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Silver Moon

I'm nobody! Who are you? Are you nobody, too? -Emily Dickinson

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Now that would have made for a dark thing in the finale. Starlight seeing the consequences of her world firsthoof... from herself.

Short yet poignant.

I am Ozymandius, King of Kings.
Look upon my works, ye mighty, and despair...


Here is change, it is awful.
What is needed is improvement, compromised at a leave above both arguers heads...

All these finale fics are so DARK. I love it.

What powerful yet unrecorded race; once dwelt in this annihilated place...

Wow, they could at least spared her and dragged her with them. Damn thats dark.

Even when she won, she still lost. Was it worth all this destruction for every pony to be equal.

I was thinking the exact same thing after watching the finale. 'What if the last timeline was Starlight's?'

6688430 what would be the point? She was dying...

Wow. That Was so.. deep...

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You got a 'was was' in there. :B

This actually makes a ton of sense, though.

I know the series would never have actually done anything as close to as dark as this was, but I liked this solution better, having her own alternate self tell Starlight just how badly she had messed up would have really driven home the point of how wrong she was.

Wow. This' really great...

Dark yet meaningful.
Sad yet righteous.
Victory in ruins.
Equal rites.

I was going to write something with a similar premise. But I think you did it better. Nice job.

her expression torn between hope of hre dream coming true


You never had enough influence to get to get out of those mountains

And then there was one.

Wow. I love how alternate Starlight's "utopia" caused the barren wasteland timeline. :rainbowderp: I also love how dark all these alternate timeline fics are. :pinkiecrazy:

What gains a man, if he were to gain the world, and lose his own soul? Or what can a man give in exchange for his soul?

And now I'm eating my words. This is a rare gem in an overly-used and mostly-worthless trope.

This is the sole reason why I will still at least try to read fics with the tragedy tag; every so often, you get one that actually has meaning in the suffering. Still, for the most part, most of them bear out my main belief about this trope.

But that's just me. In any case, have a like.

well, they could´ve taken her to a hospital or something to help her or feed her or stuff.But then I realice that would´ve damage the world by having two Starlights in the same timeline.whatever

I love this

I arrived at this story quite by accident. My "Little Girl" asked me to read her a bedtime story. She was already half asleep, so I needed to pick something soothing and quiet. I remembered an old story that shared the same name -- "Waiting" -- and thought I was reading her that one. By the time I got a couple paragraphs in, I realized this was a different story, but we were both pleased with it anyways. As others have mentioned, a slightly more thorough proof-reading would have caught some of the minor spelling and grammar errors. I can easily forgive those, though. The premise and execution were very good!

“You wanted to build a world where everypony is equal.
“We’re all equal in death.”


Amazing and sad. I applaud you. :fluttercry:

Full review here, but in brief: Starlight's simple narration is nice, and I think it would have been a more effective story with less of the more extreme stuff. I still appreciate it taking a different path to most Re-Marked fics, though.

Short but built greatly. The premise and narration is quite satisfying to read.
Nice job!

This is a good story. That’s all I have to say about that.

“We’re all equal in death.”


Talk about Chills.

This is pretty cool! Good usage of the Starlight victory scenario.

This actually makes you think about what would have happened if she succeeded.

Be careful what you wish for, you may get what you wanted. You wanted equality, there you have it.

Either total collapse of civilisation and death of the planet


New ponies being born in few generations, who build EVERYTHING from GROUND UP. Those who do not have their quite marks removed.

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