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Boy, that escalated quickly.
IT UPDATED! IT UPDATED!!! BUCK YEAH!!!
Awesome chapter man... can't wait to hear how Nightmare will reacte to hearing what exactly Starstep is.... THAT will be interesting...
I'll be honest here, I didn't actually call it being Nightmare Moon, but I did have a feeling that the alicorns were somehow related too/were Celestia and Luna.
Bruva though, bruva, on another excellent chapter.
Nightmare. Bucking. Moon.
Baby Celestia, maybe? I get the feeling that these are the small parts of the princesses that they're ashamed of, with Tia being but a foal, longing for her parents and only wanting to play with her sister, and Luna, hiding the darkness within. Maybe the princesses locked this part of themselves here, and they [the small part] being only a small part of the whole, can only be saved by being returned to the princesses?
*Food for Thought*
great chapter! ghosts... never trust em, real big question marks they are.
Cool, I was kind of thinking you might go in this direction with the shadow thing. Looking forward to the next installment :twilight blush:
I hope Dazzle makes it out of this alright.
Nice. Very nice indeed.
Main question for me is if NMM is the presence that they always felt or if that is something else entirely :)
Edit:
Ok. I feel that these two Characters, NMM and her little sister, are not directly related to Celestia and Luna. This isn´t necessarily true but for me it makes a certain ammount of sense because otherwise Luna wouldn´t have bothered with her alter ego I think.
My Theory is that the story of these two is connected to that of the griffons and that some pretty nasty stuff went on. After all they were chained and bound within a structure very likely built by gryphons. There seems to have been a lot of "building on ruins" thing going on with the structure going very deep until you find slumbering dragons. Like a giant hounted house ^.^
(Also makes it easier to explain the dead bodies from my point of view.)
Furthermore it is going to be interesting to find out how our protagonist will get out of there. Maybe a deal with the nightmare? *wink wink, nudge nudge* *being as unsubtal as possible here*
I can imagine posession happening, after all that is how NMM seems to have gotten out before.
Would also like to point out that she might be a very good sister. After all she came very quickly after her little sister cried for help ;)
I'm so far on the edge of my seat I'm going to fall flat on my face XD This is amazing! Keep up the good work!
I really really don't like what the deal with Steelhoof implies...
So... Nightmare Moon and her... sister?
3675353 nightmare moon hmmm...... so would it be sunflare sol, daydream sol? i have no idea but the nightmare sol thing just dont work for me.
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Surprisingly she seems good so far...
And what's up with the creepy alicorn skeletons...
Mrughahhh! Sorry. Christmas time busystuffs! Check your email, though, I knocked it out in a couple hours. Now I shall sleep...
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I agree, remembering the fact steelhoof doesn't give something for nothing (normally)
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I agree in that they are somewhat related to luna/tia but why would they be scared of guards though
All in all another nice chapter to read and another early christmas present for me *Squee*
Keep it up
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I really really hope Luna isn't part of the deal...
We do know Steel seems to have an obsession about her...
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true, true
That would make it an interesting relationship if she was. I'm hoping not though
What would he gain from the information he gives should be the question
what a way to stop the chapter
HO-LEE SHIET!!! THAT.IS.AWESOME
CONA'T FRIGGIN WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPEEEEEER!!
WWOOOOOO
ITS SHIFT, NOT A CAPSLOCK.
Interesting to see where this is going. So NMM is an actual alicorn of her own in your story?
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Yes. In my head-cannon she and her sister were the first two alicorns. Though 'nightmare' isn't her original name. How it ties into Luna and her fall will be explored. I just couldn't do a true Luna story without diving into her darkest hour.
The Action! The Suspense! The Drama! The Excitement! The Darkness of The Unknown! It is Starstep and Lighthoof vs. The World! OH MOST WONDERFUL OF CHRISTMAS EVES!
Apologies.
Dude, I... I don't even know what to say. This is getting even better than it has been. Now I must reaffirm my grip on the edge of my seat until next update.
3676347 haha. Well until then, tell me what tid-bits you enjoyed most in this chapter.
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Steelhoof, for sure. I love the idea of evil being used for good. It's nice to see a character who isn't pure evil.
The tease of backstory. That there are two dead alicorns, and that Tia and Luna are not the only ones who have existed, is amazing. Headcanon is half the reason that I read fan fiction.
Griffon magic users. I always like to see new things like that. I really wish the show would bring those other species in more. Personally, I want to see more about the Diamond Dogs. I have this whole system of runic magic in my head for them.
And, as always, Star and Light are just great characters. :)
Just in case:
Calling dibs on Nightmare Feels!
That is so rattling.
Okay... first off, those sneaking scenes: I was hiding too. I've been playing the Thief series for the past few weeks, so running between shadows has been on my mind lately. This chapter did noting to quell those feelings.
Two: when Steelhoof is scared, you know shit got real.
Third: Sweet Jesus, we're all gonna die!
Fourth: I LOVED this chapter. just soaking in that atmosphere is exciting. even in-between the 'action' scenes, the tension is so thick you can metaphor! This, along with the recent chapters, have been so tense, so suspenseful, and so nerve-wracking that I think I need to stop reading this in the dark. Bravo, excellent, amazing.
My favorite part of this fanfic is the flavor text. The way things are painted in the story just draws you into the world. I know I say this every chapter, but its true every chapter. It is so hard to balance flavor text in a way that is not too vague and not overly explanatory. Indigo continues to walk that razor edge of painting the scene without drawing attention away from the story. The characters continue to work off each other wonderfully and the plot just keeps getting bigger and more intense. I don't know which was a bigger 'oh shit' moment: when Star offered Steel a job working with Luna or when they encountered NM.
Who is the filly ghost? What happened to the others on the bridge? Is the fortress safe? Whats happening to the city?
I'm absolutely giddy over here. the only bad part is that I'm likely to forget most of what happened by the time the next chapter is uploaded.
Oh, but what a ride it was this chapter. excuse me while I go get a cigar to calm me down.
hahaha i came back to check up on what chapters have been aded and none other than idylia is editing chapters XD
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The holidays kinda buggered our communication over the editing of the chapter, but hopefully it'll be much smoother for Ch. 50.
So how did you enjoy 49? Anything that really grabbed you?
CHRISTMAS CAME EARLY!!! YAY! CHAPTER UPDATES ARE ALWAYS A WONDERFUL SURPRISE! Thank you you made my Christmas eve a happier one!
Holy shit. That was just so intense and insane and exciting. It made my skin crawl and me blood run cold.
Much information
Many questions
So wow
Can't wait for the next chapter, you just made my Christmas and I thank you for that. Merry Christmas! :)
Oh this story is beautiful, this chapter chilling and the cliffhanger threatening and awesome. The lead-up to the appearance of Nightmare Moon is astoundingly well writ and I felt real chills the entire time. The ghosts screaming at them in silent horror, the two dead Alicorn's in the basement! Oh, I really am keen for the next chapter.
Okay, theory time!
My theory? Well, it's hard to guess because technically the original battle between Celestia and Nightmare Moon happened at the Castle Of The Royal Pony Sisters as well as the battle between Twilight and Nightmare Moon, but then there's the apparition. That creepy little ghost Alicorn called out for her 'Sister!' and out came the True Ruler Of The Night. This is hard to guess and the closest thing I have to a theory is that Nightmare Moon came back to a scene from WAAAY back in the day of one of their doubtless many, MANY crimes and there just so happened to be a little Celestia there...I dunno'...the plot is just so convoluted and twisted and missing just enough that I REALLY want to know what is happening and the fact that there is a dead army of ponies in the (possible) Ancient Capital of an even more Ancient Griffon Empire...HURRY UP WITH THE NEXT CHAPTER...that is...if you want to.
Good stuff man.
3684750 one thing to keep on mind is that the moon is only one part of what makes up "the night". Just like Luna is attuned to the moon and Cadance to love, so too are these early alicorns attuned to something. Unicorns seem to specialize in a type of magic, with a little overlap into other feilds. So I'll just throw this out there, Luna is mistress of the moon, not dreams. She just happened to learn from another. ;)
3685359 Oh Wow...I think I see where this going...I think...and that will be AWESOME!!!
If you're going down to the forbidden ruins...
You're gonna have a bad time
3687246 not nessicarily. There could be tentical monsters, or sexy ghosts. Or sexy tenticals ghosts.
Commence read.
That was an interesting turn of events.
Do alicorns go into heat too? Starstep could get lucky if you know what I mean *wink *wink.
Well, enough of my nonsense, I doubt they can now since they are trapped by Nighmare Moon in there. I wonder what happened to Steelhoof and the others when Star and Light got attacked and why didn't Light just fly up with Star on his back guided by the light from Luna's feather? Anyways story is still good as ever and don't forget my idea for a clop scene about Luna in heat.
3688764 right after the feather lit up, they tried to go back up but during their fall some ruins got knocked loose and collapsed the passage back up from the tunnel the landed in.
As for alicorn heat, perhaps an artificial one for fun. Ponies who were born alicorns are biologically time-locked. Otherwise, wouldn't the immortal sister have kids by now? We'll actually have a discussion with an alicorn about this topic in the near future.
I liked, no, loved this story!
...........up until the ending.
Usually, when I see the great villain revealed as "Nightmare Moon" or "Discord", it feels like a cop-out. Way overused villains in my opinion.
Now, there are some stories that use them in an effective and, most importantly, original way. Upheaval, Past Sins, and Background Pony, for instance, use NMM and DC in a novel way.
I am really hoping you have a great deal of originality here, so you can add to that list. Best of luck :)
So I just spent the last 3 days reading this story. I need more
3689292 I hope so too, considering I've been planning on her being in the story from the very start. She's a part of Luna's past so I'd be foalish not to at least use her in some capacity. All I can ask is not to pre-judge till you see what I have in store. That and I'll say that she's not a 'great-villain' in this tale, perhaps antagonist at best. Maybe that alleviates some of your fears?
3689808 Sure does! I'm confident no matter what you write will impress me, if the rest of the story is anything to go by. Good luck!
3687310 or a flying spaghetti monster...
WOO UPDATES!!!
After 3 days reading start-to-finish, I gotta say this is officially my favorite fic, and I can't wait for the next chapter.
3695497 Glad you've enjoyed it so far.
Be sure to tell your friends! New chapter should be up this coming weekend.
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No. I mean there's no more chapters to read and I'm literally making a storm of noise in my house. I get mood swings whenever this happens.
Sorry...
Indigo..an amazing story if I must...can't wait for more