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Love music, skiing, art, acting, alcohol, philosophy and clearly MLP

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Vinyl Scratch is always up for a good party! But when she partys a bit too hard, even for her standards, she wakes up in a mysterious place with no memories of how she got there, and only the soft sound of Fur Elise to greet her listening ears.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 327 )

Liked the story so far. It's easy and entertaining to read and what I know about the story so far makes me want to read more.
If have just two things to complain: It's to short, the first chapter stops before you can get really pulled into the story.
And I can't listen to your link because stupid GEMA wont let me. :( (Thats not your fault though.)

Keep it coming. :pinkiehappy:

Yes ! Nice to see a story like this. Like the character development and slow pace ! 5* :twilightsmile:

I sense an Octy Scratch story!
Well done as always my friend!

Seems interesting so far. I'm starting to notice some unspoken continuity throughout all Shipping fics. Like how Filly Fooler seems to be a be an offensive term for lesbian, as well as in several fics a lesbian bar (i'm not actually sure where the originated from to be honest XD), also Vinyl and Octavia are pretty much as OTP as Lyra and Bon Bon at this point.

Anyway, as of so far I like your characterization and am curious where this is going, and for some reason I can never get enough drunk ponies, so I guess that gets my view.

As writing goes, I don't see any grammar mistakes, and the character Dialogue feels rather natural in most cases, give or take a few moments.

Consider my curosity peaked, I can't wait to see where this is going :twilightsmile:

UFB

Also: nice touch adding the music, really helps a story get some atmosphere to it

This has the potential to be another great story, I have one suggestion though; I understand starting similar to Allegraza but please break from that quickly.

seems interesting enough *tracking*

Not bad definitely worth tracking

I like how you pointed out that she has a treble clef as a cutiemark instead of a bass clef :pinkiehappy:

Oh my god the picture is amazing. Waking to that would be heaven.
Tracked by the second paragraph. Amazing.

:rainbowkiss: good opening haha I'm tracking:pinkiehappy:

Intriguing. I'll track and see where this goes

Its nice to see that Vinyl's Barn door not swinging that way for once, In all the other stories I have read she was the one going for the fillies. so good work, I do wish this was longer but most first chapters are short. Keep it UP!

and now Twilight will be kissed by Dash

:twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

I never got how us as a fandom never gave that grey stallion a name.

Hmmmmm.

Sub Woofer.

Not a bad start. Most other Vinyl-Octavias start from Octavia's POV. It's cool to see it from the other side.

SOMEHOW, I feel that I'm going to read Alegrezza all over again... only this time in Vicencia "Vinyl Scratch" Staccato's Point of View... I'M FOLLOWING THIS!:yay::trollestia:

Nice start I always liked this pairing. I'll keep this in my sights for the future so please go on:ajsmug:.

My twin has a story... Loved it so much... Can't wait to read to more!

Good, good my friend. I am hooked

Excellent choice of music. Mau5 FTW!

hey, this was pretty damn good. :ajsmug: keep up the good writing :twilightsmile:

Hm. Tracked. I like!

I like the slightly different take on Vinyl here. Most people just have her as a super flirty lesbian, but seeing her see such actions as "unwelcome" is different and interesting. (Though it seems obvious that will change. :P )

lulz cellos do play in teh bass clef hurr hurr. :pinkiecrazy:

ridiculous speaking aside, this was very well done and i'll be looking for moree :pinkiehappy: hoorayy!

Wow, this was awesome! :rainbowkiss:
Only real complaint is that the part with the music didn't really connect... I wasn't even at the two minute mark in the song by the time I finished the story. Other then that, great job!

interesting... needs a track

I like where this is going! Tracked and starred

I like this pairing, I'm definately watching this, hope it updates soon.

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Tracking, I like where this is going. You've peeked my intrest my friend! :coolphoto:

Interest = piqued.
Gotta love VinylTavia :pinkiehappy:

OctaScratch and Deadmau5?
You have my attention.

Tracked, for moar of course.:trollestia:

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It's the community effect. Memetics at work. These things pass along. And since we forget how we came upon a piece of information its use seems natural

As to Filly Fooler, it's a companion piece to the male Colt Cuddler. But often Filly Fooler has positive connotations because of gender percentages, At least as far as I take things. :scootangel:

Your baiting is impeccable. I am definitely keeping both eyes on this one! :raritywink:

Impressive, genuinely impressive. Definitely tracking.

Definitely watching this story, I need my fix of Vinyl/Octavia since Allegrezza finished. Very well written, but (and I think this has been commented on already) if you're going to add music to your story, reread the chapter and make sure that the music aligns with what you're writing. (I was reading "As Vinyl's subwoofers exploded" barely 5-10 seconds into the song). Only a little issue though, otherwise it's shaping up to be a good story.

I OWE YOU A SCREAAAAAAAAAAAM AFTER EVERY CHAPTER. if you want it i guess.....

Fox

Smooth writing, comfortable descriptors, good characterisation; solid start. My only grievance is that the story seems to be borrowing, quite extensively, environmental elements from another fic, namely Allegrezza. That isn't really a problem in itself, but throws up red flags in regards to future chapters. I like your writing, it'd be a shame to see it lack original story.

That said, there are some minor errors:

""more dancer's" dancers

"out of it's stand" its

"take a brake from" break



158360 Speaking of Allegrezza... Since when is it "finished"? Last I read, the so-called "final chapter" isn't even out yet.

it's always awesome to stumble upon a fic by one of my readers :raritywink:
And among them I really like how this one is starting, I'll be tracking it!

Also quick misspelling I noticed:
the sound of the Centerlot
it's Canterlot, unless you were going for some place else.
I'm reading this just after finishing the last edits to my new chapter, be sure to tell me what you think of it one it's out!

So far interesting, seems worth tracking to see where these drinks take these two. :rainbowlaugh:

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