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I am really starting to despise this 'Mister Steel'. Other then that, story is running along just fine. Keep it up!
Mister Steel Hoof is...I don't know. He's a mobster but also not a totally evil guy either. I want to say he's Mr. Burke from Fallout 3 and Michael Corleone if they had a child and he went to Ponyville. Yup, that's my consensus. Great chapter by the way. Finally, Starstep will have to decide what he values more.
Oh man, this has updated!
And I wonder if Star will decide to give up the feather this time.
Hangin' by a thread, once again.
I find Steel to be really interesting, and a very intriguing character.
Unless Steel is planning to do something bad with that wing, I think Star should give it to him: come on, it's the lives of AB and other mares held hostage by a dangerous unicorn VS a wing, symbolic or not, among many others.
This is all so very exciting
Well, I certainly hope Luna understands. Or maybe there's a way around giving up Luna's feather?
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I find him quite.... entertaining actually. Simply for the fact that he is that kind of person. It may be excruciating to do, but you must admit he is right.
All in all, I would think Luna would forgive Starstep if it meant saving a pony's life.
10/10, keep it up Indigo.
YES!!!!!!!! Sweet merciful bran muffins! An update! YEEEEEEAAAAAHHHHH!!!!!
Edit: *reads*...NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!
I think he should simply ask Luna. She does not appreciate deception, and she's not illogical; perhaps another feather? One that does not have the emotional attatchment of the 'courting feather'.
OH for Celestia's sake I leave this alone for a few weeks and its updated to the point of who knows what!
Ah, jeez. Well there goes the feather. No doubt about it. Don't really think its all that bad though. Act of nobility may gain him some extra points with his princess. But I have the feeling she may get hint of the other deal he made with Steelhoof, and if she does, that's uhhh, that's really going to suck.
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He probably doesn't have time to do so before AB is pretty much gone anyways - especially with Luna being away on a diplomatic emergency. $20 says that he does it, and Scoots ends up trying to replace his feather with hers, so they both end up pissing off Luna at the same time.
I want to know at what point StarStep's will go to ANYONE in law enforcement and bring Steelhooves up on obstuction of justice charges. His credentials as a guard have to count for something. ("Hey, guess what this guy just told me...") I think that at the minimum that's what Steelhooves is doing by refusing to divulge pertinent information to SEVERAL ongoing investigations. I'm sure trying to SELL that information to authorities is a crime in itself. He also just threatened to murder someone. It's probably also a crime to allow a murderer/slaver to continue to operate even if you don't participate. That whole conversation is enough to get subpeonas, search warrants, investigations, etc. for multiple ponies/locations.
But this is StarStep we're talking about...
P.S. Indigo Eclipse. Didn't you at one point do a short post on Elizabethian conjugation? I thought I saw one, but now I can't find it.
... dosent scoots also have a feather from our dark lady?
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StarStep could, but like Steelhoof said. He wouldn't stay held for long and then he'd vanish from the grid. An information broker like him has connections and important ponies at his calling. Besides, I don't think Star is too torn up about Granite's fate. Wings, and fire and nearly killing his friends. It's easy to look the other way.
I donno if I put something up on Elizabethian, but you can always google it. Mine is not perfect, but I do try to keep it correct.
>>“My, my. Quite the fireball. Threats of that nature will not work, Miss Scootaloo. By her own law, the Princess cannot force me to divulge information and torture was outlawed a thousand years ago. Certainly, she can lock me up. But with my connections and resources, do you really think I will remain long?” He smiled down at the little mare. “And then, I shall disappear. You will never find the answer you seek, and I assure you, you will never find the mares in your lifetime without help. Your friend will be gone forever.”>>
He awakens strapped to a dentist's chair, as a strange bipedal creature wearing white scrubs and a mask revs a drill, "So tell me, Mr. Steel... Is it safe?" He begins to drill into the stallion's teeth, oblivious to his screams.
Celestia may have made those laws. However, any reasonably competent government keeps a few people/ponies on hand/hoof who can gather information in more... effective ways. I would think a Princess a few thousand years old would have had more than enough time to plan for strategic legal circumvention.
1287658 Luna is also the Princess of Dreams... she might be able to pay him a more 'ephemeral' visit, torment him without touching him, leaving no evidence whatsoever it was even her. Drive him mad with ever more disturbing visions in his sleep until he can't sleep any more.
>>>"I told you this day would come. You know what I want.”
Star glanced at Scootaloo before the stallion, stroking the blue alicorn feather against his chest. “Luna's feather...”
The information broker's smile broadened. A glint of triumph in his eyes.>>>
And Alondro bursts in and punches the stallion in the face with a fist like a jackhammer, causing all his teeth be knocked out. "So sorry, but you know, everybrony on the forums paid me for this service. And I'm sure you understand 'business matters'... asshole."
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obstruction of justice is a television charge, police can tell you anything they want to get information from you, but there is no such thing as obstruction of justice.
Ha! quite the development in the last few chapters. I'm starting to like this Steelhooves guy, knows the weight of his actions and ask to be compensated in return, its a fair business pratice considering his line of work. Neither for good or evil, just pure business...and ethical if he can help it.
I shall be looking forward to more updates my friend, you're doing very well with the story so far and can't wait to see how it develops (still laughing in some parts that Mr. Starstep will have a "bastard" child of some regards ). Best regards man.
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I'm pretty sure that "Obstruction of Justice" is a real crime. After all, Bill Clinton's impeachment was partially based on it.
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I don't doubt that he doesn't care for Granite. It's just another charge that can be slapped on to Steelhooves. But I'd be very surprised if Luna wouldn't take certain precautions in the event of Steelhooves' escape - he's proven himself a flight risk, very resourceful, potentially dangerous, and more importantly, he's screwing with her relationship. Even more scary: What will Celestia think of him screwing with her little sister's relationship? I'm sure between the two Princesses there will be something perfectly legal that he can't worm his way out of - at least not without help from sources that will make the Princesses very sure that he should never again see daylight.
My father is an attourney
An update?
Have all my Yes.
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1287452 Thats his name, Mister 'Steal'
huh? see what I did there?
So once again Steel Hoof proves to be the most interesting character in the story, he's the perfect sort of foil to the idealistic and sometimes naive Star Step (although he's come a long way and his decision to let Steel Hoof handle Granite is proof of that) now to just see what he does with Apple Bloom and whether or not he gives the feather.
after thinking about it i think scoots will give her feather so he wont have to give his.
From scoot's little mention of fantasies, I wonder if she will be involved when Star eventually gets his big hoorah, with Luna or will it just be him and Luna alone, make it a little more triumphant for his part. Idk, it just seems like hes worked harder for her love, and sense scoots just came into the relationship and it would be kind of unfair for her to advance that quick through the relationship. Or that's just my opinion
*Steel wakes up tied to a chair in a dirty room, a strange device with multiple razor-sharp blades affixed to his crotch. He screams for help, but no one answers. On his right side is a large mason jar filled with a foul-smelling chemical, a large red button at the bottom. Suddenly, a TV next to him blares to life, revealing an image of a strange wooden dummy*
Hello, Mr. Steel. I want to play a game. You have spent your entire life watching others, slinking in the shadows while you observe their lives, learning their secrets. But what do you do with this information? Do you aid those in need? Do you assist the police in taking down violent offenders? No. You sell the information, ponies deepest, darkest secrets gone to the highest bidder, while you sit and do nothing as they are ruined, concerned only with your collection of useless baubles. These are not the actions of a stallion, but that of a petty foal, blind beyond his own wants. The blood of dozens of innocent ponies is on your hooves. Well, today we shall wash it away.
The device on your lap is a simple one. When this tape ends, a timer will count down sixty seconds. When the timer ends, the device will turn on, and you will watch as your stallionhood is taken from you. The only way to stop the clock is the button next to you, at the bottom of a jar of magically-enhanced hydrochloric acid, capable of eating through steel horseshoes in under thirty seconds. Will you be stallion enough to endure the pain, pain which is but a fraction of the suffering you have caused by your inaction and selfishness? Or will you allow the stallionhood to be ripped to shreds?
Live or die. Make your choice.
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My, my. SO much hate against Mr. Steelhoof. I mean, doesn't a pony deserve to make a living? It is his special talent to collect such hidden facts. Besides, collecting said information isn't cheap. Selling it to find more is a never ending practice.
You all should be more angry with the individual stealing mares for who knows what.
Raaggghhh! So many mixed feelings on Steelhoof, he is a fantastic mobster, who runs his business honorably, but he always proves himself to be just a businessman. If the price is right and you're not too objectional, he's on your side, which makes him more dangerous than a true foe as well as a great ally. I tip my hat to you good sir and I expect great things!
Edit: Why does everyone hate him? He's a businessman not a paragon of justice. He is EXACTLY who he says he is, so, I can't really hate him for that.
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Oh, I am. And I'm sure he/she will get what's coming to them. But Steelhoof can stop it, he can save those mares, but what does he do? He says, "Hmm, what can I get out of this?" Scumbag. He's the worst kind of bad guy, the manipulator. He has the power to do such good, but all he cares about is himself. He knows that right now, at least four or five innocent mares are enduring Celestia knows what at the hooves of some sicko, AND that more will join them. But all he does is sit in the shadows and play his games.
Love this story, by the way.
i suspect something very very random and unexpected to just, metaphorically, fly into the shop and cause total chaos that will ultimately make our little awkward hero make a choice
i still have to wonder though... just what exactly does possessing an alicorn feather mean at the base level...oh ho ho here's an idea, what if, StarStep paints a Gryphon feather the same of Luna's?
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Remember when Luna burst into the Colts-room to protect StarStep? There was a reason she knew something bad was happening. I'll let you think on that.
1300201 wait so its, I thought she was linked to him through pure magic or something like that.
Caught up! yes!
Over the last two days I have read every single chapter. I really love this story, its got enough romance, drama, and action to keep the story moving in a fresh manner. It's a breath of fresh air mate. Only down side are some minor grammatical errors (which ALL fics suffer from) and dreaded cliff hangers...you bastard.
Anyway I'll give a super detailed report about why this story is amazing...after the next chapter. Happy WRITING
Burn him. Tie Steelhoof to a stake and burn him.
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That totally works for me, the original incident being embellished and exaggerated over the years makes perfect sense. Thanks for the explanation.
IT'S FUCKING POKEY PIERCE! He's Trixie's brother, isn't he!?
out to the lobby where Lighthoof and the CMC's waited.
Should just be CMCs or, even better, just CMC
and the plot thickens dum dum duuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuum!
i still think trixies a bitch
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That was from chapter 31. Was there something wrong with it? Other than alicorn slightly misspelled?
2121243 who dosnt think trixie is a.bitch who should be beaten to near death and sent the moon
Every time Steel shows up I imagine him with a New York accent, and being all mob bossy. He's awesome1!
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I don't. While I do believe that she has made bad choices she is still a great character. In fact she is in my top 10 ponies list. There is alot more to her character than you think.
but that's just my opinion.
Well, I think this calls for....:
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1333005 And let everything he knows go to waste.
Steelhoof might not be a good pony, but he is necessary.
for some reason, I fearfully remembered this scene
What happened to Zecora?