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So far the first chapter piqued my interest, also I loved Luna in this chapter and I liked your idea on why the Royal Guards all look the same. Looking forward to reading more.
Is very nice, good chapter I laughted at the first part with him telling that in front of the whole town, but at least he was honest. And a little change if you like when Luna says "...and let thine eyes not be distracted by the royal form, "Take away 'form' and put 'plot'.
I disagree leave it at form. The rump wiggle tells every reader that she knows exactly what he is looking at there is no need to go further. Let imagination have its way
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dat graduation scene
great story by the way
Ah man... Funny shit
Nice start!
I'll keep reading!
Celestia: New recruitment. I know what you did last summer.. hohoho
That awkward moment when your boss catches you checking out her sisters flank.
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That even MORE awkward moment when you realize your boss can send you to the moon.
Honestly I thought that would have ended differently
Oh god, that speech in the first chapter by StarStep made me cringe in embarrassment.
Great story, by the way!
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I shall continue reading.
“I'm going to be Princess Luna's special Somepony.”
I'm reading this on an iPhone. Said phone fell from my hands upon reading that.
Ok, that was a pretty damn good first chapter.
> before I tell the Princess you like bananas
i died laughing at the Friendship Is Magic Bitch reference
...dat graduation scene was so freaking awkward I seriously almost stopped reading...
I agree with Starstep, I always thought Luna was much more beautiful then Celestia.
I do not normally fav stories on the first chapter but when I do it is this story
Yeah, it fits that Luna would be mischievous and like to tease. Worse, she knows Starstep's weakness now. I doubt that she'll be able to long resist seeing how far she can push him. Not malicious, you understand, but in the manner of a beautiful and slightly vain older woman who can't help but respond teasingly to a child's crush for, and let us not go two ways about this, to one who is many millennia old, he is nothing but a child.
The ending is brilliant!!!
Nooooo
Princess Luna is mine
Still... beautifully written
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"Im going to be Princess Lunas Special some pony"
Me: HNNNNNGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG
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Haha, I take it the story amuses you?
Me= hysteria.
BANANAS!
Okay im only just starting this and I have just read his announcement about luna.... I think I died. BUT TOO ALL YOU NEIGHSAYERS I SAY THIS!!
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re-edit: the same is said for the ending.
Well, that was an interesting first chapter. A few spelling mistakes, but other than that, I'm intrigued.
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^^That is what he should have done ^^
3446517 That is about what I felt like doing after reading that.
1652608 I did stop for about two hours.
Okay Fuck it, I'm readin' it
It's haunted me for months now, I feel compelled to make it through
LEt'S DO THIS!
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In the words of the Waterboy film: "You can do it!"
Enjoy the ride!
Soooo i began reading and thought "Wow this is actually pretty good, glad to see a well written story got on the feature box" and then I read Sargent HardPLOT... sigh. I know this is trivial and nit-picky but...plot is not a term for a equine's butt. it just...isn't. a plot is in terms of a story; the book had a good plot. that does not mean the book had a good ass. It just isn't right and makes what could have been a very in depth story about love seem childish. (yes I know we're talking about colorful ponies here but that isn't the point). Using plot in the term of a horse's ass kind of spits in the face of writing and aspiring authors everywhere. you're literally comparing one of the most essential parts of a story to the end of a horse.
Luna is one of my favorite characters and you have obvious talent, I'd hate to see it go to waste by using this term in this manner. I will continue reading and try and get over this but please remember what I said. thank you,
~Blue
You earned a like and fav just for that.
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Brilliant Start, I can't believe that I only just found this, many laughs I'm sure are going to follow 5 moustaches to you sir
Third time reading it because Im really bored. Im going to go insane HAHAHAHAHAH!
HAHAHAHAHA! The trollage! Oh the massive trollage! HAHAHAHA!
4033398 this is my second...looking forward to old memeries...
4213833 Welcome to the story. Please overlook the so-so editing on these early chapters, I promise it improves. I even have an editor starting around chapter 46.
Anyway, enjoy the ride!
4213851 I just noticed that there was a new chapter up. Instead of just reading it, like I would with most stories, I'm going to read through the whole of this story, because it is by far my favourite.
Indigo Eclipse, I commend you on the quality and Epicness of this story, and eagerly await any future chapters.
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The term is actually a reference to the beginnings of the fandom--around season two there were many very serious people who entered the fandom claiming they watched the show for the "plot"--because the story of the show was good.
Of course because of where the fandom originated there were many people who took it less seriously and therefore ridiculed those people who watched it for the "story" by taking screencaps of the pony's butts, plastering "I watch it for the plot!" over them, essentially implying that the serious people actually watched the show for the cute horse butts and used their claims for liking the "deep and rich story of the show" as a justification or a cover up because they were embarrassed about it.
The term caught on, as many things did around season two, and now it is being used as a synonym for pony butt. Like the people who invented the term, try not to take it so seriously!
I'm sorry to sound like a snob, but I REALLY need to correct your excerpt from Starswirl's work with Middle English Grammar.
"I have found MY thoughts drawn... (you only use 'mine' in the possessive and if the word coming after starts with a vowel or silent h)
"Sphere of blue that DOTH so elegantly..." (I do, Thou dost, It/He/She doth.)
"...no warmth, it reflectETH..." (If you use -eth in stead of -s, be consistent.)
"...that striketh MINE heart..." (Usually the H in silent in older speech.)
I've been forced to read too much Shakespeare...
I read this story before but alas it has been so long I feel I should reread as to not forget the small details. Tip never lose your password....
I'm liking this already
Starstep.... You have my blessings pal.
You get my...blog.aereo.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/09/Seal-of-approval.jpg
Have had this story in my read later section for over a year now .-. Well, at least I got around to it XD
Before the other pegasus was the white, regal alicorn Princess Celestia. Everything about the princess gave off an air of motherly affection, but also of a mother's tough love. She was intently staring at Starstep with a raised eyebrow. Now he fought the urge to tremble for different reasons.
“Starstep, Lighthoof, a word if I may?”
I would pissed my pants I was him
ok first I am vary late to this story. and right off the bate I see this is going to be good.
you hit a big plus with me right off the bate as Scootaloo in my #1 pony and she is flying.
Harts Fire
Liking it so far and have had it in read later for some time now. Only thing I have is a misspelling.
Starstep just smirked, but kept his voice very low, “It's alright, Light, there's nopony around. I was just thinking of our training with old Sargent Hardplot. I swear that pony could crush a pony's head with his...”
5997310 Alas, it's one of those little errors my trusty spell-checker and editor didn't catch. That said, the first handful of chapters didn't have an editor. I did the best I could to clean up anything that readers pointed out. It took a while to get an editor, but the later half of the story is much cleaner for it.
I do hope you'll enjoy the story and if you ever have comments or questions, feel free to leave a note.