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vren55


The reason I write is because I want to read a story written for myself. One day, I want to read one of my own stories and say to myself "That is the best story I have ever read."

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This story is a sequel to Princess Celestia The Changeling Queen: Stories Behind the Mask


At the Royal Wedding, Chrysalis and the Changelings were revealed to all of Equestria.

But another mask was torn away that day. A mask born for a thousand years. A mask created on one promise. A mask, that has become synonymous, fused, to its bearer.

A mask that when ripped off, causes Twilight, her friends and Luna to question everything they ever knew about the one pony, one very important pony.

At the Royal Wedding, the meaning of the phrase 'Princess Celestia' changes forever.

[img]http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2012/060/f/5/princess_celestia_approved_by_ambris-d4rftlj.png[/img]
[img]http://tinyurl.com/kaxbtuk[/img]

NOTE: Chrysalis is NOT Celestia!!! That'd be impossible to pull off.

Currently pre-read/edited by Zervziel,
Blankscape,
FinalFan,
Courage Fire
Aurora Borealis

Side Stories to this can be found: here.

Credits to: Angelea for the cover art (see source) and Ink Rose for the design of Changeling Celestia in her tumblr, The Shapeless Sun (find it on her deviantart page Deviantart here)

Contribute to the TV Tropes Page (thanks to Babs_Seed72 for getting it up)

Chapters (33)
Comments ( 3565 )

Aw man, this is genius. Is this an original premise? :pinkiehappy:

2106017 sorta. I was initially searching for a celestia x changeling story and came across the cover image which sparked my creativity.

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I love the premise it's sparkly indeed. Do it justice sire! :raritystarry:

2106053 which is why the next chapter might take a mite longer:twilightsheepish:

I'm liking this so far, do continue for you have my interest.

Huh, with this set up I'm expecting Dark or Sad, but Comedy? Makes me curious... :unsuresweetie:

2106066 there are some sad/ bittersweet parts with some drama but not enough to warrant a sad tag. Maybe I doesn't warrant the comedy tag... But there will be some humor inserted.

This is briliant! I love the idea. I also very much like your portrayal of Blueblood as a good-guy.

Interesting...Well, that's one more original idea I had I can move from "Original" to "Already Done", but as long as the story is great I don't mind xD

:pinkiegasp: This could be really.......REALLY good. The comedy tag concerns me for a story like this.....even so

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Pardon mah presumptions, ol' sport; but Ah do think ya' are mistaken in th' meaning of the phrase "Cool Story, bro." In fact, it seems ya, did in fact, critically misuse it to much of the opposite of what th' phrase was intended.

Well, how can you explain why Celestia not noticed anything odd about Cadance when she was expecting changeling or changeling queen to show up, and hats more, why she not sensed it and vice versa ?

Interesting story. Do continue my good sir! :moustache:

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DOOOOOCTOOOR!
WHAT DID YOU DO THIS TIME?
WHY DID CHRYSALIS FIGHT HERSELF IN CANTERLOT WEDDING?
IT'S GOT SOMETHING TO DO WITH YOU, DOESN'T IT?

Before I even start reading, never ever ever make your description entirely out of questions. It's stupid and cliche and only serves to turn away potential readers. Descriptions are for summarizing the premise and hooking readers. This is one of the more heinous examples I've seen.

EDIT: And now I'm done, and I've gotta say, it's better than I'd expected. No spelling or punctuation errors, good grammar, and the dialogue isn't the mangled mess that I've grown far too used to.

This is really good. I want to know what happens next. Twilight's gonna be mad.

Oh, dis gon b gud! Excuse me while I get my popcorn and grab a chair. Loving the start of this story. Just loving it!

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First impression upon seeing the synopsis:

After reading:
...huh. Interesting. :trixieshiftright:

It's too bad most of the story's potential has been spoiled by the long description :applejackunsure: Change it quickly so future readers will be in for a surprise later! :pinkiegasp:

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*looks at my notifications and story ratings

WHAT?

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Thank you bro

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Great! I hope to keep your interest up.

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Technically its been done before, I'm just doing a slightly different take on it.

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Continuing :raritywink:

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Thanks!

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No need to crush the book, I will be giving you another!

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It will be great... with all this pressure upon me :twilightoops:

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I think i'll be taking that off. There is a comedic element, but yeah i am beginning to find it unnecessary.

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In short, her senses don't tell her exactly whom is the bloody Changeling. As to why? I'll be explaining.

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Will do :twilightsmile:

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Good point. The description will be rewritten ASAP

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Chrysalis is not herself... You will see

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I won't.. or i'll do my best not to screw up :twilightoops:

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Did Tundara of Myths and Birthrights just said he liked my story and took the time to comment upon it?

Is this heaven?

I love the idea, as it incurs tons of drama across the board, but I am concerned for that comedy tag. Never the less, I will continue.

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:rainbowlaugh:

It's an interesting idea. I've seen and read a lot of 'X is really a Changling' stories, but none that Celestia was a changeling the whole time. You got a decent start as well. Keep it up. :twilightsmile:

2107447 Ah, don't worry. I'm still gonna use it - it wasn't exactly what I had in mind anyway...And maybe it'll be somepony else now. I've plenty of ideas. Way too much.

As long as you've fun writing it, that's fine in my book.

Oh, how I love this premise! You simply must continue to write and update it frequently, darling. :raritystarry:

*Read description*
Hmm, i'm not sure, it's an intriguing and original concept, but there's many ways to get this wrong, and...
*read the first chapter*
YE GODS, THIS IS AMAZEBALLS! MORE!

Did you use that cover with permission? It was an entry to the Shapeless Sun contest, done by Inkrose.

This is beautiful.... I love it and highly reccomend submitting it to Equestrian Daily. J'adore vous roman, mon ami. (Probably screwed up in there and I don't trust google translate)

Comment posted by vren55 deleted Feb 12th, 2013

2107612 COmedy tag removed. Now that I think about it, it didn't work that way.

2108400 Okay, the cover, let me clarify, was done by angelea Phoenix who used Inkrose's design (click on source link under cover image). Inkrose's contest submission here didn't suit the story well enough. I asked permission from Angelea.

Hm, not bad. This is an interesting premise you got there.

Hm. Overall, not bad. Some of the execution seemed a bit off due to poor wording or bad grammar. I'd suggest finding yourself an editor and going over the story in great detail. In any event, the idea itself is very promising.

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I agree, my usual editor was unavailable so I will be getting him to go over this and the next chapter, VERY carefully. Plus I'm getting a few pre-readers

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Thanks so much for the comments favs and likes! I am working on the next chapter and getting more pre-readers to up the quality.

TBH the premise itself isn't completely original. I was inspired by the best of the Changeling genre. Some of you may see Nyergud's Flitter in this and the cover image is kind of what inspired me.

2110286 Regardless, the idea of "Celestia has actually been Chrysalis this entire time" is fantastic no matter who came up with it, and you're playing it exactly right. I'm also loving the fact that Chrysalis is actually really cool and nice here.

2110403 Oh shoot... You're in for a bit of a disappointment. The Chrysalis tag is because Chrysalis is the main antagonist... NOT because she's Celestia.... that'd just... be... WEIRD... And not to mention downright impossible to pull off

2110466 Oh. I assumed that the "changeling queen" was Chrysalis. Which begs the question: if one changeling queen can pull off being Celestia, why couldn't Chrysalis?

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That'd, just be spoilery if I answered that. I'd get to it within the next few chapters... suffice to say, if you didn't get the identity/crisis in the first chapter... you'll get it soon.

2110513 Oh, I already know about the identity/crisis. I have ESP, you see. ;)

Can't wait for this to get off the ground it sounds like its gonna be great!

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