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Pen Stroke


A fan-fiction author and computer programmer that lives in Glendale, CA.

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When Fluttershy introduced Mage Meadowbrook to Zecora, it was with the hope of fostering friendship. Yet, an unfortunate mishap and bitter words have led to something far different. There will be a duel, and Discord is more than happy to turn such a rare occurrence into the spectacle it deserves to be. Can Fluttershy, Twilight, and Pinkie help mend the budding friendship between Zecora and Meadowbrook? And what about Discord? Does he wish to fuel the flames of rivalry, or does he have a larger plan in store?

In the spirit of arena culinary combat, it’s time for Elixir Master!

Preread, Edited, and Reviewed By
El Oso, Illustrious Q, BronyWriter, Winston, Wanderer D, Level Dasher

Cover Art By
RyuRedwings

Chapters (7)
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Comments ( 52 )

It's pretty cool BronyWriter is prereading this, because I'm in the middle of one of his stories, and it's kind of consumed my life for a moment.

This caught my attention, I say zecora win mainly cause I always liked her and be,wives she much more than she appears to be. ^^ love stories showing off her potion making but add but shaman and spiritual abilities. Anyways look forward to see what ya come up with

OHMIGOD. A messed up spell in her past is the reason Zecora speaks in rhyme. That makes COMPLETE sense. Why didn't I ever think of that before??? :facehoof:

Oh heyyyyyyy!

You're still alive!

I'm not. I got turned into a zombie. Lab accident and stuff. :twilightsheepish:

Fluttershy as an airplane made me laugh, I always like how Discord does things. Eagerly awaiting more.

And then they both lose when Pinkie Pie bakes a portal.

Pen Stroke. So you know it's quality. His name is like the Stephen King of pony fanfiction.

(Looks at chapter 1 title) OH GOD NO PLEASE MAKE IT STOP!!!:raritydespair:

Without Discord two sapients would go the rest of their lives viewing the other as an annoyance. With Discord they can now be assured the mutual friendship only present in those who survived a harrowing ordeal that put therapists kids through grad school.

Am I expecting/demanding this pageantry? Not really, no. Would I appreciate it? You bet Fluttershy's sweet plot I would. :rainbowdetermined2:

Lightning de Lancie.:pinkiegasp:

Love the bit with the time reulting effect on the trees. Though I wonder what happens when certain heavy metal concentrators absorb Crystal Particulates? Like those that concentrate Silver atoms to such a degree in their leaves that the leaves become not just toxic, but high grade ore?

Hope it doesnt go like Dash and Dust, but the result ends up in PUDDING. :twilightoops:

JMP
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I love how Discord put this together perfectly legally and legitimately. It's still Discord-flavored chaos, but it's government-approved Discord-flavored chaos.

JMP

I saw that Ace Attorney reference. Taking Phoenix's style, are we, Discord?

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So it’s not much different from non-Discord-flavored, government-approved chaos? :derpyderp2:

Is the Discord in the Inventory cabinet also temporally locked out, being inside the bubble to start with?

Either the bubble has diffused, filling the area, or the effect has collapsed onto the occupants, speeding them up even more relative the the rest of reality, which is a problem when mortal as they only have a finite time to work out either a solution or how to communicate back through the massive time gradient?

Oh no...the bubbles popping must mean that everypony outside is frozen in time...which means that Zecora, Meadowbrook, Fluttershy, and Pinkie must work together to free them! It’s official, I LOVE THIS STORY!

I’ll take a jar of that tension butter please LOL

Oh dear, someone call Doctor Whooves!

Oddly thought of quantum break for a second.

Discord really has had fun setting this event up. I suspect that once the cure effect is discovered and time returns, he will ahve had effectively cameras spread through various objects in the lab, or a variation, to be able to not only do replay, but also have those embarrasing acceptance speeches on quick replay loops? :twilightoops:

You really nailed how Discord thinks.

“Trixie and Twilight must mend their divide.”

...Welp, they're dead.

JMP

Oh that's brilliant

And then… the sound of applause.

Considering this is Discord, I wouldn’t be surprised at all if it sounded like Applesauce.

If there is sound of applause, are the audience responding to the clearing of the vines and that everyones ok after the domes came down, or has Discord been using a dou8ble indirect temporal manipulation region so that those in the origional dome volume, personally, see illusions of stationary time, while outside it flows at the origional time shift, with Discord updating?

Whatever the intermediate method is, One more event to show Twilight and Trixie are back and with their magic etc, and the end show festivities can get started? Applejack in her Nightmare Night lion costume with Pip holding a chair or such? :trollestia:

Kudos for playing Zecora straight, including rhyming dialogue. Most authors have trouble writting her because of that.

Her dancing was way better than this.

:rainbowlaugh:

JMP

I love how Discord even made a credits sequence. This was fun! Glad you posted this.

Discord as Crew.

Everybody as Themselves.

Pinkie Pie as Pinkie Pie.:pinkiehappy::rainbowlaugh:

And a perfect ending.

Roll The Pig. :yay:

Hmmm clever girl discord.

Dan

Discord didn't do a backflip and take a bite out of a bell pepper?

Boring.

You know it would be interesting the map call on discord for friendships problem. Or even zecora & chrysalis be nice. I like spoke, starlight, & sunburst were able to do friendship quest. But someone outside main cast be nice. Think either zecora or discord

“There you are,” Discord said. “I’ve undone everything I did, and everything the potions did. Though, you may have to do a little work to undo something you did. After all, the contest was for Elixir Master, not Spell Master. Meh, I’m sure you’ll figure it out. Have a good night, Twilight.”

But… But… But… What about Scruffy‽‽‽ :raritycry:

Have a mustache. :moustache:

"And just what are you gonna about it? Want to fight?! Want to have a potion duel?!"

Dan

Trixie doing a show with Twilight's power? With discord involved?

OOh, tension butter sounds yummy.

Is it wrong that I was laughing too hard at Trixie floundering with Starswirl?

Dan

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My personal favorite ep.

Really, "America" has nothing on the original. Even with sexy Dacascos and Alton Brown's bad 'dad jokes.'
Though I am quite proud of my hometown hero Justin Sutherland.
https://www.twincities.com/2018/12/14/justin-watch-st-paul-chef-is-middle-of-the-pack-in-second-episode-of-top-chef/

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