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God damn!!!
Young Star has learned much.
Heh, I actually had a feeling that something like this may happen.
Oh indeed, breakfast will be fun.
Well this chapter was great (and I'm not even referring to the clop).
We had Star finally establish his feelings for Scootaloo, Luna being cool with it (for now), and Scootaloo getting some much needed attention from Star. Even though I'm not yet buying that Scootaloo has feelings for Luna and vice versa (I still think they're both just doing because of their mutual love for Star, for now at least I'll have to see where their relationship with each other goes).
We also got another hint of Apple Bloom's stalker, so as to remind us that's still there, and of course Cheerilee and Twilight still seem to have some role to play in the future (Cheerilee in particular).
Now as for some lines Luna's 'You have much to learn on pleasing mares' was great and begs the question of just what all her and Scootaloo spoke about, and then Scootaloo's “Luna is made of all three pony races, right?” He nodded. “So...you need to learn how to please all of her' pretty much sets up Star's next challenge: get better at having sex. I mean Scootaloo fills the pegasus role, Cheerilee for the earth pony, now for unicorn he did have that romp with Sherry (and Light) but now we have other unicorn options for him like Sweetie Belle, and maybe even Twilight.
All in all a good chapter and it was ended in an epic way with Peeping Tom Celestia .
........I don't even need to say anything, do I?
Another great chapter!
Tower celestia is watching you rut.
Breakfast time is Trollestia time.....
whenever I see a new chapter is updated...my face.... all the same time:D
You ponies are silly.
Big thing of Scoots/Luna/Star courting each other and the thing most of you take from it?
Trollestia...
On another note, 102k words with this chapter. Almost at novel length.
The Force is STRONG with this one!!!
"Breakfast is going to be fun?"
What's going on here...?
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"What's going on here...?"
What do you mean?
993399 lol nice ceiling cat refernce
on a side note
StarStep: I LOVE THE FILLIES AND THE FILLIES LOVE ME!
lol celestia u pervert
I like this story.
You are a talented writer.
celestia has upgraded her telescope with camera attachment oh noes
Great chapter, I was looking forward to how the relationship with scoots would grow when she crashed into him. You established earlier that he had a feeling of love for scoots that was beyond friendship. Now getting to face that. Wonderful. the poor thing needs to learn to pleasure a unicorn more tho...
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I believe in Equestria they call them 'Herds'
One must wonder. Will scoots be thoroughly involved, or will Luna and Star's relationship just overshadow her. Will she be dating Luna like Star does . Will they just be sharing Star. Is this arrangement just to make things easier on Star's head. Will this help him, or will having a closer second partner make him even more troubled? Will this three way courtship even last? How long will Luna truly hold out on him? Why the hell is Celestia watching them screw like its a special performance? Sense Luna said "Lovers", does that mean she intends to screw them both? This feels like its just going to be a bit less romantic, and instead a lot more wild from here on out.
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So many questions, sir. Though some are very good. I can't answer a lot of it, due to spoilers.
I will say that Celestia and Luna were always close sisters. Kinda hard not to be when you've lived so many years together, not counting NMM time. Tia is a bit nosy in Luna's affairs. She's often trying to look out for her sister, though her meddling is not often wanted.
I assure you, it's still a romantic story at it's heart. You have to keep in mind that polygamy is ok in my idea of Equestrian society. Luna doesn't 'intend' anything. She's simply stating that if their relationship continued to grow, that she's ok with having them both as lovers. We'll explore this idea of multiple partner romance as we go along.
The story has always had a bit of a 'wild' streak, what with Luna's pranks. But have faith in my story. Have I let you down yet?
I sense trollestia ; also, congrats on 100k words!
I have been reading this story for a while now, and wanted to comment so much! but due to some account difficulties have been unable to.
just wanna say that this may be the best fan fiction I have ever read and hope you will stick with it till the end
keep up the good
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*wingbows* A humble thanks to you and all the others who have expressed their joy at reading the story. I only wish more would give it a shot. Sadly, by deciding to make it mature, I've cut off a lot of potential readers. Too bad. There's more to relationships and life than G-audience kissy-face.
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I'm Commander StarStep, and Luna is my favorite Princess on the Citadel.
Oh, god. I love this story so much, I sat down and read this in one fell swoop. For me, usually I just can't find any good fanfiction, but THIS! Holy crap THIS! This was one of the greatest stories I have ever read, period! This need more views!
Also. MOAR
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Haha, I thank you for the compliment. It does need more votes, I agree. But being a mature fic, it cuts out a lot of potential readers.
No worries about 'moar'. New chapter this afternoon.
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Was the most epic fucking curveball I've ever seen in my life
should have that halo taken away.
Princess Molestia tie.
Blindfolded, wings bound, and rump exposed to his desires,
later, in the same paragraph;
They looked into each others eyes as he began to ride
Anyway, last post I made, I forgot to compliment the story. Tis a truly great work you have going here, riveting with heart felt moments, and other times that just make me wince in comedic sympathy.
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SCOOTALO LAUGHTER.
Ok i gotta be honest with you ive enjoyed the story thus far its been pretty good not gonna lie but its getting a bit wierd i got nothing against threesomes cuz their awesome but still the romance in the story was much more interesting when it was just luna throwing scootaloo in a three way relationship makes the whole story completely un-relatable and im sorry but i art dissapoint on the direction your taking this but i will read on and hope for the best because you still have entertained me thus far no reason to get judgmental now
Honestly this had to be one of my favorite fan fictions, but lately it has been falling. I really dont understand why there has to be a harem with StarStep, I mean honestly I'd prefer to see Luna get more protective and jealous but the way the story is turning out is less than expected. Ill read on and see what happens from there but really.. Its getting a bit out of my taste for a harem on what I thought to be one of the best Luna romance stories ever.
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personally i like Luna's reactions. It shows that she is the moon princess and not just a marefriend.
When Star said that Luna didn't know scoots, I thought to myself. Sure she's met the crusaders, several times and had good reason to keep track of her. Flower girl at royal wedding, place of honor in the castle during twilights coronation, responsible for setting Discard free, was part of the first night mare night celebration. And special attention in sleepless in pony vile. I would guess all three of the cmc's are on the royal radar, maybe not in the way that would make the princess swoop down to help any time there in trouble like the way Sweetie is now,(but hay they don't seem inclined to intervene unless asked, just think of twilights whole life) but more on the way leaders need to keep an eye on national security risks.
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Well, this chapter was written before Season 3. Or at least before Sleepless in Ponyville. This is the downside of writing fan-fic of an ongoing series. One episode can turn your story's canon upside down. Ignoring that episode, Luna is 'aware' of Scoots, but other than brief meetings, didn't really 'know' her. She's one pony amongst thousands, that's all. Besides, Star can only guess at how much the Royal sisters know about all their subject. Luna tends to keep her knowledge close to her chest.
I'm just going to say it
I wish didn't get involved in their relationship at all
Hmm, I can already see a few comments about this, but it is pretty frustrating to have Scootaloo suddenly involved in the romance and all. If you noticed, I've bee totally fangirling about this fic for the last thirteen hours or so, so it certainly isn't a deal-breaker, not yet anyway. It just feels super out of place. The Scootaloo side of the story had seemed mostly resolved, and having someone whose character had only really been shown for one night before in the whole novel suddenly take on such a primary role is giving me whiplash. Not to mention that my inner fangirl is getting super jealous for Luna's sake here. Every other sentence was all Luna Luna Luna, and now that she's finally here, having some other girl who didn't just spend the last several weeks riding an emotional rollercoaster in order to court Luna just step into the relationship like that... it sorta slaps Starstep's whole journey in the face. Anyway, sorry for the rant. Other than this little twist I feel the story is going wonderfully, there are few other novels I'll spend seven straight hours reading throughout the entire night. Onward to chapter 27!
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The short answer is: Scootaloo is a part of his past and a relationship issue he never fully cleared up before running off to join the guards. I'd say, think of it as a side-note to his overall goal to be with Luna. A chance to see his character. I'd say at this point in the story he's wondering if he can have his cake and eat it too. Anyhoof, just stick with it, Scoots isn't as dominate in the story as you might think.
I think it's supposed to be of, not on....but I could be wrong >>
remove one of the 'resisted' s, the sentence works perfectly fine with either one in tact on it's own
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very wonderful and very sexy ^^ also aww what a cute ending. I even laughed a bit at the part with Celestia ^^
Oh, dear. I see we have a small bit of Princess Trollestia involved.
I approve wholeheartedly! *pony winkface cuz i dont know how to use those darn emotes*
Trolly has always held a spot in my heart, but Luna takes it to the next level. She doesn't even need a nickname! But alas, I am unsure as of how to interpret the threesome. Do I care? Not in the least. Will it make for one hay of a character development cycle (thingy)? Buck yes.
*just can't stop reading*
Holy fuck I need sleep..................................ok maybe one more chapter.
Hmm. The addition of Scoots to the relationship seemed a bit forced to me. It was simply too sudden and would have worked better had it been a result of a long love triangle drama and more development in the relationship between Star and Luna.
There's also the constant nagging problem with archaic english. While it's generally well used, you make the error of using "thou" when it comes after a preposition. The correct form would be "thee", as in "with thee", "to thee" and "from thee" etc.
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As for the archaic english, at this point in the writing, I was going off a guide someone had created about the hybrid speech Luna had used in the episode Luna Eclipsed. Basicly, it made it seem like she didn't use 'thee'. But in the lastest chapters I gave up trying to use such a system and went back to a more traditional archaic hybrid. One of these days I'll go back and clean it up.
As for Scoots, long story short, Luna did it more for Star's benefit than her own. Star and Scoots grew up together and have a long history. At this point in the story, Star is still finding his way and Luna is trying to be a very understanding pony. It will work itself out.
1879980 Pretty sure that "they looked into each other's eyes" meant that Star was looking at Luna, not Scoots.
SCOOTS! LUNA! STARSTEP! Colt/mare friends! WHA..... Did not see that coming. I need more of this beautiful poison.