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Wow... haven't seen such a player since reading all those HiE fics where the guy makes his own herd
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You're only a player till you lose the game.
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Seems like his 'gaining experience' before he heads off for the 'big fish'
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I am curious why you consider him a player. He sacrificed time with Cheerilee to help her and Twilight, turned down a friend's advances, and avoided messing with Castle Maids and Spa-girls. I'd say he's found some Swag, but I wouldn't go so far as to call him a 'player'.
He's doing what he must.
Anyhow. Another great chapter, looking forward to the next. Sorry I can't really say more, but I couldn't find many flaws in it, not to mention I'm already kinda breaking my own rule. I'm meant to be sorting out my clothing by now >.<
Every day this story gets a new chapter is like christmas
Love the char development and little twists you keep throwing at us.
Also, Apple Pie, Pinkiejack anyone else not see that coming?
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Then every day must be Christmas! Cause I think I've posted every day now...sometimes twice a day.
Glad you're getting a kick out of how I'm building these characters and relationships. Sometimes it's hard to avoid things like 'Mary-sue' traps. Showing that Star is learning to open up to the idea of loving more ponies and reconnecting with his friends without being portrayed as a God-mode love-machine.
Muahaha, Apple Pie will never be the same. Don't you love the little curve balls I throw at you? You don't seemed surprised by the ending though.
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The curve balls are indeed loved and most welcome. It's a useful talent you have as an author that helps keep interest in multiple aspects of the story. I'm sure im not alone in appreciating them as they bring a lot more to the table than i would have guessed from the description.
As for the ending to the current chapter, I was indeed surprised and intrigued, didn't see that coming either
I really hope AB doesn't end up doing anything with that aggressive unicorn, and I also hope he gets his ass beaten by Star at some point. Can't wait for the next chapter to see where this goes. Go get 'em Star.
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This. I already hate this unicorn.
But as has been said, I can't get enough of this story. It's like christmas or a birthday when it's updated. And I never want it to end.
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Sadly, the end will come. But I still have so much more to go. Worry not. Joy, tragedy, comedy. A play of life in all it's forms. I only hope you laugh, weep and cheer beside StarStep on this journey.
Yes, that unicorn. Not every pony in Equestria is kind and joyful. Some let their crushes turn into dangerous obsessions...
Also, I'm curious how you ponies feel about Apple Bloom thus far?
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I am incredibly happy so far with how you have interpreted every character. You have added and developed facets of their personality in ways that I would never have thought of, and executed it well. Apple Bloom is no exception. I think she would get somewhat upset over something like that; it just seems to fit her for some reason. And after Star explained his outlook on the situation to her, the way she understood and accepted his opinion showed maturity that is also a characteristic I would associate with her. Pardon the rant, I just love your writing.
898565 You mean like ManDark with Dede in Dexters lab?
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No need to apologize. That is the sort of answer I'm looking for. I wasn't sure if I got the feel for AB right. To place a character years after we know them in the show, takes a bit of guess work as to how they're personalities will turn out. To show AB as a strong and tough filly, but with an internal desire to have someone look after her. It's a tough balance. Good female characters that don't come off as Damsels in distress or butch, is difficult.
Just wait till we get to Sweetie Belle...it will be...interesting.
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I'd forgotten about that character. I'd rate him as creepy obsessive. But a fun character type. May have to use that later.
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lol, I have had a feeling that Sweetie was doing exactly what she wanted for a while, but might have gone through some troubles and fallen somewhat. I will find out soon enough, I'm sure. /
lol Oh hell naw. Looks like Star just found a good reason to keep his pimp-hoof strong. I'm thinkin he might have to get out there and smack a bitch.
Alright before I get to the serious review let me just say to that joke, glad to see that despite his swag Star is still the goofy little colt. Now I'm glad to see the promise of ApplePie was delivered and kudos for doing so in a rather clever way
As for Apple Bloom I'm also glad that she didn't get with Star, it shows Star can control himself, cares for Apple Bloom, and that she doesn't need a colt to be happy, although I do hope she finds one (obviously not Mystery Douche bag). (Also I agree with Star, her eyes are gorgeous Apple Bloom has one of my favorite eye colors.
Now as for our mystery douche bag I'm actually going to make a prediction that Star isn't the one who will beat the crap out of him (once his identity is discovered of course)
My current predictions are:
Big Mac (he seems to like Star and he certainly wouldn't want someone like this guy to be with his youngest sister)
Applejack (pretty much for the same reasons, but with an even greater emphasis on protecting Apple Bloom)
Apple Bloom herself (Star is her best friend and she's helped him with bullies before)
Twilight (if Twilight ever discovered the things he said about Cheerilee, well let's just say he'd be begging for her to only give him a moustache with her magic)
Now with this cliffhanger, and a thickening plot I look forward to the next chapter.
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Lol really?
Remember that the "Mystery Unicorn" is a unicorn. That fact alone dismisses all of your prediction exept for twilight.
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I'm pretty sure Big Mac and Applejack can handle a single unicorn, heck Starstep is a royal guard, the only reason things went down the way they did is because
A.) It was dark
B.)Was caught off guard
Now he's aware to be careful and if he informs the Apples and Twilight (which he should but I'm afraid he won't at first because of his pride and he'll want to try and figure this out on his own) they'll be prepared too. In a one-on-one battle it just becomes earth pony speed, strength, and stamina vs. unicorn magic, of course the fighting prowess of each of the pony types has never been fully addressed by the show (then again neither has the inner-workings of courtship and breeding) so it's up to the author to determine where this will go. I'm simply saying just because he can do magic doesn't automatically invalidate any other options (including Starstep himself) mind you the one I want most to do it is Twilight (for the honor of her beloved Cheerilee).
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For the most part in Unicorn vs. others in a fight. A lot depends on a unicorn's talent. Twilight's talent is simply that, magic. Hence why she often god-modes. I figured they all have basic skills like simple telekinesis, much like every pegasus can fly. Some just better at one school or spell type than others. I also take into account that most unicorn's can't put all their efforts onto more than one target. In the pegasus' favor, they usually have enough speed to keep a unicorn opponent off-balanced and make a tough target to hit. For earth-ponies, I've always thought they had a natural resistance to magic. Just a little, but just enough to catch a unicorn off-guard. Plus they're generally strong and a lot heavier bone structure. It's one thing to pick up a pegasus and fling them with magic. Their bodies are much lighter. Try doing that to an angry AJ and see what happens.
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So all my theories on who ultimately puts this mystery unicorn in his place hold water.
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You are correct. While it may never be fully addressed in the show. I've always been of the mind-set that there has to be some balance in strengths between the pony races. Otherwise I suspect the unicorns would have dominated the others long ago.
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I misunderstood his first comment. I thought he meant those people were who he was predicting to be the "Mystery Unicorn". Which is why I said what I did.
So I guess in a fight they would all end up destroying each other? Seems like a good idea for a story.
(Cheerilee admin here) I honestly hope that pony who insulted Cheerilee, burns. Slowly, and painfully.,
...I hate not being able to figure out who a mystery character is.
Unicorn, male, with blue aura...
Nope! Notta clue...
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that one is awesome
897620 its because he has all those options success or failure does not a player make
“Yeah, I can understand that, AB. Though there's a lot of screwing in both.”
http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=6YMPAH67f4o
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I'm putting my bits on it being Snips.
Must.....Resist.....Urge.....To Read.....More............
*sees more chapters in the list*
,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,GOD DAMMIT!
FUCK SLEEP! MY CRAVINGS SHALL NOT BE DENIED!!!!!!
*continues reading*
2196770 its 1:23 am here and im on 18 out of 44 sooooo DEATH TO SLEEP
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Im at 1:47 and have to go till 46.
omg..that scene with pinkie....omg I am laughing so hard ^^
Love it xD Last chapter was so very very fun, I love what you're doing here, such a great trend of feel good comedy <3
2989580 It's 10:53 p.m. here and I HAVE TO FINISH THE STORY.
My god...! They're family, though. That's just... That ruined it for me. I can't fap to this.
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Well, to be fair, I wrote this chapter LONG before season 4 and the 'Pinkie Apple Pie' episode. Besides, they could be cousins many-times removed. Anyway, it was never confirmed that they're 'family', so try not to think about it too hard.
Besides, you know what they say about the Apple family
4598395 You can to fap to a non descriptive mention of sex?
4598395 It was never confirmed. AHAHAHAHAHA I'll fap all the faps.
The number of ships in this fic is too d*** high! But seriously, you want me to believe that this guy hasn't starting screwing around until recently and yet has all the ladies fawning onto his dick. This also raises questions about fidelity. Here he claims to love Luna, but is plowing nearly every field along the way.
I really enjoyed this so far. Scootaloo was a good development and the threesome made sense, but Cheerilee was pushing it.