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As the Grand Galloping Gala draws to a close, tensions linger from Discord and Fluttershy's fight. Discord, nervous and remorseful, is afraid to approach her. Meanwhile, Fluttershy regrets yelling at him, even while knowing better.
The good news: Fluttershy knows she can set everything right again.
The bad news: it's going to require her to come to grips with old wounds.
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Skipped blog. Making sense.
My mind's still going over what precisely about that original ep you didn't like. It may firm up as this sinks in more, though.
For what it's worth, I found myself having to resist reading the narration parts in John's voice. Good job with the Discord 'tone' leaking through into that as well.
Liking the closure here. Noted before that I'm a big fan of those type of stories in any realm of fiction.
Didn't expect this to be about "YOU'RE GOING TO LOVE ME!" Fluttershy. I was expecting it to be about Discord mind raping her into Fluttercruel.
How cute. I like the comparison to Fluttershy's experience at the last Gala. I hadn't really thought of it, but it does work in a sense. And the closure felt just right. I am glad Fluttershy put her hoof down when Discord was taking things too far and told him off in the episode. When you try to put a friend's friend into another dimension, just going "oh, it's okay" and forgetting about it doesn't really fit; the solid stance worked fine. But a side of me (
the shipper sideI mean, ignore the trash typing) kind of hoped for some sort of understanding closure that didn't involve an argument. Just a calm moment for them to talk like here.Huh. I honestly didn't make that connection until now. However, are the two events really that similar? Sure, both Fluttershy and Discord felt shunned and that feeling drove them to madness, but the context behind both scenarios is completely different. Fluttershy acted out of frustration because the snobby Canterlot animals wouldn't even give her the time of day; Discord acted out of jealousy because he thought Fluttershy abandoned him for Tree Hugger. There aren't enough similarities here to make this the explanation as to why Fluttershy blew up at Discord like she did.
While I question the dichotomy between the two scenarios, I could see something like this playing out after the episode Make New Friends but Keep Discord. Fluttershy doesn't like hurting others if she can help it. She probably would feel guilty about losing her temper like she did, and it's just as likely that she'd apologize for it even though she did nothing wrong. All in all, I don't think I'll be making this part of my headcanon anytime soon, but it's a sweet story nonetheless.
Hmm, finshed two chapters of his adventure stories, went through a ton of edits and a great adventure, a short and sweet Bookish story ought to wash everything down nicely and a good way to end my night.
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The bolded is the forest. The rest is trees. To try to suggest both events are 1:1 is indeed folly. Which is why I, y'know, didn't (outside of the base emotions of both parties).
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Will need specifics as to what you mean by "that original ep".
Also, thanks for the feedback. Stupid hard reformed!Discord voice is stupid hard.
History may not repeat itself, but it rhymes, and sometimes you can set it to a catchy tune...
I hadn't thought of drawing a parallel between these Gala incidents, but now that you have, it seems blindingly obvious. Thank you for pointing out this connection, Bookish. And, of course, for the wonderful character moments.
Liked and favorited! Man, I did NOT draw parallels with the first Gala episode until now. Wow, it really kind of brings it home. I like it!
I am so very envious of your command of characterization and dialogue. That's just one of many reasons why I like this story. Short, sweet, and to the point.
6030288 Alright, I'll grant you that. I guess I was just a bit confused because Fluttershy wasn't all that explicit about what the similarities between the two events were. You have to admit, this connection is very subtle. I certainly wouldn't have made it myself.
Beyond that, I think knowing what you were going for helped me appreciate this mini-epilogue a bit more. Rereading it, I'm not sure I completely buy Discord's darker thoughts or denial (especially not after what happened with Tirek), but you're entitled to your own headcanon. You've earned my fave.
Ah, short and sweetheart.
And inside, Rarity is currently engaged in a titanic struggle with a green blob for possession of her gem.
Like the rest, the connection here never occured to me, especially given I don't think much on the original gala episode. Good call here.
I am going to forever wonder what happened to Rarity's emerald. Curse you, Bookish!
Nah, that was a pretty nice wrap up for the episode.
That emerald would later go on to become a dashing hero that tripped through an errant time portal and wound up in the past! Bereft of it's natural place, and caught in cosmic storms, it was transmogrified by fanficcy science into a dragon! And that dragon would later be responsible for another emerald-eyed young and dashing drake!
Either that or I liked this story.
Eh, I downvoted. There's nothing really wrong or bad about this story, but it's really focused around one insight, and that seemed so simple and basic that it fell flat to me. It doesn't have a lot else to say.
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I demand that you align your reading tastes to my writing tastes.
Demand I say.
Never thought I would see a story that connects continuity from the past and present, great job!
6030337 Ah. I could have worded this less ambiguously, I suppose. I was referring to you mentioning in a prior blog that you had a few issues with Best Night Ever (which was the 'ep'isode I was referring to).
And, yes. I can imagine the brain bending required to convincingly write the master of brain-bending. I feel it was well done here.
6031004 I have a lot of respect for this, actually. The reasoning behind a downvote being expressed to the author. If more did this, it'd be potentially a great thing. But does require going out on that limb. And I say "potentially" because it requires a receptive author as well. ;)
Later, in the privacy of his own home, Discord opened that time portal and watched Fluttershy rampage anyway.
Very nice story.
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And i was expecting that Fluttershy will remind him that Discord betrayed her in Twilight Kingdom and that history like to repeat itself that way.
Given how Celestia loved both the Mane Six's well-intentioned disaster-causation and The Smooze's slime-bath of their respective début Galas, I think that Discord would, if he went back in time, be quite surprised and it would probably totally change his view of his old foe.
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"Remind me to never make Fluttershy really mad." Discord muttered.
A very nice oneshot and a very good connection of the two Galas.
Aw, I wanted to see Smooze turn the gem into gold...
I had a bit of trouble making the connection between the animals avoiding Fluttershy and her treatment of Discord in the gala episodes, but I think it makes sense if she had to earn the trust of every one of her animals.
Making the connection between Fluttershy's "you're going to love me" moment and Discord's behavior at the Gala is brilliant.
6034586 Precisely this makes this little shot brilliant. That and the fact that it is so spot-on in the two characters' actions and speech.
Well done.
6032122 Fluttershy suddenly bursts in, "DISCORD!!!"
Really nice story. This will probably being my last read before sleeping.
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Whew! Now that I can think straight:
Your comments and feedback warmed this author's heart all through Everfree Northwest. Thanks ever so much for taking the time to make them, and I'm really glad you enjoyed the story!
This is literally based off of a quip that I had when the episode was over. While Discord certainly learned the lesson he needed to, I was shocked that neither the episode nor the fandom went for connecting the two "love me already" freakouts. Well, you know what they say about wanting something done right...
See you next crime.
6046691 See, this story is an example of fanon done right: taking what exists and expounding upon it, making the lesson stronger and more properly fleshed out, growing the characters within their own natural personalities.
Not inventing radical alt-universes where everyone's evil and has goatees, nor Twilight stubbing her tow suddenly causing her to become a serial killer who hates life itself.
*grumbles* Now I bet someone's going to actually write the latter one...
Discord pops open a portal while Flutters isn't looking and giggles at her outburst in the first Gala.
That night, Discord is sleeping in his weird pocket dimension house when Fluttershy suddenly bursts in and screams, "YOU'RE GOING TO LOOOOOOVE MEEEEEEE!!"
Discord can't decide to scream and run, laugh his head off (literally in his case), or engage in behaviors that would certainly result in an X-rating.
Oh, where would the world be without sappy Slice of Life? I honestly hope that alternate world doesn't exist. I'm certainly happy I stumbled across this. I actually didn't notice the comparison between the Gala episodes, and its an extremely fitting comparison to make! Nice work once more, Bookish!
6090347 hehe cereal or serial . Mayve not kill people but kill TV shows and breakfast cerials lol I'm pinky
6090347 The show writers already did. Starlight Glimmer, remember?
6702651 The fact that I wrote that 24 weeks ago as an example of what would make a terrible fanfic is now quite ironic, as the episode itself was so many bad fanfic and time travel tropes all rolled together into one cliched mess... including the always-awful Villain Sue.
Can I request that you go put in an application to Hasbro so you can write some episodes?
No but seriously, I did really like this episode at the time, but this feels like so much of an improvement to it. I kinda wish it was written like this, because they could have easily made this simple to digest for little kids, while on the same token deep enough so that people like you and I would also understand it.
So great job with this!
-DJRD
PS: I'm a little late to the party huh?
I'm just catching up on stories I've missed.
Nice to see Fluttershy and Discord really patch things up after the Gala
. Very good one shot, too
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