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Auf Wiedersehen, fuckboi

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[One-Shot]

Princess Luna, purged of the Nightmare the day before, has officially been welcomed back into power and into the alleged loving embrace of the populace. Though in quite a weakened state from the whole ordeal, she cannot seem to sleep anymore come the evening.

So, she decides to take a walk. She may very well find more than a mere cure for her sleeplessness.

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Comments ( 31 )

Very nice. Just a quick note, though: "millennia" is plural; for the singular, it's "millennium".

5473145 Whoopsie! Thanks for that!

Nice quiet night of reflection and realization there, and the cover art is just to cute. Have a like and a fav. :twilightsmile:

Really nice story for a one-shot that just went out in a night^^

Mach weiter so:twilightsmile:

Saved and liked

will be saving this one. found a spot or two I'm no proofreader so feel free to ignore.

she moved to her window which opened up into her balcony difference of opinion [ out onto]
but tonight is not this night [the]? or [that] ??

5473422 Glad you enjoyed!

To the first one, yes that was indeed an error. Rereading that, it didn't sound right. Your suggestion is better.

To the second one, it still fits. When she says "Tonight is not THIS night," the word 'this' refers to the night in which she will explore the castle, and she is remarking TONIGHT will not be 'this night of exploration.'

Thank you though :pinkiehappy:

5473294 Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the feedback!

This was lovely, well done :raritywink:

Cute! Good job. Thanks for sharing!

Forgive me for this.

Does she take very enthusiastic walks in the forest?

This was adorable and very enjoyable. Nicely done!

Comment posted by Vaughn deleted Jan 7th, 2015

Should be born instead of beared up there at the top, but still an awesome story.

This was a thrill to read, and a wonderful little slice of life.

I wrote a review of this story. You can find it here.

Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

5573224 I actually haven't, as I don't think my writing style fits what they look for, nor am I even close to professional grade... the stories that get made there are nothing short of absolutely incredible.

This is so soothing story, I'd love to read more. Gotta rummage through your other stories to see if there's more. You should really consider writing a sequel.

Very nice.

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The feeling was welcomed and she closed her eyes while taking in a deep breath.

welcome

She had absolutely no energy to return to her chambers and quite honestly, she could care less.

could NOT care less = 0% caring; no less caring possible
(similar: could NOT agree more = 100%)
without "not" it means you do care somewhat (and disagree partially in latter)

Nice story. Apparently I am upvote # 100. :twilightsmile:

So I got to this only now and all I have to say - a wonderful little heartfelt story :twilightsmile:

A very simple and quite common concept - Luna finding out that ponies are more active at night then a thousand years ago. Kind of cliche, actually.

But wonderfully executed.

It reminds us of why it was so popular that it got turned into a cliche in the first place... And then it suddenly doesn't really matter anymore that it's been done before. :twilightsmile:

Mein Himmel, das ist gut!!

Small edits are required, but this was such a sweet fic.

Luna is waifu, and it makes me happy to see her happy.

To be a pony out of time and see the world seem to finally catch up with your dreams of happiness would seem a truly overwhelming feeling indeed. A very excellent,excellent story. Thank you very much.

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