Twilight has always had the same nightmare she is standing before a mirror and she sees two of herself. one is a filly and one is a colt this is a story about how she came to a decision.
this story was a request by Greeny Maze
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MorningRose
im 27 and a die hard pegasister to the core and im mainly going to write transmare stories. but i will write others if anypony has a request please let me know. ps i won't charge you for it
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I like the idea of the recurring nightmare that Dusk has, though the rest of the story really drags it down. The biggest problem with this fic is that it moves too fast. Try slowing down and having the characters have a more realistic conversation. Talk about what the characters are thinking about or feeling, etc.
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Thanks for the advice I will work on that in the future