Tempest Shadow, still haunted by the memories of her actions, is desperate to find a way to prove she's changed. Hoping to help, Twilight asks an old friend for assistance. One who'll force Tempest to face her demons, whether she wants to or not.
This fic climbed to 2nd on the Feature Box on 11th December 2017!
Story was updated every 5 days at 11am SGT (7pm PDT)
Chapter 4 and 5 were uploaded on 24th & 25th December 2017, 11pm SGT respectively
Cover art commissioned from the amazingly talented OverlordNeon! Who also helped me to come up with the title!
Proofreading done by Krickis!
Synopsis written with help from Novel Idea & Krickis!
Good stuff.
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Thank you! :D
Good start. Hoping for more soon. :)
To steal Cursed Quill's gimmick, corrections offered without malice
Tomes, you want tomes here, a tome is an old, heavy, scholarly book. A tomb is somewhere where you inter the dead, like a mausoleum, or a crypt.
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Nice solid first chapter, straight into my tracking folder.
Nice! I really like it so far =)
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Story updates every 5 days! :) So you won't have to wait long for the next chapter!
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Fixed! Thank you for pointing it out to me! :D And thank you, I hope you enjoy the coming chapters!
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Awesome! Hope you continue to enjoy the future chapters as much as you do this one!
nice to see an in-universe natural response that doesn't break the pacing.
i absolutely loved the sugar cube corner section. from waiting in line, to being rescued by a friend (does fizzle count pinkie / mane 6 friends?), to breaking bread with a stranger. I'm gonna need more of that.
Good to know. :)
This is good, keep it up. :) 👍
YEsss YEssss! More Tempest to feed my addiction.
Uh, phrasing?
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I'm so happy you enjoyed that part! I had so much fun writing it as well! Sunset and Tempest are such good characters to play off with their dynamics.
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I will!
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You can never have too many Tempests
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I'm sorry, I don't really get the question. Is it phrased oddly?
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It's actually a callback to a joke from the television series Archer, which apparently nobody except me has ever watched (note: this is probably untrue). At the risk of spoiling the gag, I will link to a YouTube compilation of different instance of it. Although a bit edgy, it is SFW:
Interesting start though I wonder where Starlight Glimmer is right now and why she couldn't also help Tempest?
Also I get the impression Twilight is trying to get these two together, never took ya for a shipper Twilight but we'll see if your attempt at matchmaking pays off.
Man I'm was kinda hoping they would head back to the other side of the protal but it's still too early to rule that out.
Dat Twily face tho...
Huh. Hunh. How is it that nobody's brought the two (initial) antagonists of the two different movie universes together yet? You're virtually alone in the "Sunset Shimmer + Tempest Shadow" tag pool.
I like what I'm seeing so far! Gonna be watching this one develop.
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I guess you'll have to wait and see how it pans out! As for Starlight, she's away for the holidays. Exact reason will be given in a future chapter (won't be a major plot point though, probably something I'll mention in passing :) )
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I love how everyone is tossing out theories as to what's going to happen! Makes me really happy to see people so involved!
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YES! When the idea hit me I just couldn't let it go! Their interactions and similarities are just too fun to play with! Also, thanks for giving it a read! I hope that the future chapters keep your interests too!
I am insanely Intrigued
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Hope to keep it that way!
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agreed, Sunset and Fizzlepop go together just a bit too well, welp, shipping time!
Really should be an "I" here, you need to capitalise it if it's on its own.
Okay, not actually having seen the movie I don't know if this was taken from the transcript, but I'm fairly certain it should be "Deliver the punchline"
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Another nice solid chapter, really hammering home the feels.
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Fixed! Thank you for the help in finding the mistakes!
Why you make me sad?!
Does this mean that Sunset gets to share what her nightmares were?
Yes, yes. Get all the hurt out. Cut away the dead flesh and let the healing begin.
To be fair, Twilight could also discuss this with the other Princesses since they also experienced the same pain. Especially Luna and Celestia as they have more life experience. A little PTSD among peers and all that.
That is the explantion, Pinkie Pie does weird stuff get used to it.
This is pretty awesome =)
I look forward to seeing more!
maybe its just me, but i thought this chapter was super incoherent.
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Have to wait and see won't we? :P
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Yes, she could. But Tempest said that she didn't want to talk to the Princesses at that moment, due to her previous actions against them. Twilight would just be respecting her decisions.
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Thank you! Hope to write more!
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Ah, I was afraid of that. Yeah, due to the time constraint I had to get out a lot of plot points in this one. I apologize if you thought it was a lot of jumping around. The future chapters should be a lot more focused and be tackling only 2 or 3 plot points at a time, so I hope you'll stick around for them!
Now we have a love triangle, and someone's going to get hurt before this gets better. And one of them is going to be out in the cold with an "I'm strong, I'll get over it. Don't worry about me." I can feel it in my bones!
Oh, hello mister Chekhov. What are you doing with that pistol?
You know, until this chapter, I couldn't tell who you were trying to ship with who. Now I see we're going with the love Triangle approach. Should be...interesting.
Ooh tempest is miring after shimmy's girl. This won't end well, Sunset must always get the girl. Make it so Deathscar!
I love the way you describe scenes; everything seems so alive. The dream sequences especially are filled with prose that just draws you in to the viewpoint of the dreamer, its wonderful.
Thank you for continuing to write.
I feel sorry for Sunset. So many secrets she has to keep from everypony involved.
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*whistles innocently*
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Wow, thank you for such a compliment! I'm glad you're enjoying it so much! And you have no idea how happy it makes me that you like the way the scenes are being described. It took a long time to get those right :P
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Yeah Sunset doesn't have it easy. No one in this situation is getting it easy.
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Looks like a couple people missed the clues you were giving us!
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Nothing at all! It isn't even loaded!
-Schrodinger
"Intact" is what you want here, "intact" means to keep something whole, unbroken, or unsullied. "In tact" means to act tactfully, to socially interact with consideration, kindness, or delicacy.
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And thusly we hopefully avoid my least favourite part of any romance story, the pussyfooting about when two characters like each other, but neither want to heap the problem of a relationship onto the other. Together we are strong and this burden, when shared, is a burden unmade.
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Fixed! Thank you! And I won't say anything about the upcoming chapter. Have my lips sealed :)
"Her closest theory was the nightmares, but she had no wy to prove it."
I think there's an a missing in there somewhere lol. ah this is such a good read though. and right before Christmas, its like an early present!!!
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Fixed! And yes, I was hoping it would be! Merry Christmas Eve! :)
Oh Sunset, you poor thing. This has to be harder on her than anyone.
Man, sunset is really taking one for the team, trying her best to get both tempest and twilight together despite how she herself feels.
Helping set up the girl you like with someone else must be a hell of a heartache.
The fact that neither Twilight or Tempest has cottoned to Sunset's dilemma kinda makes me think they need somepony to backhoof them. Or a rolled up newspaper.
I think there's something extraenous here.
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Totes me goats adorbs. Have a heart 💗, I've got a couple going spare somewhere.
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Thank you for pointing it out, fixed. And I hope you enjoyed the story! :)
And Mr. Chekhov's hands tested positive for gunpowder residue. He definitely shot the pistol.