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LightningSword


Just doin' my own thing. ;)

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This story is a sequel to Can Ya Fix Her?


After a few days of waiting and planning, Thunderlane finally gets the courage to go back to Carousel Boutique, look for that pretty pink dress, and ask Rarity to buy it. Any number of things could happen, but a number of things--Rarity's heartbreaking refusal, a full, soul-bearing confession, and a sexy strut across the carpet--are the only things Thunderlane didn't expect.

He also could never have expected to question himself. His life choices. His identity. Who or what he is, or what he ought to be.

He just wanted to feel pretty. But is that all there is to it?


Contains light sexual references. Not enough for a Sex tag. At least, I don't think so.

Spectacular artwork by Crimmar.

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Comments ( 85 )

oh man, i loved this piece and the one preceding it!! ;v; simply wonderful!

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Extra thanks for favoriting both! :pinkiehappy:

Ah, strong depressing conflict that makes the happy ending all the more pleasureable. ^^
You at your finest. Now maybe we can get a sequel to you Fluttershy plushie fic :pinkiehappy:

Awesome! It's up!

As always, great job with your stories, and keep up the good work!

And thanks for letting me preread, always a joy! Enjoy the holidays! :pinkiesmile:

And no, that's not enough for a sex tag. Not for me, anyways. :raritywink:

Bravo! Well written and addressing an issue that too many are afraid to talk about.

Besides, a proper skirt makes anyone’s legs marvelous if the cut and color are right :raritywink:

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Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the fave! :pinkiesmile:

I..I love this fic. It crosses barriers formed by society and makes you think. Very cute 10/10 legs -ign

All I'm glad is that he got a dress that matches his colors. (I was honestly about to scream at Rarity if she allowed him to get away with that dress smh)

Great job ad-dressing this. For so many guys expressing any element of femininity is extremely nerve wracking. Society as a whole tends to portray it as a joke at best and a crime at worst, so many guys in this situation tend to be ashamed of themselves. Thunderlane's mental processes were accurately portrayed, and Rarity handled things well after that initial slip up.

Great story my friend!

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Thanks again for the fave. I'm glad you saw something of value in this story. :twilightsmile:

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Thank you. And thanks for the fave! :pinkiehappy:

*eating popcorn* neat!

Thunderlane's feelings here are relatable. I remember the first time I wore a dress ^.^

now, granted, we have very different circumstances surrounding us, namely that he's very firmly a stallion and presumably straight if not bi and just struggling with internalized biphobia, whereas I'm a girl and very definitely bi and very happy about that :P, but this was a really good portrayal of this type of feeling.

no problems really with flow and believability and everyone was super in character, including and especially rarity's fuckup at the beginning (I really hate that trope, by the way), so the writing is good. the visuals and the emotions and stuff are certainly indicative of your skill. and I'd love to see more fics like this in the future (maybe even having a trans character to address that aspect? ;) so have yourself a follow.

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Wow, thank you so much! I'm really glad this story resonated with you. The faves and the follow mean the world to me. Thank you! :raritystarry:

I've been waiting for this story sens Can You Fix Her. It's such a cute and wonderful one too. Keep up the good work.

This, was great. a perfect mix of adorable and dramatic, writing didn’t have any errors I could notice, and the premise itself was handled wonderfully without seeming heavy-handed or weird. Well done, Lightning Sword ^_^

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Thanks so much for the favorite!

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I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :pinkiesmile:

^^
But serious on the doll on, just heard about a game called everlasting summer, and based on it know a way to give that story a satisfactory ending with the same tone as the original in your style much like this

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I might just look into that. Maybe it'll give me the inspiration I'd need.

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Just Skype me when you can :pinkiehappy:

As someone who thinks of gender identity politics as a somewhat ridiculous concept, I wan't to thank you for showering an interesting perspective on it. I always find it invigorating when an area like this that I thought I couldn't possible empathize with is opened up for new interpretation.

I was interesting real, nice cover art.

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I'm glad I was able to show you a different side of things. Thanks for reading! :pinkiesmile:

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Thanks again!

I like this. Rarity's characterization is what I would truly expect from her, should she encounter a situation like this.

I do find it interesting and refreshing that Thunderlane still seems at least to consider himself, himself. There is by no means anything wrong with stories that delve into the fluidity of gender and self-identity, but it is interesting to also see stories that also look into feminine expression of a masculine character without undermining their masculinity.

That makes sense, right? :twilightsheepish:

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Sure, it does. I want to be able to do stories like this more often; they are basically a parallel to the Brony fandom. That, and I've always struggled with maintaining my sensitivity in a world that rejects me for it.

Thanks for reading, and thanks for the follow. :twilightsmile:

Good job Lightning sword! I really liked this!

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Thanks for the favorite! Glad you enjoyed it! :pinkiesmile:

“I started sneaking into my mom’s closet when I was twelve,” he began, voice barely above a whisper. “It just felt good to show off my legs in a short skirt. It felt good to look . . . desirable, you know? To be something ponies would want. I don’t really know why. It felt empowering,.."

.....

You have a freaking eletric silver Mohawk.

What else do ya want? 0_o

Also you're always naked. Lol?

Hmmmm... very strange.I wonder what kind of unfair rating this story would get.


So no words. Huh. And you still used spaced ellipses. Typical.

Crap story. Crap author. Crap everything. And yall know it.

I'm not crying, you're crying. :raritydespair:

Is this... Is this a well written Transmare fic?

Can... Can I proofread the next one? I want more.

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I don't know about trans. I don't know enough about transgendered people to do their struggles justice. But if I continue this, I will let you know.

Thanks for reading! :twilightsmile:

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Well, I never did like to judge. I know how it feels to be different, and I try never to treat people the way society does. I'm glad you get that from my fic. Thanks for reading. :pinkiesmile:

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Thank you too! :scootangel:

Very well written.

In fact, when it comes to sensitivity, you are one of three stallions I know who show it wonderfully, and aren’t afraid to be who they are. One of whom asked me of my services not too long before you did!

So if Big Mac was one, and Thunderlane is two, is this implying a third future addition to the series?

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Thanks. :twilightsmile:

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Technically, the third "stallion" is Spike, as referenced by:

She glanced at a table in the corner, on which a small case labeled “Plushie Repair Kit” was displayed right next to a bust carrying a magnificent gold necklace with a fire ruby set in it.

She said "stallion" more to protect his identity than anything else. But there might just be a third fic, if I think of a good enough story. :raritywink:

This was beautiful, it really was. A very touching look at crossdressing. Also, Thunderlane does look really good in that dress:raritystarry:

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Heh. He kinda does. :twilightsheepish: Thanks for the fave!

Huh. Nice to see what I was drawing for. And I had completely forgotten about the earrings. It was nice to see how seamlessly that small part entered the fic.

All in all, I have to say that I simply can't identify with Thunderlane because, in my case, I don't think I've ever felt in such a way. And I don't mean dresses and such, but for everything. I always preferred, and was able so far, to keep a this is me, this is what I like, deal with it, attitude.

But I do identify with Rarity. Not in the way she did it, I don't believe that the crude, without time to think his words over, real life version of me would handle such a matter so wonderfully, but I am not Rarity anyway. I did feel for the lesson though, the attempt to impart to others that this is how things are, this is what you want, this is how you feel, so live up to it. It was done wonderfully. No tackiness, no pushes or agenda, no soapboxing or anything.

It is a great story that contains the essence of MLP. Acceptance and friendship.

Well done, mate!

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I couldn't have done it without your amazing artwork. Thank you so much for reading! :pinkiehappy:

Hmmh. :trixieshiftleft:

A delicate subject, that someone even MILDLY disagreeing with can start up a shit-storm. It's not badly written and it's not mean-spirited. That, I think, to me, is what made me okay to read this. It's not aggressive like a fat modern feminist, nor a cry-bully like some internet folks would be. There's no woe-is-me, nor any torment from outside forces. There are so many landmines that a story like this can land on, and you avoided each and every one of them.

I shan't pretend I understand the subject matter, much less gender identity politics to begin with-- :trixieshiftright:

but I do know good writing when I see it. There's a certain apple juice-like purity to this. It feels sweet and honest without rubbing a rag of morality or hot-button issues in my face. For that I am certainly grateful.

Well done. You certainly deserve that spot in the featured box, above all the others currently there. :ajsmug:

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I can't thank you enough for that analysis. I never thought I would get so many people feeling this way about a subject they don't even understand. I'm so glad you got all that just from my story. Thank you so much for reading! :raritystarry:

Too dayum real.

Liked and favorited.

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Skirts! :pinkiegasp: Its an honor! Thanks for reading! :pinkiehappy:

I'll be perfectly honest here, but I legit liked this story! Well, I was really hesitant to read it at first, and cringed myself off the story a couple of times, but I honestly liked it! Nice work there mate.

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Thanks for reading . . . . I guess? :twilightsheepish:

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No, there's nothing up with the story, it's more of an issue with me.

This really hit close to home for me. I honestly wish I had had someone as accepting and caring as Rarity when I took my first few steps. Thunderlane's reaction to Rarity when she took away the pink dress was absolutly spot on.

Overall this was really well written!

Looking back at this comments section is giving me some much needed hope for humanity. I think it's really cool that people who don't really understand this type of thing are reading and gaining a new perspective. Props to everyone here who did that, it takes a lot of guts to approach and learn about something that you don't understand or find uncomfortable. :twilightsmile:

I JUST READ THE PREQUEL YESTERDAY.... Are you some kinda wizard?

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