Starlight Glimmer awaits her punishment at the hooves of Twilight Sparkle and her friends.

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Um... Like?

Whoa... there are no words for this...

Whew... well written, is what I'm saying here... well done, and... a depressing, but very interesting read. Years pass by, centuries even? And she never remembers... wow...

I have no words man...

Good work...

That was... frightening...

This is wild. I like this.

I'm pretty unsettled right now. That's... good?

...Oh god....that's so horrible...:ajsleepy:
Yeah...file this under "Fates Worse Than Death".
Also, I half-expected a certain brown/pink pegasus to show up at the end there.

That music was a bit of a mood breaker, though. The lyrics fit very well, but it feels too upbeat. I'll just run my own Afterlife here.

Everyone likes time travel, but when things go wrong, it can be for eternity. She go off easily by comparison. She will be free when time ends.

A well written, dark, haunting story. Poor Starlight Glimmer... I don't know what I had expected.:trixieshiftleft:

This some heavy shit right here.

Wow.... Holy dang, Skirts... That's, actually one of the most terrifying concepts of an existence I've ever thought about. Just as BP was. I'm just rooting for a happy ending to one of these stories of yours. An ending where everything works out, or at least the most horrifying parts do. I don't know if I'll ever get one, but I'll keep reading these until I do.... then I'll read some more.

...ouch, that was horrible. Not the story, I mean, but Starlight's fate. Definitely not something she deserved, though it did lead to interesting glimpses of the... centuries (at the very least) to come. Probably no way to fix it, and sounds like they had major problems that took up their attention later on. Though at least she's unaware, its arguably worse for anyone who tried to meet with her for years on end. I've read stories where time travel can end very badly, but this is one of the sadder, really depressing instances, so good job on that.

How long is Eternity...?

Eternity is but a single moment...

...the same moment...

...a moment that never ends.


I has a sad now.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Ooh that's rough

An opposite groundhog day loop, where she resets and everything else continues.

"I know there's no excuse for what I did. But I want you all to know that I'm ready for whatever punishment you think is fair."

Starlight may have been ready but I sure wasn't. :ajsleepy:

This would have made for an interesting prologue to Hello, Sedna.

A haunting, chilling story... time travel really can have huge side effects.

That's... horrifying. :twilightoops:

I have to wonder if you've been reading Worm... :rainbowlaugh:

I just suddenly want hug her.

It sort of reminds me of last week's Doctor Who episode, Heaven Sent.

At least in Background Pony, Lyra got to die.

I see somepony's seen Fifty First Dates. Though, I prefer Memento...

I can't see where the Sun as gone.


Also, holy shit that is creepy.

...I think I need to go read some light, fluffy stuff for a while...try and forget this amazing nightmare fuel. Damn your incredible writing short skirts

Damn your incredible writing short skirts

6702282 Personally, I prefer looking up them...:twilightsmile:

God DAMN. This is as Grimdark as FUCK!

I actually feel sorry for Starlight; not even she deserves a fate like THIS.

...Like and favorite earned you absolutely magnificent so-and-so. :twilightoops:

The cover art, especially, will probably... no definitely add to the night mare....

I have to admit. I actually cried at the end.

This is not real. This is not real. This is not real.

Again, you take writing horsewords to the next level. That was horrifyingly... perfect.


Good God that fic was dark :pinkiesad2: I mean that was properly depressing. Excellent idea though, and wonderful execution. Tbh, given the ending, I would have sided with Sunset Shimmer. Euthanasia may have been more merciful than infinite loneliness.

What pegasus would that be?

Good Heaven, nobody should have to face that. In the end, even Twilight couldn't take it anymore and left her alone.


Not what she deserved? She created multiple divergent timelines in which untold death and mayhem became the norm - at one point, where apparently the world was destroyed and Celestia and Luna must have been dead. She is responsible for an astronomical number of dead people in the course of unbelievably petty revenge. Just because they aren't part of the alpha timeline doesn't make them or their lives any less real.

No salvation.. even at the end.

That end... I feel sick. Gods, I feel sick.

6702025 and now she's going to wake up, find out she was basically dreaming for two billion years, and kill the princesses.

This.....this was dark. VERY dark. I've read alot of dark stories on here, but this tops all of them!

No one deserves to go through this. Not even Starlight deserves this type of fate. She's all alone now. All alone in absolute darkness.

I can't be the only one who feels sorry for what is happening to Starlight in this story. Now I wish I could stop this from happening to her. She may have done a lot of evil stuff to Equestria's timeline, but I would give her a second chance.

But she wasn't; she was only remembering the last 18 hours of it, and then resetting to the last few minutes.

That's okay.

I didn't need to be happy anyway.

Time traveling doesn't seem as fun anymore. But that was still a good read.

Rip heart out. Slap it on the wall. Use as dart board. See if it still works.


Positively Chilling.

Very chilling story, though It's hard to believe even Zecora who has a magical cure for everything couldn't fix this.

Also, just a personal nitpick, why did Twilight end up becoming larger like Celestia? Cadence and Luna aren't Celestia's size yet have been alicorns for much longer.

6702544 Not really. When Teal'c from Stargate kills his own counterpart in a parallel reality he says that "only our reality matters".

And it's true. There's no point in caring about any reality other than your own because otherwise any time travel that inevitably results in a different timeline will cause infinite tragedies regardless.

The mechanic used in the season finale is wonky at best which is why I hate/don't use time travel in my stories. Regardless of how well it's executed most time travels create a paradox when one returns to the original one... It's never the original reality.

In any case my point still stands. There's no reason to worry about s timeline or any for that matter. In fact tgose timelines ALREADY existed in a way if there are multiple timelines.

What happened in the finale is that each alternative reality became the main one each time Twilight time travelled. Or at least that's the best way I can explain it right now. Its really something to avoid in your storytelling. Time travel that is.

Holy shit that was epic, haven't gotten chills like I did at the end of this fic in a long time.


Goddammit, Skirts.

Alondro #48 · Dec 6th, 2015 · · 14 ·

Every time they went back in time, they should have met their previous selves from each time they returned to that point.

Sheesh, even "The Amazing Adventures of Gumball" got that right!

In summation: I hated the finale. It hurt my mind in every possible way. Now I thirst for vengeance... :pinkiecrazy:

6702562 Meh, the universe ends and she's stuck in it. Kinda reminds me of Doctor Who always ending up at the end of the universe lately.

Well shit, if people want to be THAT nihilistic, then yeah everything's pointless and they might as well go blow their brains out.

I find it rather silly to place the apparent limitations of our own universe on a magical pony land where love is a tangible thing shape-shifting bug ponies can feed upon and a Q-like creature can alter reality and whatever cosmic laws exist in that universe with a snap of his talons.

Besides, our own universe may surprise us in the end, as we still don't even know for sure what makes up 96% of it.

This is something that just crawls right on under your skin and shakes your very being. And even after time passes, it still clings to the back of your mind, popping back into your thoughts with the subtle horror presented. Stunning work as usual.

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