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With naught but marbles and Nightmare, I'd say that Star has gained a very valuable ally (Antonio).
I also like how the shades represented Star and Light's insecurities (Big hooves, etc).
There is another Arc after this?! More light-hearted comedy?!?!
I shudder to think what Star will be shown. The brief glimpses we've gotten so far show that Nightmare underwent some serious shit. But I doubt Luna knows about Nightmare just yet. Too soon after the deal.
ANother great chapter, brother! Hope things are looking up for you on the homefront.
Wow. There goes an hour of my time I was looking forward to using for masturbating. Thanks for ruining my plans, Indigo. Why can't you think of anyone but yourself?
Those 4 cursed words are never good.
I have to say, as soon as I got that little email notification saying this was updated I jumped on to reading it almost instantly, and once more I am wholly satisfied. I enjoy reading what this story has developed into, as well as how far you have come as a writer.
Keep at it, you're doin' a great job.
This was a good one. Things are finally starting to pick up again.
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At least two more major arcs? I'm not going to paint myself into a corner though. I have a general idea of where I'm going, but sometimes side ideas grow bigger than I expected as I write. But yes, there is more comedy and a bit of romance in the next arc. I'm trying to keep a balance of dark and light elements in the story. Even in serious chapters like this one, there are little jokes and calm moments to keep it from becoming 'Oh gawd, angst'.
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Yeah, it doesn't matter if it's from your boss or your lover. They are serious four words.
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Yeah, the story has highs and lows. It's hard to enjoy them when you have to wait for the next chapter, but if you go back and read through the story, they really help it flow better and make the impact moments hit harder.
The thing with Fala, is that she makes terrible, horrific sense.
you have a very despicable mind...I like your story even more that I did previously , I'm also going to half-hazard a guess and take it that from the hint at Amethyst, you play the CCG, no? either way, this is getting more interesting, do keep up the amazing work, I shall await you next chapter with patience.
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That's the fun thing about Fala. She's not exactly a 'villain' in the true spirit of the word. She's not trying to rule out of ego or narcissism. She simply believes that the only way to stop the bickering and bond as one world nation is through force.
If you remember, Luna sent Steelhoof to spy in Spurlin so we'll start getting his reports and a glimpse of how Fala runs her country soon enough.
(psst: first line:
kill the which!!!!
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Did it turn you into a newt?
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Yes. That, it turns out, is why it took me so long to edit this chapter.
...I got better, though.
Dammit that dreaded author's note at the end of the chapter, just when the 4 most hated words to men came up. I hate youuuuuuuuuuu Indigo Eclipse!!!! (not really though ;)
Excellent chapter as always
Awesome chapter as always. Can't wait to see how the whole situation works out, though I am definitely looking forward to returning to the lighter comedy/romance stuff.
Yaaaaaaaaas!!! Updates are the life blood!
"We need to speak"
Oh shit!!
Wonder if luna suspects nightmare but also of she does suspect or find out I wonder how nightmare will react or get out of his head.
More please!!
Holy crepes... StarStep just earned another dark side point. Nice going on the interrogation. Now he has to answer to Luna, though I don't know how much she heard, either. I like how his gradual descent into dark arts can be justified with the images of his victim's deeds. If Nightmare Moon isn't lying then at the very least, the is bending truths.
You have no idea how happy I become when I see this appear in the unread chapters section
she knows.
Mary Cloppins.......hehehe
I was so hyped when I saw this in my update box, and you did not disappoint wonderful chapter. It took a bit longer than I would have hoped but hey, that's the price of quality.
Anyways can't wait for the next chapter hope it comes out soon!!
Well, Luna's smiling, so either this conversation will be something completely off topic, or it's gonna suck. Also, any chance we're gonna get to see Star's shade? It'd be interesting to see his personified self-doubts (I imagine his hooves are gonna be just caked in blood)
4527881 My thoughts exactly.
Oh come on! You can't just leave us hanging! Hot damn... Why does this story just keep getting better and better?
Oh the torture with the awesome cliff hangers you put us through. It was a lovely chapter and now Star will have to deal with the nightmares of The Nightmare. I wonder if that will change him in any way. you've also showed that he's sacrificing some of his morals in order to get things done. Hopefully this won't turn him into one of those crazy the end justifies the means kinds of characters like Fala seems to be. I look forward to the next chapter eagerly.
4527866 TMI man TMI
4528933 No such thing.
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4528522 Pretty sure the 'shades' were Nightmare and Dawn.
To be honest, my favorite part of the arc is probably the dark bits. Sure I love the comedy and romance but I love the insights of Nightmare, and the torturing with nightmares bits... Anyways story still seems to be entertaining, keep up the good work.
Another excellent chapter. I really like sense of foreboding for the coming attack.
I'm wondering if Luna got A tip-off from Kreesha's condition (I'm sure the rumors abounded, either from guards or Amethyst chatting with Celestia or the other lieutenants), or from the magical signature of Nightmare's influence on Petar.
I would think that Princess Luna would know something was off as soon as Kreesha siezed out, much like the Red Empress was surprised that they still carried their shades. Being the Princess of the Night and the Steward of dreams, I think it would be safe to assume she knows quite a bit about mind (dream) magic and its side effects.
It really burns my ass when my wife says "We need to talk" and then it's something completely random and not urgent. Just those words alone makes me run through the events of the past few days to see what I might have done to warrant shenanigans.
Think your editor missed something there.
Star making a deal with the Nightmare, this can only well for him right? Surely he knows that the road to hell/Tartarus is paved with good intentions. Just how far is he willing to go to protect the little ponies? It it a slippery slope; one that I am sure Nightmare would be all to happy to kick him off of laughing maniacally as he falls prey to the same horrors that made Nightmare...Nightmare. People are counting on him for all kinds of things, so Starstep better not mess up now. Speaking of Nightmare, could she be bluffing slightly just so Star does not try anything? She obviously has some measure of power as demonstrated here but not as much as she seems to be trying to let on. Fala certainly does not think much of her, though I am curious as to how Luna and Celestia cannot feel them the way Fala can. The difference in power, perhaps? Then there is Fala herself that remains mostly an enigma. I still do not agree with her methods, but I cannot argue that having everyone under one absolute banner of command-a single unit-would be stronger than several allies that do not necessarily have common interests or goals against whatever horrors she seems to be aware of but has so far declined to divulge any details about. "Horrors from beyond the vale of time and space are coming to eat us so shut up" sounds like a pretty good draw card to me. Still not a fan of the whole "join me or I will break your legs" style of diplomacy but at the same time I cannot really bring myself to say I dislike her.
Also, sorry for the wall of text. My comments on most of the stories I read are more or less thought dumps, and this story gives me a lot to dump out which I guess is plus? For the story I mean, not my sleeping schedule or my college reading.
Iv been waiting for this chapter for ever and you had to cliff haing it did'nt ya? Please keep wrighting. I need more of this. When i reed this story i feel like im reading a hard back novel, then i hit the end of the chapter and it's like im forced to close the book for 3 weeks but im not even half way done with it.
Now THIS....is a Huge Chapter
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There will still be dark bits. I myself can enjoy a bit of dark comedy. I'm mostly saying it's not going to be so 'doom and gloom' in the next arc. A bit more upbeat with the undercurrent of darkness lurking.
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No worries about 'wall O text'. I like getting comments and reader thoughts. As for why Fala can see the Nightmare/Dawn. Short answer is, she's very, very old and has learned how to see spirits. She can see their lingering presence hanging over the two colts like a shroud. And true, her ideology is hard to agree with. Yet, what if you get a look at her Empire and the subjects are happy and coexisting? Was the forced conquest justified? It's a sticky topic.
Man was i happy when you updated the story :) Hope to read more of it soon.
Dont know why but i wanna punch Fala in da face so hard . Anyway keep up the good work
4528235 That's called "moral ambiguity" and those are the best kinds of villains, the ones that make you wonder if they're actually right.
That was fun. Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
Wow, another well done chapter. I don't like this cliffhanger business... I'm afraid of what Luna will say, I am afraid that everything will go to shit. I suppose that was your intention... Damn. This is why I love your writing. Thanks!
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Reminds me of a certain German dictator with a forbidden mustache... It is truly horrid.
Oh wow. *epic facehoof* My assumptions from the previous chapter were completely backwards. I had assumed Fala would be speaking through Kreesha, not her being a literal link. Now what you said makes sooooo much more sense.
In terms of the chapter, I once again enjoyed it. Heck, the fact that Star literally (dreamily?) ripped open the barricade into the Nightmare's mind was symbolic on two fronts. Not only could that be seens as Star embracing her as a part of himself, but a show of dedication to just how far he's willing to go to protect Equestria.
Deviating slightly, Fala makes some good points, which is not to say any of those points are absolute, given the Nightmare's opinions...which again I'm not sure how far can be trusted.
As for the writing, once again top notch. Loved it. Banter is still fresh between Star and Light, and I love it.
Another winning chapter! And that cliffhanger... Starstep is so screwed.
I love Nightmare...
Call me weird, but yeah I would love having her within my mind any day
Im actually really enjoyimg Kreesha as a character. She just has so much to her that can make her an amazing villian or just new addition to the whole squad. I hope she stays awhile because I want to see where you take her.
So... Luna's pregnant.
" For the Greater-good, he told himself."
That implies that there is a lesser good, StarStep. Be wary of going down that path.
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Yeeeeeeeah, I'm gonna squash that theory now. I suppose I keep putting off the 'talk' between Luna and Star. But stuff keeps happening. Anyhoof, short-answer: Luna and Celestia can't have kids. It's part of the reason that Luna is understanding of him siring a foal with Cheerilee and why Celestia can seem so 'motherly' to the other ponies. In a way, all of pony-kind are their children. Full explanations and all that jazz in the next arc. Still, feel free to guess again.
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Steelhoof probably falls into the 'lesser-good' category. But yes, Starstep needs to be cautious, but then, even after all this time he has that nasty little impulsive streak.
Almost like me.
Looking forward to "history lessons".