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In this alternate take on the ending to Season 2, Chrysalis actually triumphs, defeating everypony and turning Princess Celestia into a Changeling. However, almost immediately, Chrysalis's plans begin to go awry. For Changelings feed on love. And who is more beloved in Equestria than Princess Celestia?
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I haven't read it yet, but have my fav and like anyway.
I know you never disappoint me.
I like this story, how Celestia is wrapped up and forced to watch her sister interact with an imposter
“Strongest is queen,” it said. “You are no longer strongest.” Poor chrysalis, changed herself to a loser behind Celestia. You get what you paid for,
One super charged sun goddess please
Chrysalis, " . . . . rules of nature . . . "
'She did not think this through' CLICHE
Yup, best one for AU stories.
Great story, and it's nice to see the whole "turn captured ponies into Changelings" thing backfire for once.
Though...Chrysalis' F-Bomb kinda killed the mood. I'd suggest changing her line.
Hmmm... Lets see. I have a final exam in 30 minutes. When I return, I want to see this in the featured box.
I feel really bad for Chrysalis...nobody deserves to be a prisoner of their own mind...
4356732 Well she's not... not really. 'Prisoner' implies that she is being forced into it and prevented from leaving. She did that to herself as a defense mechanism. Her mind is less of a 'prison' and more of a 'bomb shelter' at this point, and you can't really call someone who refuses to leave their own bomb shelter a prisoner.
4356829 So, the fact she's in a coma, completely out of touch with the world, and nobody can snap her out of it or reach out to her, doesn't count as being a prisoner of her own mind?
It would be interesting to see how Chrysalis reacts if she ever did come out of that coma, but that's probably never going to happen.
4356853 No because the reason 'nobody can snap her out of it or reach out to her' is because that is what she wants. She can't be awoken from the outside. You seem to be ignoring the fact that, and I quote;
Staying in that coma is her CHOICE. Prisoners, by definition, don't have a choice. If you can choose to leave, then you are not a prisoner. A rich bastard hiding in his panic room like a spoiled brat is not a prisoner.
That was an awesome reading and an interesting take on" Bad ends". Poor Chrys though...
Feel really bad for Chrysalis, but still a good story.
Chrysalis is not a prisoner, she is a coward, and an idiot.
If only she had ever listened to the lyrics for a 'Lullaby for a Princess'.
4356724 I came home and see, Featured.
Good work!
Dislike not because the story is bad... but because you failed to explain to me enough why what Chrysalis did was wrong. How had she been handling her life badly? Surely she might have been evil but how is that handling your life badly? It seems if you don't agree with the elements opinion you will stay in a coma. Also the fact that the elements forced Chrysalis in a coma... i realise that they reveal to one their own mistakes but why does this force them to coma or a catatonic state?
that makes no sense... Also... bad ending for Chrysalis ending up in a mental hospital forever was not what i was expecting. If anything i was expecting her to be imprisoned. Last but not least why was there a reason to use the elements on her anyways? If Celestia was victorious then it wouldn't matter. I thought this was an overkill.
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Presumably it works on the logic of Ghost Rider's Penance Stare. Most people, even evil people, never see themselves as wrong. They are either apathetic to the suffering of others, believe that 'might makes right', or simply think that the end justifies the means. Forcing a person like that to understand the cruelty of their actions can be traumatic. Rather than confront the fact that she was a monster, Chrysalis's mind buried itself deeply enough into her psyche that it would never have to make that realization.
On a side note, I believe Celestia hoped using the Elements would purify Chrysalis of her hate (similar to Luna) in addition to 'curing' her of becoming a Changeling. She was disappointed on both counts, but the attempt made sense.
All that said, I liked the story, but it felt a bit short to me. Everything was almost too neat in its execution, and little time is given to reflect before a new concept or scene is brought to the fore. An expanded version of this, perhaps even a multi-chapter fic, would be greatly appreciated.
Oh, and like 4356700, I thought the f-bomb unnecessary.
4357475 Okay i don't really know much about Ghost rider only watched the first movie but there is only one thing that fails here. Why was she a monster? In fact we know nothing of her life before this fic... so the result was honestly without much basis. If i knew more about the atrocities and monstrocities she had commited past this one i would be okay. But to my eyes she was just a conqueror... Conquerors of course are meant to be shown as evil but it doesn't make them this way.
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Well, she did brainwash Shining Armor and her bridemaids. She also kidnapped Cadence, tossed her into a lightless prison for who knows how long, and proceeded to take her place. Chrysalis seemed to view ponies as a food source: i.e. cattle rather than subjects to be ruled. She also struck without warning in a time of peace, without known provocation on Equestria's part. That's just from the canon of the show, not even getting into what she does in the comics.
As an aside, I'm curious, and I mean that honestly not sarcastically, but can you name a conqueror who couldn't be considered evil?
Make a follow-up to this
Adding to relevant groups.
Who would have thought that the worst thing she could have done was win?
Loved it.
4356995
Wrong
If a person suffer from a very traumatic experience(s) that it's too much for him, his subconscious may lock off that section of memory to ensure the stability of the rest of his own mind. Constantly remembering the event(s) may in fact, even make a person go crazy or worse, and that it's exactly what will happen if the subconscious won't intervene
Is that a choice? The answer is no, it's not a Conscious choice, and one he probably cannot control.
So no, Chrysalis mind is in "lock down" to prevent an irreparable damage to her main personality that will probably end up tearing her mind apart, she did not choose to remain in this state, she has simply no choice in the matter, until a "solution" is found, or she recover enough to face her "mistakes" or she "forget" to have actually done anything at all
not exactly what i was expecting to happen but still a good read.
Nice read... all I can say.
Change!Lestia kicks ASS! XD
Awesome. I love the 'Didnt think this through' aspect of Chrysalis' actions & it made sense to me too, that Everypony would be sending Celestia their love, hoping & praying that their Princess was still theirs, & therefore making it true.
Love this version of celestia!
Change lestia is hero!!! Woop woop
Also thumbs up and fave:P
Nice theory. He did scream "Noooo!" when the elements were used on him.
I think this way it is more believable that orginal episode.
Loved it.
poor chryssi.
anyway sequel?
I'm saving this one for tonight.
A closed mind is often a slave to itself.
I like it. Well written, and plausible as well. Looking forward to more, if more happens to be on its way.
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Conquerors aren't "meant" to be shown as evil, they /are/ evil. What peaceful conquering have you ever heard of? What happy invasions have you been on the receiving end of? Did anyone ever go for a pleasant afternoon enslavement of the neighboring country? How about those lovely and charming genocide squads?
Chrysalis is evil. We know it already. It is fact. We don't need to know WHY or HOW, that's left up to us to bother with in our headcanon. Otherwise it's just useless and weighty background exposition that has no place in the story. We don't need to sit down and talk with Chrysalis about her troubles like a trauma-induced patient on a psychotherapist's couch. We don't need to go into a flashback of her entire life. We don't need to humanize her and say, "Oh but if just this hadn't happened she wouldn't be bad!" That always leads to a ton of apologists saying, "Yeah, but all the enslavement/probable murders here and there/fighting in the streets as military forces clashed don't really matter because she has a broken heart and sad past."
Chrysalis is a monstrous entity, that's what you need to know. That's what the story provides in her actions. That's what canon provides in context. Villain is the villain. Come up with the rest yourself to enhance your reading pleasure.
4356995
Not seeing your years of amateur psychology study laying around anywhere. Well, I can tell you from mine that you are certainly wrong. It's actually a fairly common defense mechanism and reaction to severe trauma. At the level that the traumatic influence or stimulus would be irrevocably dangerous and/or life-threatening either by way of emotional knowledge or physical pain, the brain immediately begins mostly-understood emergency last-ditch attempts to save itself. This can manifest in many varying ways ranging from memory loss, to perception-based comas, to disassociative identity disorder and its various shades. Naturally there are many other responses and their side-effects that can come to pass, but these are noteworthy for their commonality between patients and trauma cases.
Commonly referred to as the "brain breaking", or the subject having "snapped" to the lay who only understand what results they can see rather than being learned in the why such things happen. Either way, the author wrote that part correctly. She is a prisoner in her mind. She cannot leave when she chooses, because the 'willpower' part of herself is under lock and key with the rest of her perceived 'self', the Chrysalis that Chrysalis identifies as and understands and funnels her thoughts and perceptions through. That willpower that is restrained and locked away in its own universe is what she'd require to pull herself out of said prison, but is itself imprisoned and thus unavailable.
That's not to say she doesn't deserve that prison. But until outside stimulus can reach her in some fashion, or she can come to terms with what she's done rather than rejecting it - and survive the comprehension she's so desperately fighting, she is completely locked away better than any cell could hold her.
Great story.
The word you're looking for is "secession".
4358533 Thank you. *goes to correct*
Loved the story, also the premace actually has an awesome flow to it.
I really hope there is more to it.
Woah, spoiler much in the description?
Who would've imagined that success would have turned out to be even worse than defeat?
You done goof'd, Chryssi.
Finally, a good example why you shouldn't give your powers to someone who despises you and expect them to just suddenly switch sides. Some people are too strong for that.
Some are just angrier than others.
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4358788 Worst example you could've given.
This was an interesting story. Maybe have some sequels? That would be awesome.
Sun-butt's a queen now...
4357422
If we're simply going by "A Canterlot Wedding":
Multiple counts of abduction.
Multiple counts of unlawful imprisonment.
At least one count of willful negligence. (Cadance)
At least one count of torture. (Cadance)
Multiple counts of forcible coercion.
Multiple counts of direct mind alteration. (I'm sure they can come up with something for this.)
At least one count of unlawful impersonation of an authority figure.
At least one count of unlawful access to government/military locations/information. (criminal espionage)
Sedition.
Attempted mass enslavement.
Multiple counts of terrorist activities.
Multiple counts of willful endangerment.
Potentially multiple counts of attempted regicide.
I'm sure they could come up with something for attempting to conquer a country, destabilize a region/the world, breaking at least one economy, preventing the proper operation of the sun/moon, and more.
And the most damning thing about all of this is that Chrysalis enjoyed doing all that. Chrysalis in the cartoon is a monster easily on par with the most-hated world leaders on Earth. She just wasn't as successful because she was stopped early.
P.S. And before you think to bring up the "starving changelings" argument, Chrysalis never said her changelings were starving. That was made up by fans. Just because she is in charge of seeing her people fed doesn't mean her people are starving. It's just as likely that she saw a "free" meal in Equestria and let her greed do the thinking.
4359366 Owned. By our standards, right after the wedding an entire bomber wing would be mobilized to bring multiple tons of explosive diplomacy down on whatever's left of her forces. People need to separate the headcanon wank made to make chrysalis not a villain from reality. She's a total $#$@#.
4359366
There's a Chrysalis/Cadence shipfic around here. Would you mind if I used your list over in that comment section?
Hmm. Very cool story, but I feel like it'd be a lot better if you didn't have those quasi-subtle OOCs, like Chrysalis screaming 'Oh no you fucking don't!' or calling Princess Luna 'Moonbutt'. They're holding this back. I nearly stopped reading at that point, although I'm glad I didn't. The pace was a little on the fast side, but it was a good story.
Also, the part where Chrysalis goes catatonic - show, don't tell. Luna's explanation felt more like an infodump than anything else.