After Planet Aether has been brought to peace and stabilized, Samus Aran doesn't get much rest when she's sent to reconnoiter a nameless planet on the edge of Galactic Federation space. Ostensibly, she was supposed to determine the size of a Space Pirate operation that was mining Phazon on this planet... and mark the place for a quick strike by Federation forces if it came down to it.
But when things become much more complicated beyond what her mission brief had stated, she may find that her fate and those of some unlikely allies may be intertwined. The battle that rages on the ground in a fight for survival and duty may have Samus questioning herself when a new front in an undeclared, nameless war is opened... in her mind.
-This is in no way related to Metroid Equis. No required reading, no relation, nothing. Pretend it does not exist.
-Takes place between Metroid Prime 2 and Metroid Prime 3. Metroid Timeline can be found here.
-Art by Pridark, sourced to her DA. Full picture is there.
-Story assumes very basic knowledge of Metroid universe, but I'll be doing my damndest to make this as accessible as possible.
so will she and the tree of harmony meet at some point?
I had forgotten how awful trying to find out when anything is happening in the Metroid timeline is. Also, daily reminder that at least a garbage fire gives off heat and slightly toxic fumes, Other M doesn't even do that.
So we have officially killed the other metroid story got it taking it off my stuff and no longer hoping for an update
i.imgur.com/oCmotRR.png
WOOOOOOOOOO, BABY! THAT'S WHAT I HAVE BEEN WAITING FOR, THAT'S WHAT IT'S ALL ABOUT!
I always love to see Metroid content. Good luck on this, Flamm.
I'm still holding out for new chapters to Metroid Equis 2.
But i will follow this cuz it looks interesting.
Awe yeah. Seeing you again on a Metroid story just brought a smile to my face.
A Metroid crossover? Hell yeah. Be reading this soon.
AH YEAH! SOME METROID STORY CONTENT FROM FLAMMENWERFER! While its not related to Metroid Equis, I'll read it as its been awhile since I've found any Metroid crossover stories.
Off to an interesting start. Samus lucked into finding the impact crater near instantly, and should have access to it fairly soon. But...corrupted unicorns. Had a feeling the space pirate and crate were hit by magical blasts, and the unicorns seems to point towards that as well. Thought maybe the medallion was just a bit, but if the soldier has them as part of their armor then perhaps not. I quite liked the beginning as well. It's a funny thought that the reason we get tutorials at the beginning of every Prime game is that Samus accidentally keeps activating it.
Creepy...
Noice!! For some reason.. I want to see some Space Pirates being good cuz there is at least one odd ball in each race out there. Can wait for more and to see more scan data. I love scanning everything in the Prime games.
Oof. Looks like they weren't as lucky as in your first stories. The first two Prime craters were decades old by the time they were found, so this one's probably been cooking for a long time.
Well, you got me interested. Very rare to see a story that is so similar (specially when done by the same author) but executed in a way so different that it still feels original.
You sir, are a very good writer.
Not the usual context for this clip, but this has been in the oven long enough that it still applies:
wtf happened to Equestria? I'm somewhat familiar with Metroid but only the names of important characters and factions like Space pirate and Samus but that's about as far as my knowledge goes
Okay, so it looks like the Space Pirates are basically being murdered by corrupted ponies, along with some probably corrupted Equestrian wildlife. Sucks to be them, I guess. Following this for sure!
I hate to be the nit-picker, but the colony was on K-2L. Samus moved to Zebes after her parents died.
10613088
Absolutely NOT a nit-picker, that is 100% fact and I'm ashamed I mixed the two up, considering I knew that and have buried myself in the lore for years! Fixed that right now. Thanks so much!!!!
I found this a bit fun actually; learning the lore.
I can hear this.
You and me both.
-------
Overall on first impressions? I am amazed at just how much I know of Metroid lore. Just goes to prove that I scan and read a lot.
You have done a really good job of making the atmosphere. There were times the games felt lonely, and plenty of times it was creepy and scary.
You can expect a follow from me, good author.
i.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/newsfeed/001/788/251/14a.jpg
It sure looks like a different take on the Metroid cross over so far. Very interested to see how it goes
I'm curious to see how the Main 6 are faring in this.
more pleas
Ohh this is going to be good.
Do you mean forward, or foreword?
Welp.
Time to nuke the planet from orbit. Only way to be sure.
10612065
Wouldn't you like to know
10612067
KEK. Yeah, which is why I included the timeline to help explain that the order the games came out is not the true timeline. Nintendo never made this easy to understand either for non-fanboys/gals. And IMHO Other M could've been so great... but for now, it only serves to link Super Metroid with Fusion. No more, no less.
10612088
Yeah Equis II is likely not going to receive any more updates.
10612117
LEL
10612141
Thanks man! Great to have you along for the ride! I look forward to your thoughts with great interest!
10612142
There likely won't be any more for Equis II, and personally I think that story should've never existed in hindsight lol, so I apologize if you are holding out... though I wouldn't recommend it. This story is supposed to be a replacement of sorts for the Equis story... in a way... sort of... maybe...
10612168
Hahaha well then I hope I can continue delivering!
10612171
Awww yissss
10612283
Nice to see you over here! Been enjoying your commentary on the Equis duology. This is supposed to be a 'better' version of it, as those stories are like, five years at least out of style with my writing lol. Glad to have you, man! Thanks so much!
10612304
Nice thoughts! Pretty much spot on for now... though I'm curious to see what you think as the chapters continue
10612360
Gotta get that Metroid feel somehow ;)
10612395
The scan data is a must for these stories--I don't think I can consider it a metroid game without any scan data. Unless it's based on a side scroller... but even then, it feels like such a story would be... lacking.
10612398
Seems to be the case so far. This story will have it's moments, but I'm really trying to return to the 'gritty' feel of the Prime games, so this one will be a lot darker, methinks.
10612477
You are much too kind! Just trying to give this fandom the crossovers it deserves. Thanks so much! Glad to have you along again!
10612623
. And that's exactly how I felt after finishing and publishing this FINALLY
Hey!!! Glad to have you back! Hope I can continue to keep you interested for another round
10612930
Exactly why I included the timeline (and probably some other resources down the line). Want this as accessible as possible. Also happy to answer any general questions about the lore! As for Equestria... well, I guess we'll just have to see what happened!
10613006
Awesome to have you around! Can't wait for your input in further chapters! And that's pretty much what seems to be happening so far, though I'm sure Samus will find out more specifics soon enough.
10613265
Thanks so much!! Glad I was able to pique your interest enough to join this wild ride. And I'll definitely be looking forward to your commentary and thoughts as the chapters progress. You and me both: scanning was honestly one of the best things of the Prime games, and probably took up at least a third of my playtime just, reading and scouring the logbook.
10613304
As am I lmao. Thank you! I await your thoughts in future chapters :)
10613310
Heh, you and me both, man. Welcome back to the party!
10613342
And so it shall be!
10613420
Hey there! Glad to have you around again! I certainly hope this'll be good... maybe... lol. Thanks!
10613472
The latter--that's embarrassing. Fixed it. Thanks so much!
10613511
LOL where would the fun in that be ;)
10613714
Ah well.
10613732
Oh your the original author of the Equis Metroid story. Definitely can’t wait to see how this goes because so far I feel like our little pony world is gone from just reading the first chapters...
Hopefully some survived
She knows subconsciously that many, many years ago she was a pony world war 1 analogue with a missing hoof and a human fetish.
Wait...
I mean...
Carry on?
10613726
No doubt pal. That's the most fun is just scanning and reading different lore bits
10613732
I also wonder what timeline it was in Equestria's side when the situation derailed (Before Twilight's ascension? After the Sisters' retirement?) and how much time passed until Samus' arrival.
10613894
As always, Samus is late to the party.
10613919
I don’t think she was late rather they didn’t know till it was to late. Like the planet was off the grid for one so they didn’t know till the radiation ratings went up high enough for the Galactic Federation notice to tell Samus.
Do you plan a schedule of like once a week or random updates
God, that image of that monster is creepy as fuck. You've given me chills with that. I will be eagerly looking forward to seeing samus take these things down. Also, any kind of update schedule in place? I know everyone's gonna devour new chapters, much like those beasts are devouring that phazon.
10614374
I'm referring to how Samus always arrives at a planet after whatever big disaster has already taken place.
10614386 10614377
Every time I try to get a schedule in place, my body and mind are like "well, now I don't wanna write anymore!" So, I take it as 'when the drivel spews, it spews.' I'm trying to make 2021 be the year that I don't take a month per chapter, so we'll see how that goes. Trying to let my creativity be more unhinged.
"Remember, give yourself permission to write garbage. You can edit a shitty page, but you can't edit a blank page."
10614389
a big disaster happens and Samus comes flying down to save the day.
Welp, she isn’t going to know a threat is about to face a planet unless she gets warn about it. It’s really how the story of Metroid is
I believe the Metroid lore mention something like Samus being this Hero who comes down to save the world when there’s disaster.
10614453
That’s alright take your time.
Yoooooo new Flammen Metroid fic, let's fucking gooooooo! Can't wait to see where this one goes!
~GjallarFox
I need more, MOAR!
Intriguing, but the prose is a bit too purple for one of the most iconic orange characters in video games, especially when contrasted against Samus's much more colloquial diction. Also, you may be overdoing it on carrying over game mechanics from the Prime series. Otherwise, we hit uncomfortable questions like "How does the Scan Visor know what's worth investigating?" To say nothing of a crowbarred-in tutorial that even Samus felt was unnecessary.
But yeah, tone down the grandiose narration and excessive use of video game concepts that don't work well in uninteractive fiction and you've got a winner. Looking forward to seeing where you go with this.
We all know this pain.
10615670
The prose is a valid criticism, and I do enjoy a more poetic style of writing, but I'll take a second look in following chapters.
The game mechanics are 100% intentional though, and add an extra charm of nostalgia to it, for me at least, so I'm gonna remain uncompromising on that front. While it does lead to those questions of 'how,' the game itself raises those questions as well, so I find it's little different in overlooking
Thank you for your thoughts, though!
Pretend it does not exist.
I refuse.