Sunset Shimmer is a former tyrant, half-pony freak, and CHS' resident Friendship Chick. Twilight Sparkle is a former loser, absolute genius, and a complete nervous wreck.
When the new Twilight transfers to CHS, Sunset doesn't think much of her. But it doesn't take long for the two to become best friends — and change each other's lives in ways neither saw coming.
The first year of Sunset and Twilight’s relationship, told in real time through vignettes, text messages, snippets, and more.
Every chapter in this story takes place at a specific date and time on the 2023 calendar.
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Chapters (35)
I like the cover art
I really like this, and I can’t wait to see more.
My only complaint would be a typo in chapter 1. Mrs. Harshwhinny starts off as the history teacher, but at the end that changes to Mr. Lacuna, and then in chapter 3 Mrs. Harshwhinny is the gym teacher. I’m guessing that was a mid-draft change that got missed.
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Thank you!! Remnants of an old draft popping up! Fixed!
11581024 Wallflower used the memory stone to alter everyone’s memories of the gym and history teachers.
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I was just discovering that sort of thing in my own stuff just this morning, and it’s not even posted yet.
You’re welcome.
Absolutely adore what you have so far. Will be tracking with eyes peeled!
Loving it!
Is Torn World based on anything?
Oh, this is delightful thus far. Waiting for updates in real time is going to be horrible. Looking forward to further fluff.
Aww, nervous Twiggles is really precious.
Everyone is capable of learning. Sometimes, you just have to couch it in terms that resonate with them on an emotional level.
In fairness to Harshwhinny, walking a mile would be a perfectly acceptable compromise for certain forms of asthma. I only really get symptoms when I try to run outdoors, but I can hike at a decent walking pace for hours with little issue. And if Twilight's inhaler is of the fast-acting type, like my Albuterol, taking it a little in advance of PE should be sufficient to prevent an asthma attack during mild physical activity, such as a relaxed walk.
Of course, she could have been a little more sensitive about it. What exactly is her definition of "strenuous," anyway?
Now, now, Twilight, not all anime dubs are trash. Go watch Fullmetal Alchemist or Hellsing Ultimate and you'll see what I mean.
11581231 Twilight’s only experience with dubbed anime is binging clips of the Big Green dub, so she just thinks all dubbed anime is like that.
Hey, now, Twi - without anime dubs, we wouldn't have SPC and Ghost Stories, and that's no world I want to live in.
See, Rare? It's all about context.
Enjoy your suffering girls.
The subbed vs. dubbed debate. Honestly, the thing that tends to tip me one way or another is how true to the original language and content the translation is. If you have bullcrap like they pulled in, say… Miss Kobayashi's Dragon Maid, I'll watch whichever Bowlderizes/Macekres it the least, if I watch it at all.
Ah, nerd bonding. Truly adorable.
And I do love Sunset using ingredients that are as close as the human digestive system can come to hay.
I'd like to hear more about this government agent. I'm guessing that dates to right after the Fall Formal?
Cool idea for a story format.
"snowfall silent"
As a connoisseur of metaphor in authoring, this got a big grin. Love it.
Haven't read anything here in years, but i kind of came back on a whim today. This looks like one to follow during lunch breaks.
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I spent a long time trying to come up with the title and details for a believable fake anime. The one I finally settled on, "Queen From a Torn World," is partially inspired by one of my favorite Yu-Gi-Oh! cards:
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And the character's name, "Sky Blaster," comes from:
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And thus Sunset decided she's going to start producing adventitious roots and photosynthesizing.
Yikes!
Your doing good Sunset.
Agreed.
Interesting.
https://m.Ok now I know she's just doing her job but shushing someone over a simple clap seems ridiculous.
Now there's something I hated doing when I was still in school, I'm glad I don't have to worry about it in college.
Agreed.
That's good at least.
Wait, how has Pinkie not fallen or hurt herself from doing that!?!?
I'm guessing she's referring to her guitar, isn't she?
Ouch!
Wonder what show it was?
Well, looks like they got something else in common.
It's a long story Sunset, but you get used to it with time.
Oof.
Wait what!?!?
Lack of sleep will do that to you. But fear not, for there are powers on the horizon!!
Poor Twi :(
Jewish Rainbow is a take i've not seen before. Though dumb rainbow ignoring legit medical advice? Yeah that tracks
Twiggles, I appreciate the effort, but there's a limit. Try to be mindful of that.
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Yeah but she only did all that so she wouldn't fall asleep. Midnight Sparkle nightmares on the loose.
Just one word away from greatness.
Thx a lot Dash.
Damn!
Oh boy!
13-year-old Dash reciting a Torah portion is not a mental image I was prepared to experience.
Oof, the Midnight nightmares are hitting Twilight hard. It’s good to know they’ll be resolved soon, but she still has a rough road ahead in the near future.
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Do not question The Pink One.
Gosh, this one hits real good
Teenagers say the dumbest stuff.
Good thing Sunset's an adult in a teenager's body. She at least knows the right thing to say.
For some reason Twilight saying that she’s a big fan of uniforms is so cute to me
Oh man, I hated mile run days in high school. They said I could power walk if I couldn’t run, and that was embarrassing enough being the last one still out on the track after the rest of class finished.
More please it's just getting good🥰🙏
I recognize that there will not be a precise answer because of the "real time" conceit, but approximately how frequently will this story update? If you anticipate updates roughly every week or so, I'll check it out now without fear that by the time of the next update, I'll have forgotten everything that's happened; if you expect gaps of three weeks or more, I'll wait and read it upon completion so I don't lose track of what's going on.
Uh huh...
Anger is apart of who you are Sunset. Even if you have indeed changed, it's still a part of you.
A job well done Sunset.
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From this point onwards, you should expect about one per week, occasionally more. Thanks for reading!
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Absolutely. When we ran the mile in my freshman year, I walked the whole thing, finished way in last -- and then found a picture on Facebook that night of me walking while everyone was running. So definitely based on a true story
Now that’s the Equestrian way.
Some excellent fluff here, and I have to love Sunset’s double standard. When she blames herself for all the world’s magical ills and lets her friends constantly remind her of her past misdeeds, it’s just what she deserves. But it’s unacceptable when they do it to Twilight!
Poor Sunbutt Jr. needs a hug. So does Sci-Twi. Also therapy. Definitely therapy.
Poor Sunset. Always hard crushing on someone while they crush on someone else.
Amazonian Sunset was not something I was expecting.
Touch-range magical empathy makes this sort of thing even worse for the girl who feels she deserves to suffer in silence. We'll see how it goes from here. (I have some idea given the premise of the story, but the details are up in the air.)