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wooOAAAHHHH!! I did NOT see that coming!
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Ah, I suppose the question remains: Want or Do not want?
Oh my. That ending...
And I had thought that Scootaloo was suffering from some sort of magical feedback as a result of giving up Luna's feather, and you have now reavealed that that was indeed the case. Wow. The other information that you gave was both sad yet it does make a lot of sense. Star has been enamored with Luna forever, and Scoot now realizes just how deeply such a thing can run, as certain things in life cannot be understood until they are either seen or felt, like Scoots just did. Makes me wonder as to what exactly is going to happen between Scoots and Star, as you've essentially stated that Luna has cut her off, so to speak. Friends with benefits?
As far as Luna and Star, their relationship is something that continues to impress me with how you manage to convey it, here poor Star was expecting the sky to fall on him while Luna has even more respect and admiration for him now. And they're now on a first name basis as well, on top of him being promoted to her personal guard. A lot of information to take in all in the span of a single chapter I gotta say. All in all though, your words held a hell of a lot of strength behind them yet again.
the exchange between Light and Celestia. Yikes, I did not see her seducing him coming at all. I recall that you had dropped hints here and there that he did like her, and seeing this while Luna and Star were peeping was both comical to a degree, somewhat serious, and also rather heartwarming. It seems that altough they are guards, they do not fully understand that sometimes things can and will go wrong despite every step taken to prevent it, and that at times death is unavoidable, and this is in regards to both the fallen guard and Copper's death. However, Celestia seems to have done a most excellent job talking with Light about facing it and that they did what they could and no blame was to be laid at their feet. It was obvious that Shining had recognized this with his light reprimand a few chapters back. And then of course Celestia and Light closing out the chapter with Light bolting the door closed, wow.
Another great chapter, I am truly loving this story of yours. Looking forward to the next chapter, and may your muse continue to bombard your grey matter with ideas to keep this story flowing. It is still strengthening I would have to say as well, so damn fine.
Ohohoho, Lights gettin some luvins! ALRIGHT!
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Silly pony. You seem to be under the delusion that a multi-thousand year old pony who's been too busy to love others in the last thousand years, would be a prude. Dear Celestia loves everypony. Some just deserve a little extra. Or perhaps, it's all some master plan of the white tyrant! All hail the Lunar Republic!
1569180 haha, i more of found it to be lighthoofs response to it all! also might we be seeing some of that ever erodic molestia clop? or will it be as normal as clop can get?
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WANT!
If that's ok...
I guess you could say, that we're in for some hot sex.
YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!
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Thank you for taking time to write out your thoughts on the chapter. I had wondered if any reader would pick up on the subtle hints I sprinkled through the story about Light's affection for Celestia. Not everything I've put in the story is obvious and will go unnoticed by most. But it's there, simmering till it boils out into a lovily stew....of pony love I guess...and drama. Bit spicy. Anyhoof. Thanks again for expressing your opinions and thoughts on the chapter. More to come.
hohoho first luna now celestia about time that mare got some
Oh man, I loved this chapter. One small thing I found, though. When they're talking about his feathers changing colours, "discoloured" is not the right term to use here. Total discolouration would leave the feathers white, so what happened here is basically the opposite.
You better not leave us waiting for the next chapter too long. There's just too much suspense.
Also, I foresee love-triangle drama coming Lighthoof's way.
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Haha, you can't imagine the number of Celestia-sex puns i have prepared for the fall-out.
Yes ponies, expect a bit of Sun-Goddess Clop next chapter. But like always, laced with important relationship elements and hints of things to come.
What can I say, I like to get plot in your clop.
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I see what you did there. Keep up the good work! This is easily one of favoritest favorites.
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No problem at all, this story truly is a great read and it's only right to offer up five minutes of my time when you've probably spent hours per chapter to give us something for free.
And your hints were indeed most subtle, although I would think the flavor of the stew that came of it was more sweet than spicy. Although now that you made mention of it, I might have to go back and reread to see if I have missed any other subtle hints concerning other situations that have yet to pass, it's been a little bit since I first started following this story.
And I'll gladly continue to give you my thoughts, although a lot of times it will be mostly speculations on matters coming up based off of whatever you've given us. Dunno why, but I love it. I'll gladly be looking forward to the next chapter, and expect to see yet another comment running in the numerous paragraphs. : )
Although I do have one question that has been nagging at me, although it does not require an answer as it could very well be a spoiler. Baring a major curveball, Star and Luna will indeed continue to get closer and closer until maybe even marriage, or whatever might pass for something similar. It makes me most curious if you plan to address the mortal vs immortal at some point, as well, I love happy endings. I'm sure you know what I mean by that. Just really really curious about this point. And oh, forgot to mention it, but lovely twist with the wings, I figured they still had the properties when he deflected Copper's magical blast, however wasn't expecting his wings to go black.
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Yes! Yesh! YESH!...please.
Boom tchika bow wow
And I never saw Luna's "examination" coming. Well played
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Yes, mortal/immortal is a MAJOR point to this entire story, and part of the reason I wrote it. It's my sort of love-letter to Luna. A very long story on the understanding of what immortal creatures must endure. Many of us wish we could live forever, but never truly grasp what that entails. Even those placed on pedestals as the Princesses are, should love and be loved. Not as all-mighty goddesses, but as beings who were dealt a curse and a blessing. It's through Star's eyes that Lighthoof has begun to see this, and has been welcomed most warmly by Celestia.
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Want. definitely want.
1569100 do want
I expected clop, though at this point I suppose I shouldn't be surprised that the true direction of the story has managed to elude me once again. Not to say that I didn't enjoy this chapter; rather, I enjoyed it immensely and as always eagerly await the next chapter. Can't say I saw that kiss between Lighthoof and Celestia though; at least not up until I realized Lighthoof went to see Celestia and Luna decided to take a look.
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Better yet what are the "misses" are going to to say when they find out about Lighthoof and Celestia. But I can imagine Starstep wanting to "bro-hoof" his fellow on getting Celestias admiration. It seems that all the princess are being paired up with the Royal Guard as we have Shining Armor, Captain of the Royal Guard, married to Cadance; Starstep the Shadow-Guard with Luna; and now Lighthoof, one-time Sun-Guard, having Celestia. Quite the revelations indeed, it shall be interesting to see what happens from here on out. Keep up the good work man!
I don't remember if you have been featured before, but whatever the case may be in that regard,
Congrats on getting featured!
'Neigh! Behave Thyself!'
Oh Luna Luna Luna... Is thy medicine so bitter that thou canst not swallow?
On the flipside, another excellent chapter. I do like the way you write Luna. It's refreshing from most of all the 'I'm so serious and not light hearted' Luna's I've read before. It's much better.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
~Valorousspectre~
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To me, Luna is summed up as thus: Regal with cold logic, balanced by her teasing, playful side. It's easier to prank others when they think you're serious all the time.
It is not that she cannot take the medicine, it is just that she was 'interrupted' by her sister's guest. I've always pictured Luna as being far more reserved of the sisters. Doesn't help she has a thousand years less to adapt.
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I know, I was teasing.
And that does seem more believable. Excellent job.
Hmmm, kay. Honestly, I'm not too sure about this turn of events. But his other two mates better be fine with it!
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Not too sure? How so?
Well Star's discussion with Luna wasn't as bad as I thought it would be. There's a saying that you gotta take the good with the bad, but the emphasis is on good here. I'm curious on how Star's relationship with Scoots is going to go now, along with Light's new royal relationship.
I am guessin that the next chapter is going to be mature... also I wonder if celestia knows about Luna's evesdropping spell and that she is being watched
LIGHTHOOF! GO GET SOME!
No seriously, I'd like to see some kind of intimate interactions in the Celly/Light concept.
Can't wait for the next update! Write on, dear author, write on!
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Are they not getting married. Now he may well get freaky with Celestia, without their consent--which is the point.
But all in all, I get protective over relationships. So you should take it as a compliment that your story stirrs emotions within me. Because the realtionships are indeed, well formed.
1569742 Well Indigo I'm not sure how I should feel about this thing between Celestia and Light....(and its only till now that I fucking realize...Starstep...night.....lighthoof....sunlight....im so stupid)...uhhh..I kind of like it, I kind of don't as well, but I don't know why (I'll just discuss that more with you through mail. Is that fine with you?) I just know that I somehow....just want to see more of this...god damn it, yeah, I gotta read what goes down in that bed. Its so odd, this is the weirdest thing. It's making me so confused lol. Just hop on that next chapter damn it. I swear I've never wanted to see a mature chapter so badly....well...ever
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Haha, well, I never expected everypony to like everything I write. As long as you understand it all has a purpose. Yes, the names were a subtle foreshadowing. As you've seen before, I like to sneak little things in there till the right moment then, BLAM! The pieces fit. Feel free to message me, just be aware I wont do spoilers but I'm happy to discuss what has happened and characters.
I have to admit, I was hesitant about writing out the upcoming mature scene, but the response from this chapter has been generally positive, so I'll get right on it.
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Like Tia said, she wouldn't predict where this would lead. Essentially giving Light a free pass if he wanted it to be a one time thing. She's far too mature and experienced to try and tie down a pony. This was suppose to be a reward for a selfless pony, not a punishment. As we've seen in the show, everything Tia does ends up having a purpose.
So, does this mean Light is gonna ask Celestia to join his herd?
1570191 Hey now, I said I was confused, so I'll just see how this goes.
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Indeed. I did not mean anything harsh towards you. You're welcome to message if you'd like. If I can clear up the confusion, I'd be happy to.
huh...
well the only thing i'm worried about is Light/Tia getting in the way of Star/Luna
I do want to see where you're going with this, but it just seems strange to me for some reason
oh and btw...
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Dear god how do you do this?! i just finished reading and my heart is pounding from when i was worried about how luna would react to what star had to say. Your stories are soo amazing! love it love it love it!
Get on that Light
Heh, only read 3 chapters and i'm hooked! Now I've got a lot of catching up to do...Awesome story, love where this is going! Also, 1001th comment, F yeah!
thank you author, it was a most wonderful blessing, I guess its the battle of the bands and this griffon bit. finally getting a close on hat steelhooves or whatever his name is then story over, unless you throw in some more stuff!
I look forward to how this story ends, and I am more excited about the journey to that end.
A side thought, Lights getting royal coitus before even Star... Then again Star is basically marrying the Royal Flanks, "It is a most lovely backside, if I say so myself." -Princess Luna
Reading hath been completed! Shall await more.
I love this story, having just caught up last chapter it's a little easier to pick up on those subtle hints, and any Luna shipping is amazing, but this is the first that i have read with an OC/Luna, and i am amazed at how good you have made this. Your way of portraying Luna's old speach isn't over the top, but it's still there and adds to her character, and then the way that you make her serious but still have that playful teasing side is what i feel to be the best way to portray Luna. And with all the OC work and creating new personalities for existing characters but at an older and more mature age is just... Wow. To be able to write anything like this would be awsome, and this is a story that i cant wait to see in my updates.
Awwww! No dragon wings :'(
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Jesus-god this thing is huge. Two+ pages long. Hell, i've read chapters shorter than this comment, ~1,200 words altogether. This was originally written last night, between 11PM EST, and 1AM EST. Times are rough estimates. It's 12:56AM, and i've probably rambled through a major portion of this. The comment's timestamps will be off, because I must have fallen asleep at my desk without posting my comment. Again.
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I can't say i picked up on all of those little hints about Light, but i did manage to get a few in. That surprised me, but not quite 'holy shit, out of left field' surprise. More along the lines of, 'I had my suspicions, but i wasn't hedging my bets on it', and was pleasantly surprised then.
Now, onto other thoughts. This chapter held quite a few multilayered meanings here, and i know i missed some, i always do. Some foreshadowing (beyond the obvious next chapter), that i've not quite figured out where i think it'll go afterwards. I've got some ideas, but like Celly/Light, nothing solid enough to say, yet. If i get anything solid, you bet i'd probably post it, unless you don't want potential spoilers, then that i can understand.
Star was obviously worried last chapter about what Luna would think of the op. She surprised the hell out of him by not quite being mad at him, nor disappointed. I know she wants to help cheer him up, but in her way. I have a feeling, that she was watching their actions the whole time, forming her own conclusions about why they did what they did, but she, like they did i imagine, also saw that going around Shining as not a choice. She respects him more for admitting what he did, how he felt and such. Celestia feels much the same about Light, in their situation, i imagine. Light came clean, and this is her way of rewarding Light for telling nothing but the whole truth, at least in my mind. I would touch on Scootaloo's 'whiplash' for lack of a better term, but i can't add anything that 1569126 (go on, hover over it, it's a reply link) hasn't already said. Much of my thoughts mirror his. I saw a few signs of Light/Celly though, but i imagine he's seen a few signs i've missed on something completely different. While i think Shining's 'punishment' was a bit on the light side, they still needed some form of reprimand for just going around his authority like that. I hope Scoots will be alright, given time, and honestly, kind of called it (again, like Light/Celly, nothing completely solid, but had my thoughts) in my head on what the cause of that breakdown of hers was. Luna... i'm not really sure what to think of her. If i had one adjective to describe her, it would be 'level-headed'... at least until this chapter. Her little outburst of 'NO!' changed that. Now that adjective would be best changed to 'loving'. A perfect match to Celestia, who shares the same adjective in my mind. Both would do anything to see their ponies safe, even if it meant losing their own lives. Much like the two guards now with them. After... it's closer to say two hours writing this... i can pin one of my feelings. I'm honestly scared. I'm used to having a solid idea of where the next couple chapters might go, and i've got nothing but a few strings to play with. That... might be the exact reason i don't want to wait for more. I had an idea fairly early on, and then slowly, i was picking up less and less direction, and now... i've only got a rough idea of what might happen (next chapter was given away, so that doesn't count), two or three chapters from now.
There's definitely more to my thoughts, i just can't seem to form them. I've read the chapter twice now, and there's something i want to write, but my mind won't form the thought coherently enough to let me write it, so i'm writing this run-on sentence instead. My mind seems to be running (or trying to, anyways) in about three different directions. One, Star/Luna, i'm happy to see them coming closer together, that was the tame one. Two, 'What the fuck just happened? I saw this coming, maybe another ten chapters from now, i must've missed something.' is pretty much now my thoughts with Celly/Light. Three, 'Huh, i want more of this, and oddly, i don't feel like i should wait'. This is the oddest of the three. I'd say... 95% of the time, i can wait patiently for an author to update his/her stories. I think this particular story is now becoming one of those few. The ones i drop everything for when it updates. When it updates, it's never enough. I wish i knew what triggered that particular feeling in me, so i can squash it like the bug it is. I absolutely abhor that feeling. I feel like i should demand more, but it's not what i should do. I ask for more, help find errors, enjoy the story, and more, all the while waiting patiently between updates. That's not the case here. I can't seem to wait patiently for more, and that... i would say scares me, but it really doesn't. It's more an uncomfortable feeling, really.
Indigo, you have a way with words... I've only read a few stories that can compare to how you portray a truly believable relationship, and none are on this site. I can honestly say, that pretty much no matter what your stories are based on, if they are a romance like this one at all, i'd pick it up in a heartbeat, even if the original material was... *shudder* Twilight (i don't mean the pony). The way you write these characters, they feel so real in my mind. If i may be a bit... *searches for the closest word* boastful(?) here, the characters you write are more believable than the crap that is ever on TV. I'm not even mentioning 'Reality TV' shows and the 'real life' they portray. You've got some real talent there Indigo. Try to never lose that edge, keep it sharp, and you'll do so much more than write fanfics on a site about ponies. Hell, Indigo, this probably isn't my first essay comment to you. I probably wrote one last chapter (or the one before, hell, i don't remember, with as often as they come).
And onto errors that i noticed. Just a couple, minor little things really.
I think you mean 'I imagine so'. It's hard to image something with your mind, unless your mind is a hard drive. Then imaging it is pretty easy, just need to plug it into a computer, eh? (/works-in-IT-no-regrets)
While i'm not sure this is incorrect, a way to expand upon this sentence, possibly giving it a bit more detail, would be to change it as such: 'We undermined Shining's authority, and I... I got a pony killed, Princess.' Adding that little bit seems to me, to make it just that bit more emotional. Then again, i'm crazy, so take it with a grain of salt.
Watch the double negatives, this sounds completely weird, taken literally from the scene. 'I don't need any cake or parties' sounds better.
In closing: You make me feel like i'm actually reading something that actually happened. Keep up the good work, Indigo. Don't be afraid to hit me up if you need help, and need a possibly long-winded answer, or to talk, or whatever.
pattern, pattern in the chapters...
I see it. the next chapter has a mature warning
...
.................!
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haha. Is that good or bad?