Chapter 3: Prelude to the Trial
Chapter 3: Prelude to the Trial
“I'm not upset that you lied to me, I'm upset that from now on I can't believe you.”
― Friedrich Nietzsche
The Inverted Wedding Hall...
After the Changeling Queen collapsed, Shining Armour and Cadance rushed forward and with a heave, managed to yank Twilight from under the Changeling.
“Twily! Are you alright?” asked Shining Armour, frantically examining his little sister. Twilight nodded, her eyelids drooping from exhaustion.
“I’m alright BBBFF,” said Twilight with a small smile. Shining Armour beamed in response and trapped Twilight within a very tight hug.
“Umm Twilight, I hate to interrupt the moment, but what are we going to do with her?” Rainbow asked, pointing at the still form of the Changeling Queen. Twilight and Shining Armour broke their embrace and headed to the figure lying on the wedding hall’s ceiling.
“We need to find out where Princess Celestia is and she is the only one who knows,” said Twilight, her brow furrowed. “Shining, I remember reading Canterlot has a dungeon. We’ll have to put her there first.”
“I agree. And Twily, there’s also something else you have to do first,” said Shining, pointing up at the floor of the wedding hall.
“Oh, eh... Haha... Got it BBBFF,” said Twilight sheepishly. The unicorn released the gravity spell and everything fell back to the right place, literally, with a crash and clatter. The pegasi and unicorns carried or levitated the earth ponies safely down, while Cadance gently carried the Changeling Queen with her magic. Quickly gathering themselves around the Changeling, the ponies lifted the unconscious being up and, according to Shining’s directions, headed to the Canterlot dungeons.
The dungeons had been constructed a long time ago. They were archaic, musty and damp, with cold stone floors, and metal barring that was slightly rusted. Magic symbols shimmered and shifted on the walls and bars, indicating spells for imprisonment, subversion of magic and reinforcement. These cells had been constructed in a bygone era and had been rarely used even then. Shining Armour had the keys to these cells, but the long time it took for him to find the right key indicated his unfamiliarity with the facility.
“Okay, let us get out of this place,” said Rarity eagerly, not wanting to spoil her mane any further.
“Everypony, wait just a minute. I don’t think we should let anypony, but ourselves know about this,” said Cadance.
“If everypony were to know that Auntie had been impersonated and is now missing, they would panic. We need time to recover and establish stability over Canterlot before we tell the public,” explained the princess calmly, despite frowns from the seven ponies and the dragon.
“But ain’t that lying?” said Applejack. Cadance shook her privately recalling one of her lesson’s with Celestia.
“Cadance, one of the most powerful things the truth can do is suggest things that otherwise are not the truth. Unfortunately as Princess, there will be situations when you will have to tell these partial truths for the betterment of all ponies.
“Not necessarily. We can just say that Princess Celestia is unavailable. The public will assume she is resting after her fight with Chrysalis,” said Cadance.
Rainbow grumbled, “Speaking of the fight with Chrysalis, no wonder she lost. She must have known who Chrysalis was all along and botched the fight on purpose!” The other ponies voiced or nodded in agreement as they made their way back to the surface.
The public took Cadance’s explanation exactly as she expected them too. Shining Armour easily deflected the nosier ponies’ questions. Although some of them were unsatisfied, the explanations were accepted. Now, staff and public cleaning crews rushed around, trying to reset furniture, repair glassware and restore Canterlot to its former glory.
In the midst of all this activity, Cadance and Twilight met in an embrace, on a secluded tower away from prying eyes.
“Twilight, I never got to thank you for finding me in the caverns,” said Cadance gratefully.
Twilight chuckled wryly, “It was just an accident. Chrysalis sent me down there after I got too close to the truth.” Twilight winced. “Right after I freaked out and made everypony turn on me.”
Cadance’s eyebrows and ears rose, as Twilight sheepishly described what had happened in the wedding rehearsal. At the end, she bore a frown that could only be described as contemplative.
“Well, we know now that you were right, but you certainly did not do explain yourself well.”
“I know,” sighed Twilight, her head dropped down, only to have it lifted by a tender pink hoof.
“Twilight, you’re not to blame for freaking out,” said Cadance. Twilight sniffed and blinked, but was unable to stifle her tears. Feelings that had once been suppressed began to overflow. The dismissive looks on her friends’ faces and the scars from Shining Armour’s rebuke returned with a vengeance. Unable to hold the flood back, the unicorn broke down in tears. Cadance held Twilight in her hooves and wings, allowing the foal she had once foalsat to sob into her fur.
“But I am to blame! What if I was wrong? What if you were suffering from pre-marital stress?” The unicorn paused, the horrifying apparition of a Changeling Queen rising up in her mind like some hideous monster. “Like I was wrong about Princess Celestia.”
“I still shouldn’t have gotten so angry at you,” said a voice. The two mares turned to see Shining Armour, Spike and the rest of the Elements of Harmony.
“I may have been brainwashed, Twily, but it was no excuse for me to yell at you like that. I’ve been a horrible brother,” said Shining Armour, head fallen and tail dragging on the ground.
“We should have been there for you,” said Rainbow dismally.
“We were so obsessed with the wedding... but that was no excuse for being such rotten friends,” sighed Rarity.
“Sugarcube, ya never lied to us. We should’ve listened to ya,” said Applejack, touching her Stetson.
“Instead, we were all big meanies,” said Pinkie, her fur and hair seeming less pink than before. Fluttershy couldn’t say anything, she was sobbing so hard Twilight could hardly hear anything she said. It was then Twilight noticed a small impact by her foreleg, caused by a baby dragon tearfully hugging her leg, spewing apologies.
“Please forgive me, Twilight! I didn’t mean to be such a jerk. I was just so hyped up for the wedding and—” He was silenced by Twilight nuzzling him, tears flowing from her eyes.
“I forgive you all,” said Twilight, the widest smile on her face. Everyone’s eyes expanded, not expecting the sudden apology. As realization that they had been forgiven registered itself in their minds, they surged forward, wrapping each other with their hooves, wings and claws. Content with sharing their warmth, laughter, joy and tears.
As Cadance laughed and cried with the other ponies, she couldn’t help remembering something Celestia had told her long ago.
In my long years, I have learnt something incredibly powerful about the bonds of love between couples, friends and family. While the bond can become twisted, hammered, torn and smashed apart, all it takes to repair the bond is for one party to be willing to forgive the other, and the other party to seek forgiveness. That bond of love will then be re-forged, stronger than ever.
Canterlot dungeon...
I awoke suddenly, stiffer than ever, cold and feeling absolutely horrible. My horn hurt and the entire front of my carapace ached. When I opened my eyes, I was met with pitch black silence. Luckily, Changelings see very clearly in the dark and I soon managed to make out my surroundings, only to groan at the irony.
I was in my own castle’s dungeons. The ones I ordered built to house criminals and dangerous creatures. Escape was a possibility, but the effort outweighed the results. I had built these dungeons in a bygone era, a time of unrest and had accounted for everything, except for the possibility of being imprisoned myself. I could escape. With my power, I could blast my way through the steel and rock, but to what avail? To become a fugitive in my own country, leaving my ponies leaderless to weather the inevitable challenges and storms?
Then again, anything may be better than facing my ponies. This was the moment I dreaded for all my life. It was the moment when my costume, never been shed in the presence of any being, now ripped apart for all to see.
And it was my fault. I failed the ponies I loved. I could have avoided this situation.
In retrospect, I tried my best. The ‘sense’ that all non-ascended Queens were born with was only meant to warn, never to direct their actions. I had no idea where my enemy was. In the little free time I had, I was scouring the area around Canterlot. Sometimes by air, other times I used the telescope mounted on the Canterlot Observatory. I found nothing and yet, the pounding buzz at the back of my head would not dissipate. The Changeling Queen was still in the area. I knew not where nor had I any idea how close she was.
Nonetheless, the signs had been obvious. Cadance had seemed strange. She had initially been quite enthusiastic about the wedding and had scrutinized every feature. Eventually, as the items, the gift selections, decoration choices and all the clutter and details of the wedding built up, she became more aloof and more easily annoyed. Shining Armour was the only one who could talk her out of it, and even he seemed to have difficulty. I should have noticed it, but I had seen many a bride turn into horrifying madponies during wedding preparations, such as the 1st Duchess of Canterbridge, who ended up happily married for the rest of her life. So I dismissed those troubling signs, which was quite natural, but my next error was inexcusable.
I failed Twilight.
I had not seen my faithful student for quite some time. Not since the incident with her wanton misuse of the ‘Want-It-Need-It’ spell and another incident in which she almost trapped herself in a time loop. We had exchanged many letters, but we were not able to talk prior to the rehearsal. When she came barging through the Wedding Hall, throwing her accusations at Cadance, they seemed incredibly shaky. However, I should have immediately realized what happened. Instead I was unable to comprehend why my faithful student did an about-face on her old foalsitter. So I brushed it off as one of Twilight’s sudden bouts of mad panic. I abandoned her in her time of need. In light of such folly, I was tempted to throw myself against the walls of my cell, but that would only spark a painful magical feedback. Maybe I deserved the pain, but I needed my wits about me
Yet, I cannot understand why I did it. Maybe it was the stress of a possible Changeling Queen in the area. Maybe the earlier incidents made me take in her opinion with more salt than I should have. There is nopony who has shown more incredible devotion to... to my mask than Twilight Sparkle. Nopony has ever earned the title of ‘the faithful student’ better than she has. This is why love confuses me. For I have learnt that even if one loves somepony, they are still capable of doing incredibly harmful things to that pony.
And now, due to my shortcomings, the fact that my ponies knew about my identity was the least of my worries.
“Right you are little princess! And as Queen of the Changelings, it is up to me to find food for my subjects.”
I cringed as I recalled the single being which I had dreaded hearing for so long, a voice that caused me to seize in fear. That voice, whose memory sent tremors through my body and paralysed me like a windigo’s icy embrace. I had been bound in place as if there were chains wrapped around my hooves. The golden regalia I wore had never felt so heavy and so cold on my neck and hooves. A nightmare in the making, brought back by one voice.
The voice belonged to Chrysalis, my older sister.
Suddenly, I was brought out of the whirlpool of my fears and self-hate when I heard the ominous creak of the dungeon door being opened and saw light shining into the dark. Twilight and her friends were coming, most likely to interrogate me or accuse me, and for good reason. They would demand an explanation. I could not give them one, or not one in its entirety. What could I do?
What I have always done, I composed myself, drew myself into a regal posture, held my head high, and prepared for the trials ahead.
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Your wish has been granted
This chapter is, unacceptably SHORRRT!
UNACCETABLY!
...
Erm, sorry about that. My elemental spirit broke free for a moment to demand more words.
2135568 Not within the next 24 hours or I wont get bumped and I kinda want to aim at featured
which is not being cooperative with me 
. But some good news because you asked, the next chapter is 1/2 done. Dialogue wise it's 3/4 complete.
These chapters do need to be longer in my opinoin.
One thing I realized If Celestia also gets her power from love how was it that Chrysalis overpowered her. It's stated she only slid into the Cadence disguise partway through the wedding. How is it that a Changeling feeding off love for a month beat a Changeling feeding off the love of thousands of ponies over a millennia?
I could see some explanations:
1) She was caught off guard
2) Marital love is stronger than adoration (makes sense to me)
3) Maybe since Chrysalis is actually older she found a way to out do her in some way (I dunno)
2135579 *crawls out from behind his chair and tip toes to the keyboard.
Now I know why some authors are scared of their fans....
The reason this chapter feels 'short' is because it is a setting up chapter for the next chapter, where more stuff happens. Although this chapter is actually the second longest chapter in this story, so far published, it feels rather subdued because it is a necessary bridging/contemplation chapter for both Twi and co. as well as our protagonist here which people have begun to call 'Changelestia'. Darn that name is jut as catchy as the season finale song... Almost makes me feel reluctant to name her...
*something growls, vren55 turns around
Um sirrah... looks like your elemental spirit has escaped the confines of your mind and materialized.
got to RUN!!!!!
This. Good sir is possibly one of the most heartbreaking fics That has surrounded Celestia and changelings.
In all honesty I eagerly await more of this masterpiece.
The Mane 6 hivemind
Oh cliffhanger we meet again, I simultaneously love and hate Cliffhangers, This is getting pretty good, can't wait to see what happens next.
2135582 I love your icon man/Woman.
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hmm... I'll leave you to speculate. I've already planned an answer before you asked the question and it will be given next chapter.
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See my prev comment to Psychokrusk
My only problem with this update is that I've now read all of it and must wait for the next one. Everything else is marvelous
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I'm going to go with option #2. Also, to strengthen that theory, keep in mind that this was the love that kicked all the changelings out of Canterlot.
2135622 Excellent
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Have you tried submitting to EQD? Should get you a pile of new readers if successful.
2135633 Seriously considering. Might want to get that next chapter done first because it helps with continuity/plot hole issues. And also, EQD is incredibly backed up. I submitted a story 3 weeks ago... the queue is still stuck in January.
2135619 It's a man, sir/madam but thank you.
Poor Changelestia. I really really want things to go well for her.
Though I have to wonder if the 'real' (Changelestia can really also be considered 'real' considering she's been me for 1000 years...) me will show up at some point, and how powerful she'll be with 1000 years to rest and recuperate...
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I feel like it's a bit more complicated than that. Two ideas stick out to me a bit more than "the power of marital love."
First, Changelestia (great name btw) is not a fully ascended queen. There are countless reason to why she may not be but the fact remains is that the author makes a point to refer to Chrysalis as an Ascended Changeling Queen, and not just a queen.
Second, Chrysalis has a full army of hive minded drones who are completely devoted to her. Changelestia has a country of ponies who love her, but are by means devoted to her. Sure there are a few ponies (royal guard, elements of harmony, etc.) but none of them can come close to the sheer number of changelings that are utterly in love with Chrysalis.
Those are just my theories, but it's all up to the author. We don't write the story we just read them, and crucify the authors who make bad plots
2135936 Oh I like that
So, what exactly is stopping her from giving an explanation? This is one of the cases where I think honesty is the best choice.
THAT CLIFF HANGER
I hope we get answers next chapter.
Ah, so Changeling Celestia and Chrysalis are sisters?
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I thought maybe Changeling Celestia would be her mother or something, but this works too.
Oh, this story is simply too juicy! The possible outcomes are fairly newmerous.
Will they find the original Celestia? Will she turn out to be a cold hearted or self-deluded tyrant?
What will become of the Changelings? Will they return with a vengeance? Will they abandon Chrysalis for her weakness or maybe the Changeling Celestia will win them over somehow and bring about peace?
Oh I simply can’t wait! But don’t tell me! I’m no spoiler whore.
Best of luck with this. I'll be watching!
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Wait and see
Oh god this can't update any slower (no offense, I'm just impatient)!! There needs to be more and quickly. This has become one of my favorite stories on this site easily.
Now there are probably some things I could point out as constructive criticism but I'm on a mobile device so...nah, I'll leave it as saying you are awesome for this.
Cliff hangers.... we meet again
And also, Chrysalis is her older sister!
Ahh, sibling rivalries. They sure do make life interesting.
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I've been cliffhangered so many times, I'm taking them out on you people
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EEyup. What would I do without my own...
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Thanks!
but please leave your criticism eventually. I need something to knock me off my pedestal 
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I shall say nothing and just write the next chapter.
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Believe it or not, I considered the idea, but that'd just be... welll scary.
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You will
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Then you'd hate, hate, hate my update schedule (which is in terms of months). Not that you're reading my story, though.
2139271 Speaking of your story, when is Sunshine and Laughter going to be updated?
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Hopefully end of February or early March, by my current "schedule".
I'm kind of working on another story for the entry of World-Building Alliance writing contest for February (titled The Bright Light of the Great Northern Frost) and getting swarmed with assignments and (thankfully one) midterm exam.
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Say, is there going to be a tearful resolution with Twilight as Changelestia tells her that she was the Celestia that helped stop having a magic surge at her entrance exam the. The same Celestia that mentored her almost her entire life and the same Celestia that was like a second mother to her?
I'm only asking because that would be one Tartarus of a feel and I want to see if I could ready my body for it.
I thought I was ready for the feels that came with the newest chapter of the story "The irony of Applejack"
I wasn't
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Honestly I will say this to everyone who says anything about chapter length:
One-five scenes per chapter is GOOD ! ! !
See http://www.fimfiction.net/story/71281/cultural-artifacts for big amount of scenes.
Almost after each chapter someone complains "I can't understand what's going on".
P.S. I like this story so far. Keep going.
Also, feels like I really should get back to reading. 43 updates piled up.
Luna, just ask her things that only "Celestia" would know, from, say, 1500 years ago?
Looking forward to the
and 
in the next chapter
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There will be some denial some OMG moment... which is why I'm having difficulty writing the next few chapters. Suffice it to say, their relationship will never be the same.
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Thank you! I've read a lot of stories and I have to say 2000 words works quite well. I'm sticking with it.
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OOOOOH... you'll see.
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If only there was a Celestia teary icon I would use it.
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See what? The real Celestia?
I don't believe I've seen anything quite like this before. I like it. Upvoted and favorited.
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Not spoiling anybody.
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Alright :3
This story has been reviewed by the The Equestrian Critics Society
Story Title: Princess Celestia: The Changeling Queen
Author: vren55
Reviewed by: M1SF0RTUNE
Vren has an interesting foundation to start with. All he needs is to show us why we should continue to follow the plight of our Changeling Queen, why we want to witness the falling-apart of things (that may or may not happen), and cut out just a little bit of "drama" from the drama to make this story stand out from its' contemporaries. For now though, it's too soon to say, but the potential alone makes this one worth checking out.
Score: 7.8/10
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I can live with that.
Well, until the anticipation of the next chapter kills me.
But I can live with it.
2151896 Celestia generaly speaks quite formally, thus I tried to avoid the use of contractions... but it seems some of it may have interfered witht eh flow. i'll fix that, and get reading to your story ASAP
Agreed. Simple noun/pronoun affiliation can get old when it's the only thing being used, and to your credit, I only see the words "lavender unicorn" used once. Though if you're going to take a stab at it, it helps to be clever. Not to toot my own horn, by a good example is like in the prelude of our own story, when Spike catches Rarity staring at her. When Spike playfully echos what she said earlier about "this bombshell once told me it's not polite to stare," and then in the dialogue attribution of her corresponding line, it refers to Rarity as a "the bombshell." I know it's a good example when our editor says it's good; not only because he said it was, but because he's real picky about LUS, and the level of which he detests Rarity is almost legendary.
As for your explanations of Cadance, like I said before, any depth you attempt to add needs to be grounded in the lore to continue the ever-important suspension of disbelief, otherwise you're just, as it's ever so exquisitely known amongst writers, pulling stuff out of your ass. Same things goes for Blueblood; there needs to be a reason why he isn't an asshole. Or, he could start out as an ass, but over the course of the story he develops into a much more respectable character; that already sounds more interesting.
At least you admit 'X is a Changeling' is overused. I do have to give you credit for using my own words against me in context. I have said before that "if you're a good enough writer, you can take even a bad premise and make it interesting." But now the question is: are you?
Let's find out.
Onto chapter three.
"Prelude to the Trial" Hmm... that would be 'Stop' by Pink Floyd, right? 'Cause if that's the way it's gonna go, I don't know whether I should be excited to see what kind of nightmarish, scathing scrutiny that "Celestia" is in for when The Trial inevitably comes... or outright terrified.
Out of curiosity, I Wikipedia'd Friedrick Nietzsche. What is it with anti-social depressives and hostility against Christianity? And that's not just a stipulation; that's an observation comes from personal experience...
This is me being nit-picky again, but Shining's nickname, BBBFF, irritates me. Five syllables, only five consonants; one brick of text that trips up dialogue pacing every time it's used. Stylistic preference, but I say try to use it as little as possible.
Superfluous comma after 'anypony.' Or needs another comma after 'ourselves.' The 'but' could to to be replaced with 'except for.'
By the way, I noticed Applejack went down to the dungeons with them, too. Who carried her all the way down there? Least I recall, "Celestia" attacked one of her pressure points and said she'd be out of commission for at least an hour.
lol, wut? Odd phrasing here.
I used that exact same logic when I was thirteen to deceive my parents over how late I would sometimes stay up and why. 'Why was I up late? Homework. Then I had to clean the litter box.' That answer was true; satisfied, they wouldn't press if further, and I wouldn't have to squirm knowing that the chore only took five minutes and then I would stay up until two looking up porn.
What's that, Plague? Yes, I know you miss 'the good old days,' now get back in your cage!
Wow... Dash made an assumption that actually makes sense. I wonder if this is true? Certainly makes her losing much more feasible... wait; no it doesn't. Imposter or not, "Celestia" was doing the real Celestia's job for a thousand years. That millennium-long workout still didn't make her stronger than Chrysalis?
I'm going to need a list for all the things I expect to be explained by the time the explaining gets around.
Actually, I've got the perfect explanation for how Celestia lost that fight; Meghan McCarthy (Or the Changeling posing as Meghan McCarthy; that's the only explanation for why her writing suddenly became so f
cking terrible) realized she'd written herself into a corner after Chrysalis needlessly revealed herself (after needlessly providing Twilight the means to bring the real Cadance back... nice job fixing it, villain), and the only way out was to apply The Worf Effect. There; out of the corner for the small price of jossing everybody's head-cannon about Celestia's divinity.
Moving on...
Okay, so I get the sense that this scene with Cadance and Twilight is here dually to put everyone back on the same page and play clean-up crew again for why Twilight, even with all her evidence, decided to catch the idiot ball and run for the goal by calling out the disguised Chrysalis in just about the worst way possible. It's a nice thought... but it doesn't work. The reconciliation on all parts is pretty much bare minimum apologizes, so the way they all seem to start crying/laughing/whatever feels very washed up. Plus, the way this scene starts out with Twi and Cady, and then all of a sudden all seven of them show up at the exact same time reeks of bad-sitcom-style dramatic entrance. What, were they all waiting in the other room for just the right moment to butt in? And then you bring up Twilight's second biggest play with the idiot ball in the present series (the first is in The Crystal Empire... thought I'd get through a review without chauvinistically bringing that up again, did 'ya?), but then again promptly drop the subject before you have to properly excuse it? Maybe it's just that I like my stories as fleshed out as big girls who've got that extra meat in all the right places, but that reads like bad writing to me.
Speaking of missed opportunities with the clean-up crew, an explanation for why Chrysalis went for an interception of the idiot ball by revealing herself as an imposter to Twilight, and then dispatching her to the same place Cadance was imprisoned so the two could subsequently escape (as opposed to playing things covertly after Twilight already ostracized herself) would've been nice. Obviously can't fit that in right here, since Chrysalis alone would have to explain that. Can't really add it to the list of 'Sh
t that better be explained' since that just-bellow-the-pinnacle of stupidity point wasn't your fault... but I can have a wish list, can't I?
To give you credit though, all least you haven't tried to go back and explain how/why Cadance ended up foal-sitting for Twilight... but at the same time, it would've just been better to not even mention it at all and hope everybody forgot about it. Because that plot point of 'A Canterlot Wedding' was so f
cking horrendous that even I can't figure out how to fix it.
Speaking of which, doesn't it speak volumes about the validity of this finale if you keep having to play clean-up crew with it?
If I seem extra critical of the season two finale today, it's because I am. I just watched 'Reviewing is Magic 4' by AntonyC and BronyCurious, and guess what? I realized 'A Canterlot Wedding' is even worse than I originally thought it was.
(As such, I shall slather it all over this page.)
It's funny, really; this review is worth it's time in gold, even without delving into a rant over why the Changelings suck.
Speaking of Changelings...
Oh hi, one-sided exposition! I was wondering where you'd scampered off to!
Okay, joking aside, this narrative direction is actually the stronger point of the story. The care and cultivation that the character and their plight is given really gives a reader a lot more to connect to. Even with this contrived piece of beaten-six-feet-under conflict, executing this properly is one of the more surefire ways to make an 'X is a Changeling' story at least remotely interesting, and it has been one of the stand-out features I've seen in the few (and I stress the word "few") 'X is a Changeling' fics that I actually liked.
I was anticipating that I was going to have to add 'why didn't this semi-hive-mind Changeling know more about the invasion/where Chrysalis was' to the list, but you do subvert that by explaining her link isn't a precise or perfect one. Plays into the hands of dramatic convenience, but it's believable and it doesn't break the story... but then you bring up that even if she didn't have specifics, "Celestia" knew something was coming; but as soon as Twilight (albeit incredibly immaturely) brings up that "Cadance's" behavior is fisher than the Gyarados that swallowed Jonah, she just dismisses it?!
Hey, Celestimposter; shall I just leave that lampshade by your bedside table, or may I have the honor of crowning you with it? Or better yet, how about i stick your head in a f
cking chandelier?
Because I keep bringing it up, I'm going to give you an exclusive little spoiler for our Crystal Empire review. This is an excerpt from the script when Joseph covers the topic of lampshading:
You try to subvert that slightly by saying she suspected it was Cadance just going all bridezilla, but not only is this questionable because of how well "Celestia" supposedly knew Cadance, it also further bids the question over why she didn't sit Twilight down to have a little chat with her, even if it was to say "What the hay is wrong with you?!" Oh, wait; you did have an explanation for that:
...
So then you reveal that Chrysalis and Celestimposter is the actual sister duo around here. The plot thickens!... somehow... by the way, I thought of something else; when Chrysalis defeated Celestimposter the first time around, why didn't her disguise fall right then and there?
...
Hey, what do you know; I'm in the same f
cking boat! And these explanations better be coming soon; otherwise, I'm going to have to hire a list-boy to carry this f
cking thing around.
*bloop*
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Is this a shout out to Hard Reset?
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It couldn't be since that was several months after the Canterlot Wedding. [3 I think]. And even then in one AU [followed by the writer] has Changeling Queen Twilight.