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For an instant every pore, freckle, and orifice on my body looked and sounded like this guy:
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Everytime you post a new chapter up, I just stop doing WHATEVER im doing to read it. I love this story to much not to. i take this story as an inspiration to do things one could never dream of doing without believing in themselves. I absolutly love it.
coo.
To Love the Moon > Coursework
Damn forget having your head in the clouds...
....... woot
Nice chapter I do in fact appreciate the effort
!EPIC!
Here! Quick! Have a BatLuna!!!
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i really do love this story
i hope things with Scootaloo end up alright, but dreading they don't
Another spectacular chapter to this story dude
FINALLY!
Good chapter
bath time with luna? ALL MY YES'S AND NOSE BLEEDS
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An Affliction to the Heart, a series by Anonymous Pegasus.
GO LOOK AT IT.
woah awesome chapter so far
Quick! We must extinguish this situation before it ignites....
BOOOOOOOOOOOZE!
Mission Accomplished.
Such a romantic setting! A barren, bone-dry wasteland!
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Damn straight. All the griffons needed was some outlet for their competitiveness that didn't include beating the crap out of each other.
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The moon itself may be barren, and air-less. But the view is breath-taking.
Commence read.
Nicely done Star. Seems like that all went well.
Plus Luna want to be a Godmother.
Then they were on the moon.
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Only cool kids get to go to the moon. You know, and survive the air-less, cold vacuum of space long enough to enjoy it. I have to say, 8.3k words this chapter, I kinda was expecting more comments about what went on, and pony's thoughts upon it. Ah well.
So awsome! just take all of them! Happy hearts and hooves day!
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I don't have a special somepony, so the hearts are appreciated. Why is the world not filled with more moon-goddesses to love?
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I don't know
I guess you just have to look extra hard
Hopefully Luna will get over herself by tomorrow.
She constantly complains about Star being bold or presumptuous, then refuses to forgive Scoots?
How could anything be more presumptuous than asking for forgiveness when you don't feel you deserve it?
Scoots feels like she did something unforgivable, and is completely broken as a result.
Luna is a diarch. She is expected to do whatever it takes for the good of Equestria no matter the cost to herself.
Yet here she is dead set on punishing Scoots for making the exact decision she would be expected to make. Luna even said she was angry at Scoots for hurting her royal feelings, not for taking risks.
As it stands? Luna is acting as if saving all those innocent ponies wasn't worth the suffering it caused _her_.
I hope Celestia smacks some sense into Luna; right now she's being a disgusting failure of a pony.
Awesome Indigo.
The whole Sasha debacle is most interesting, I have a feeling that Luna's intervention will make Sasha more determined. Then the griffin fight, a wonderful idea, set in a very difficult situation for anyone and then redirect that hostile energy and aspect of culture into something far more constructive. I can imagine a games being set up or something to bring this to a more constructive outlet. It is interesting Silvermane found an invitation to Twilight and Cherilee's wedding was valuable enough for Luna's feather. I would assume this was the price she was asked.
Did she transport to the moon, or is it a dream-walk? I wonder this, and look forward to finding out.
You have excellent character development, learning from past mistakes then asserting and earning authority with a position. You have a really good charm with going. I can't wait for his feathers to finish growing in and he can get back into the air. Although I must wonder if the magic used for Pegasus flight may be hampered with his magic repellent aspect now.
In summary, please bring the next chapter soon!
It's a mirror...
TO THE MOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!!!!
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Let's not be 'too' harsh on Luna. She has a bad habit of not explaining herself, but her goals are generally noble. We're going to dive into the Scoots issue very soon, but for now, Luna wanted to spend quality time with Star, to reward him for his growth as a pony and meeting her expectations. A deep, and long discussion about Scoots would kinda spoil the mood and in her eyes, can wait till tomorrow to dive into. She has her reasons for her actions, though not always easily seen. The pieces to the puzzle have been sprinkled into these last few chapters and will come together to a conclusion of that part of the relationship, soon.
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Silvermane? I guess you meant Steelhoof. Well, if you'll remember, he paid for the invitation to this griffon gathering, and apparently, also to Twilight's wedding. Without spoilers, he also received a few other invitations for further on. An information broker LOVES big gatherings of higher-ups like these. It's a buffet of information and tid-bits of gossip he might otherwise miss gathering it 2nd hand, er hoof. Luna is no fool, she knows what he's about. Sometimes it's necessary to deal with ponies like Steelhoof. The depth of the exchange will come to light soon enough.
letting it's power flow through us
Tssssk
You need better editors!
Quick Star, touch the mirror!
To the MOOOOOOOOOON!
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I don't have one. None. I proof-read a few times, often rewriting a segment if I'm unhappy with the flow. There was actually a scene where Star gets into a fight at the party but...eeeeehhhhh, it REALLY went against his character building and was too dark. I have to remind myself to balance the heavy stuff with humor to keep the readers, and myself, from falling into a funk. Besides, it was funnier to have the stuck-up griffon nobles get Viking-level drunk with claw-wrestling and chug-fests than to have a throw-down with Star and/or Lighthoof.
Anyhoof, yeah, did a little research on "It's and Its" seemed my understanding of its usage was slightly off. Went back and fixed em.
Well star wanted the moon, he got the moon
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You have nooooo idea.
2110031 It was a great solution, and very believable. Great chapter!
A good mix of romance, cultural exploration, shenanigans and what have you.
2109333 Funny, being the vacuum of space just being there would "take your breath away."
Great chapter... I'm kind of worried that Luna doesn't seem to want him to talk with Scoots.
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Painting this picture of griffon culture has been a lot of fun and has a nice contrast to the soft-handedness of Equestria. Though now that Luna is back, the kingdom has some teeth again. They've become a fantastic story element to use against the royal sisters. One vs One, the sister can probably handle most anyone. But an entire nation? Not so much.
Next chapter, THE MOON! Along with Scoots , history of the fortress and butt-hurt citizens of Spurlin . Huzzah!
Sorry if my self-editing isn't the best. I do put effort into catching as much as I can. Alas, I did not do well in English class back in my school days, despite my constant reading. I was more of an Art and History guy.
2109852 Well...I thought Sasha was getting really out there. Star did well in changing the ire of the fighting Griffons to that of cheerful drinking. Was worried the protesting may have worked against Star and how he handled it with the help of the guard. Celestia seems to be doing fine for now and Light seems to have some pull as a consort. Twilight and Cheerilee are having happy times being together. The contacting of Scootaloo seemed to put Luna off. They still haven't really gotten to talking with her. Now on the Moon what will be something Star could say that may offend Luna or come off as stupid?
Just FYI.
That, right there. I lol'd.
As for the rest of the chapter; very clever way to have Star handle the fight. Also, the bath scene was filled with both steamyness (maybe a little pun there. . .) and adorableness.
Then that closing. . . I figured it might have been some sort of dreamscape at first, but then his realization left me with a 'hoooooh damn!' moment.
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The default page, if you click the banner at the top it should be right at the top under the navigation bar. it was the top featured story, actually.
>>>Curious, the colt tore his eyes from Luna's to gaze up into the void of space and a shining marble of greens, blues and whites that hung in the air before them. In that earth-shattering moment, he realized he was on the moon.>>>
And then his blood boiled from the vacuum and he died. The End!
(could not resist)
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In your last chapter you said for all of us to, 'BUCKING COMMENT!'. There, I commented.
(I've been reading the entire story for hours... Luna, I'm tired.)
((Really great story, BTW))
:3
Enjoying this story more and more, its cute and fun but with a good growing story
>> Indigo Eclipse She has let Scoots suffer horrible magically-powered emotional backlash for days, and refused to say or do anything to help. Luna said that Scoots _kept_ begging her not to blame Star for his role in the transaction, which means Luna didn't even tell her Star wasn't in trouble.
There is nothing noble about leaving somebody in agony.
Wow! The description in this chapter is phenomenal! I felt very pulled into your story this chapter, as if I longed to be there myself. You really tapped into an immersible side of your writing! I really am heavily enjoying this piece, man. You've truly crafted a well paced love story and I appreciate that quite a lot.
Aah... you really got me on the bathtub scene. It is as if you literally pulled it from my own mind and fantasies. Great job!
Amazing chapter, just can't wait for the next one. Like seriously I can't wait, hopefully you finish it in a week or two because I'm dying to know what happens next
And I agree with what everypony else is saying about your story
It's the best!!! Especially since Luna is my favorite pony ever. Anather good story incase you ponies need something to read in the meantime is "Man of War", "What's Love got to do with it", and the continuation of that story "Love has Everything to do with it". Good luck guys :)
I was giggling in excitement through the entire thing
I am so happy that we got to see cheerilee and twi. And I can't wait to see scoots and what the deal with steel hoof is.
But right now. I'm sensing a naughty night on the moon, we'll see
That was brilliant.
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I hope they brought bananas!