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Stories about: Feelings too complicated to describe, ponies


Rarity and Twilight are dating. Rainbow Dash just asked them both out as a joke.

She didn't expect them both to say yes.

A Christmas present for the incomparable Monochromatic
Editing by Undome Tinwe and Pearple Prose

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Comments ( 85 )
No Crow #1 · Dec 25th, 2019 · · 1 ·

This was fantastic, thank you so much for writing it!! I'm sure mono will love it

Oh my gosh this is one of the cutest things I've ever read

So much Rainbow! So much Rarity! So much Twilight! They all played off each other wonderfully.

Fire and kindling, meet accelerant. This took off at 100mph on the Snappy Character Interactions Highway and didn't stop for a single moment. Rarity and Twilight's wit were fully on display for all to see, and Rainbow managed to keep up like a pro. Always good to see her more nerdy side come out, especially with those two.

As an aside, now I really want to see your Twilight playing off against Mono's Rarity. I think it'd be interesting.

And so Best Alicorn, Best Unicorn, and Best Pegasus have formed a cuddle puddle. Now we only need Pinkie Pie in the mix to complete some kind of horrifyingly amazing lesbian horse Voltron.

Horrifyingly Amazing Lesbian Horse Voltron dot tumblr dot com

Awww. Cute poly fluff on christmas eve. This was adorable.

Happy Hearth's Warming, VShuffler42

Thank you for providing the name of my next band. The music will be Very Gay.

Oh my. Well, I've said before you know how to write gripping tension haven't I. And I love Rainbow Dash's nerd side being excavated by Twilight for Rarity to inspect like the gem it is, and it not being found wanting.

That metaphor was a bit stretched. Ah well. This is why you're the good writer. Thank you for that.

Did I like this? Lemmie think about that. No wait, I'd better not think about that. Yes, I liked it.

Rajnbow puffed out her chest

Slipped on that "i" key for Rainbow.

This fic was so snappy I could use it instead of a metronome. I can’t believe how spot on the dialogue was - you made it seem so effortless, and I know from experience it’s not! The evening felt so natural, so smooth, that I forgot I was reading, and thought I was just hanging out on a hill with some very cute friends.

This may have been a present for Mono, but it’s a gift for all of us. Thank you so much for sharing!

I'm a sucker for Twidash. Also for Raridash. I absolutely loved every second if this and am very sad there isn't more.

Goodness, Rarity is one incredibly open person.

Within the space of one night she's letting someone (even a dearly loved friend of years whom you'd trust your life to) in on the most precious thing she has, and isn't dragging her heels much seeing that said precious person is very, very much more 'for it' than she is, especially since Rainbow is her type and Rarity isn't.

I feel like there'd normally be much more in the way of hesitation, resistance, and flat-out feeling like she was becoming less important in her own relationship in this sort of situation - even feeling betrayed by the two of them. But she turned out to handle it amazingly well. Some of that ability seems to stem from her own self-confidence and confidence in the strength of her bond with Twilight.

In such situations it's normal to feel that even if you aren't being forgotten and unloved, that the others are more compatible and more interested in each other than you, and that it's "only a matter of time". Or to not view your own part in the relationship as important as your partner's and the prospective new partner, thus feeling like you've got no staying power in the relationship beyond being the only other one in it aside from your original partner - something that vanishes the moment the other starts showing interest in someone else who clearly desires them.

Very impressive Rarity written here, despite that the story didn't follow her problems, could still easily feel vestiges of her hesitation and views.

This was absolutely fantastic and I wont hear a word otherwise.
The dialogue was ngl on point and the banter was gold.
Plus this is just a really good ship and you're a very good author so it all comes together beautifully.

Very nice. I love how Twi acts in this.

So does that mean they'll wear those animal onesies from the cover art at the end?

Rarity held eye contact while she turned her head slightly to call back. “I’m afraid so.”


“It seems like she means it. She brought cupcakes.” There was a tense pause. “Have you thought of a reason to say no yet?”

This seems like an incredibly bad idea!

This whole exchange made me think that Rainbow was inner monologuing. I had to re-read like 3 times to understand what was going on. The use of italics is not a good way to show that someone (Twilight) is speaking from afar.

This was so much better then it had any right to be, and I mean that in all the best ways. Going from "seriously, we're doing this?" With all resigned sarcasm, to "seriously, we're doing" eye waggle "this!" And doing it convincingly
Also, I love seeing the moment when nontraditional nerds realized they are nerds.

Thanks for this! I do wish it had gone further, but this was nice and sweet.

Can there be more of this?

And there was so much snuggling

I like this. It is sweet, sincere, and adorable.

My cheeks hurt. This was funny and adorable.

This is really good. No, really really good. If it was just about the characters popping off the page or the interplay flowing gorgeously — making all of them feel realistic and everything read smoothly — then this would be a solid story.

But on top of that, this is taking that awkward stumbling feeling-out period at the start of a polyamorous relationship, which takes a light touch to write about, and making everyone in it feel worth pursuing and worth rooting for. That's a hell of a balancing act.

Very well done.

This was really good!!!
The banter was on point, the internal thoughts were all in character, and succinct.
It had the right amount of tension - and awkward tension, and none of the characters were stereotypes or simple stand-ins for base ideas.
This was written lingerie - what you don't see is as much tantalizing as what you do.
This is just marvelous! It's what I aspire to be able to write and I don't think I've got it in me (or at least not now).

I might also be a little bit tipsy. I've been slowly exploring cream liquors. And Melatonin. Good night.

This is incredibly high quality awkwardness, and equally quality adorableness. I don't know what else one could ask for. Thank you for writing it.

All the banter and dialogue was so quick and witty, it honestly reminded me very much of The Importance of Being Earnest, It was a lovely bit of fluff that's definitely earned an upvote, though I don't know if it's quite good enough for my Fave Fluff shelf. Oh well, why not?

>‘just doesn’t write the boring bits’
That is seriously one of Elmore Leonard's ten rules of good writing.

*Humming to myself* "I kissed a girl and I liked it!"

Well written, perfect blend of awkward and adorkable =D


It's actually a conversation that was had mostly between Aragon and Pearple Prose - we were talking about who the best writer of the M6 would be, and with dawning horror, we probably realized Dash was probably low key one of the best authors.

Lack of patience, a short attention span in general but an ability to commit to working hard in specific, a chronic need for attention and a natural talent for knowing what parts of a story to embellish would kind of make her a brilliant storyteller.

Almost half an hour later, I finally remembered the line I wanted to make a specific comment about.

Rarity and Rainbow locked eyes and silently agreed that neither of them would point out the double entendre - Twilight’s innocent happiness was too good to ruin. The impromptu cold shower had helped.

Are you two really sure she isn't already aware of it?

Imma say in one word what everyone took twenty to articulate.


This was so snappy that you could use it for applause at a beat poetry reading. Brilliant and entertaining from start to finish.

This was the most ADORABLE thing I've EVER READ! I LOVE IT SOOOO MUCH!

I could see that. For genre writing Rainbow's unique vocabulary would not be a limitation. In fact, it would likely prevent her from straying too far into prose, which is an unceasing temptation to authors with an unabridged dictionary in their heads. Come to think of it, poor Twilight would likely be unable to finish writing anything fictional in part for that very reason. Pinkie Pie would produce some mad stream of consciousness in half an hour. Fluttershy would self-critique everything that she writes to oblivion, never allowing a word of it to be seen by anyone else. Applejack is probably more musician than author. Rarity the professional artist would have difficulty with crafting a story, since her favored mediums have never required narratives.

God, this is making me want to revisit "Naked Singularity."


dawning horror

Isn't that extreme?

(It's Rainbow Dash, Yutah. Rainbow. Dash)

Actually, maybe not so much...

“Saved by the dell!”

What a fitting variation! It rhymes with bell! :rainbowlaugh:

Rarity and Rainbow locked eyes and silently agreed that neither of them would point out the double entendre - Twilight’s innocent happiness was too good to ruin. The impromptu cold shower had helped.

*tries to hold in laughter*

Eep! This was a fun, amusing, very nice read!!! :yay:

It's a simple story with a simple plot written in simple prose, and yet it offers some of the best... well, I can't single anything out: it's the best everything in a short romance one shot I've read in a long time. Absolutely amazing, this was. :pinkiehappy:

This was really cute, and even as someone who doesn't particularly care for romance with Rainbow, I enjoyed it a lot. And yes, the dialogue was really snappy.

Wasn't even aware how bad I needed the romance itch scratched until this hit the spot. Phenomenal character work top to bottom.

I second (fourth?) the call for MOAR! This was completely amazing and I want to see more of them... Please? :raritystarry:

“You mess up two friendships and maybe ruin a relationship between two of your best friends?” Pinkie offered.

Pinkie don't... .-.

“I’ll make them extra good, then,” Pinkie went behind the counter and solemnly equipped her apron, “You’re going to need all the help you can get.”

I can totally see this working

What I enjoy about this one is that I’m totally on the side that thinks a 3-way relationship is a really bad idea, but like the characters in the story I find the actual date is just too charming to deny. Great job!

Twilight snorted. “Please. I wanted that since I was sober.”

I strive to be like Twilight. Oh, wait, I kind of am lol

This was amazing and very adorable...

Hmm, curious. A set of three, of whose constituent pairings I only really like one (not that I hate the other two, I'm just not that into them, so to speak), but that works strangely well in aggregate. Perhaps it's a case of the whole being greater than the sum of its parts, perhaps simply a result of good writing. Or, more likely, both - nice one.

That aside, I especially like the discussion of their various "types", as it hits on something that a lot of fic writers (among others, but this isn't the place to get into that) tend to forget - that love is, directly at least, less about who someone is and more about what they want; what they find sexually or romantically attractive; what they like in a partner. That's what's important and that's what you focused on, so kudos especially for that.

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