My Path

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My name is Fluttershy. Like most ponies, I am afraid of the Everfree Forest. Unlike most ponies, there is one path I’m not afraid of.
I’m not scared of it because I walk it every week to visit my Mother.

Cover art: Here.

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Featherflutter

Featherflutter #1 · Aug 31st, 2013 · 1 · ·

i could kind of tell where this was going but it still got me. good job

Silver Moon

Silver Moon #2 · Aug 31st, 2013 · · ·

3131242 Yeah, it is a little predictable. I still like it and I'm glad you do to. Thanks!

Spacecore2

Spacecore2 #3 · Aug 31st, 2013 · · ·

For a second the picture looked like fluttershy had a beard. well of to go read this.

Kytin

Kytin #4 · Aug 31st, 2013 · · ·

To be honest I was expecting a pony statue rather than a tombstone.

Writer12577

Writer12577 #5 · Aug 31st, 2013 · 1 · ·

Beautiful. That's all I can say. Even though I knew exactly what was going to come, it was still beautiful. Especially the ending.

I spotted a single mistake.

My thoughts keep my occupied

I think you meant "me" here.

Everything else seemed to be grammatically correct.

All in all, these two stories were a great way to bring you first year here to an end. I'm keenly looking forward to your future stories, for I know that I will enjoy them.

Spacecore2

Spacecore2 #6 · Sep 1st, 2013 · · ·

Oh I thought that it was the idea that her mom was a manticore. The ending caught me off guard. Good story.

electreXcessive

electreXcessive #7 · Sep 27th, 2013 · · ·

I liked it. You have inspired me to write a fic idea that I've been doubting for a long time good sir!

Silver Moon

Silver Moon #8 · Sep 27th, 2013 · · ·

3264436 Thanks for the like, fave and watch!
Oh, and I'm a girl...
Good luck with your fic!

electreXcessive

electreXcessive #9 · Sep 27th, 2013 · · ·

3264491
Oopsie. Sorry, I really shouldn't have assumed. I look forward to reading more of your stuffs though.

Silver Moon

Silver Moon #10 · Sep 27th, 2013 · · ·

3264500 No problem. I hope you enjoy future stories, although I'm warning you now there may not be any for a while.
School and life getting in the way of ponies. *sigh*
Still, I will try and uphold any standards you may or may not have set whenever I get around to posting new things.
Thanks again for the like/fave/watch. They really mean a lot to me.

Mine Hoof

Mine Hoof #11 · Oct 2nd, 2013 · 1 · ·

That's so sad :'( but I love it :)

Dramapony

Dramapony #12 · Oct 5th, 2013 · 1 · ·

Very beautiful piece. There were certain things I enjoyed about this:

-How you told the story from Fluttershy's perspective in a first person, but in the present tense. It gave us a great sense of how it's an ongoing routine for her.
-The revelation at the end was very heartbreaking.

If there was anything I think it can be improved with, I think it would have to be spacing the paragraphs—it got a little exhausting after a while. A very good story overall; simple, yet very touching.

samstermlp