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Silver Moon

I'm nobody! Who are you? Are you nobody, too? -Emily Dickinson


Alternate ending to The Mysterious Mare Do Well.

Nopony has seen Rainbow Dash since the argument about Mare Do Well at Sugercube Corner, over a week ago. Too much time has passed without an attempt at fame, so Fluttershy goes to Rainbow Dash’s house to talk to her. Instead of finding a prismatic Pegasus, all Fluttershy finds is a letter.
A letter of apologies, a letter of dreams, a letter of fears.
But also a letter of farewell.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 63 )

Oh wow, this is nice alternatitive to Mare-Do-Well, i like it. i hope you will continue!:rainbowdetermined2:

I shouldn't be reading anything tragic. Not today. Not this week. Not in this mood.

But this story, I couldn't resist. And I wasn't disappointed. Maybe a bit more depressed, but most certainly not disappointed.

And to my delight I see that this is incomplete! I shall be waiting for more, this seems like a ton of potential!

And once again, my Read later list has grown

dark chaos emerald:i blam mare do well.that bitch

And another fix fic about that episode.

I don't blame you it relly was a piece of shit (the only episode that I'd call it that).

Why would Fluttershy know about a giant monster attack and not tell anyone? I'm not sure I understand, did Fluttershy have this attack written down on her calendar?

"Hey Fluttershy, how are your animals?"

"Oh. . . um, you know, Mr. Squirelly has a fur appointment tomorrow, Angel is cleaning his burrow this week, a Hydra is going to try and level Ponyville next Wednesday. . ."

2105507 First of all, thank you for your honesty. I truly appreciate comments such as yours that point out the little things that I miss.

Now for the explanation.
Fluttershy truly believed that she could convince the Hydra not to attack. She was planning on giving it one last shot before telling somepony.
Yeah, looking back at this, that is a flimsy excuse. Oh well, too late to change it.
Other than that, I hope you liked this.


Personally, I think 'death by heroics' is the most in character form of suicide for RD to take (as in character as suicide could be for a technicolor pony). The rest wasn't bad by any means, but that plot hole just stuck out and made the story hard to swallow.

Oh well, I'm still gonna read this, haha.

Huzzah! An update!

Can't wait to see where this goes.

Wasn't this complete or do I really have a horrible memory (which I indeed do have)?

But anyways, I couldn't be more happy that I got something to read, no matter how short. It sure has been boring around here...

After reading:

Words stuck. Must gif.


Incredible job. Thank you.

What was the quote from BTVS that you used?

This story IS NOT complete.


Hope that there are more chapters to come out :pinkiehappy:

This is so good! I really hope the "complete" tag lies.

Don't just stand there girls, go find Dash; she's in trouble!

this story is FAR from done.

You can't just leave it here please continue.:applecry::pinkiesad2::raritycry::fluttershbad::raritydespair:

2260297 What did you think?

2260407 No it was not previously completed. Then it was and now it is not again. See below for the long-winded explanation.


Think of something cool and tell her I said that.

In the season one finale (Prophecy Girl), Giles is being season 1 Giles (aka bossy/mean/jerk-ish) and telling Buffy not to do something she wants to, so basically she knocks him out. Cue Mrs Calendar running to Giles, kneeling down, 'Is he going to be ok, yada yada.' Buffy then says more or less the above quote only with the "her" above being a "him" in the show and adding something like "when he wakes up tell him... I don't know..." first. Something like that. It's been a long time since I watched that season.

2261929 So...
Did you like it?

2260492 2260757 2261365 2263641 2265710
OK, five people demanding more. So more we will have.
BUT (there is always a but), it will take a long time to get it out and it will be an alternate ending.
You see, this was not the original ending I had planed. The ending I was going to use wasn't working for me. I hit a writers block as long as the Great Wall of China and the height of Mount Everest plus the depth of Mariana Trench. Then one day when I was totally NOT daydreaming in class iambrony.steeph.tp-radio.de/mlp/gif/mlfw835.gif?1347574475 and the idea of her sister walked into my head, fully formed. No, wait. It did not walk in. It didn't even waltz in. It ZUMBA-ed in, demanding to be written. So it was.
I also wanted to write a story with a very indeterminate ending. Why? I'm not sure. Maybe because Stephen King (my all time number one hero (other than Adam Savage and Joss Whedan (even though Joss and Stephan have caused me so much emotional stress over the last few years, I still love them.))) did that to me not too long ago when I finished "Cell." Damn good book with a ending even more evil than this one. Anyway, I'm off topic.

So, in short, YES I will be adding another chapter and NO it will not be continuing with Rainstorm. HOWEVER (always a however (especially after a but)), I have an idea for an indirect sequel for the first ending. I will post separate as it will be indirect, so one would not have to read this one first to understand it. All I'm going to say about that right now is that it will be staring Rainstorm and it will be her side of what happened. IE, what she did after she left and how she found Rainbow Dash again. It will also be her apologizing to RD.

Wow, that was a long "in short." Let's try again, shall we?

There will be another chapter, but I do not know how long it will take to get up. It will be an alternate ending. There will be an indirect sequel posted elsewhere on this site, which I will put a link to here.

OK then. I hope you all enjoyed this and do not hate me too much for the ending.
:pinkiecrazy: I (hope I) will be seeing you all soon(ish)!


Okay, so I was both correct and incorrect. Now I'm confused. I should sleep more. It would help my brains notice things.

But if you really want to continue this, you can add one name to the list of people requesting more chapters. I'd love to see more of this one :twilightsmile:

Take your time, I'm sure the result will be worth it :pinkiehappy:

2273688 Apparently not. :pinkiecrazy: I am glad you enjoyed this.

2273726 :yay: Yay. I'll probably get the indirect sequel up first since I have a few ideas for that. But most likely I will get something completely different up because I have a very short attention spa- OH LOOK SOMETHING SHINY!!! :pinkiegasp:
Besides, I really want to get to work on the next chapter of In The Darkness. I'm probably going to have two more chapters for that, then a really short, really special epilogue. That is all I am revealing at this moment in time. :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:


I don't think I have ever met anyone who manages to make me so excited in such a little amount of time. Now I have something to wait for, :yay:

As much as i like this story. i do not remember there ever being a hydra that was about to attack the town in the episode. there was a hydra in season one that i remember.

2391832 There was no hydra attack in the show. I made it up for this story. Why did I choose a hydra? Why not?

oh that's cool well hydras are very hard to kill so it was a good creature to use for Dash to go and fight.

2392602 Thanks. I'm glad you like this.

I want, no, need more!!! I love your story sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much!! :heart: :pinkiehappy:


I tried writing an alternate ending to this episode once, but it sucked.
Yours, however, is amazing.
Keep up the good work.

I like this ending alot better I feel like it gives closure.
P.S. If you did a bonus chapter with the fight sense between Rainbow Dash and the Hydra that would make this story 20% cooler. :raritystarry::fluttercry::duck:

Oh god, the feels! :raritycry: :applecry: :fluttercry:

When I saw this title in my update box I was surprised and had to read it right away. I believe you did a wonderful job on this ending and agree with you about the fact that it is indeed a happy ending in the sense of the story.

I cannot wait for the time when that update to sequel chapter will be gracing the inbox's as well.
Thank you for the alternate ending and hope you have great stories for the future.

I do not see a derpy pony,
I see Derpy, a pony.
One day I will figure out how to put a sig in fimfiction.

Right in the feels :raritycry:! Very, very, very well written :fluttercry:!

Oh my, a chapter! And lookies, it's a second one in three days! Splendid!

This feels much like a reward, you know. I must admit that I had been waiting for this. More than usual, that is. And now it's here. :yay:.

Oh boy, that was something. Something, as in ohmyCelestiaandLunathatwasamazing! I'm repeating what the other people above me have said, but this was really well-written. And on top of that, sad and slight gore. Bravo, absolutely brilliant!

Now, much to my disappointment, I have to skip proofreading this chapter, as I'm going to have to get online on Skype and get working. The only thing I found when reading the story was this:

Oh, how she longed to be rave, brave like-

Shouldn't there be a "b" in front of the "rave". It doesn't seem to make much sense right now.

That was all and this seems to be my cue to get out of here. I'll be there when your next story gets updated (or when you make a blog post. I really have no idea when I'll get to disturb you again).

Have a fuzzy Pinkie :pinkiehappy: !

2497639 Thank you! I'm happy that you like it.

2497646 Personally, I prefer the other ending but I know that many will disagree and I'm glad you like it. As for the fight scene, I think I'm going to leave that to my readers' imaginations. Go crazy!

2498033 I'm glad! I really enjoy it when I get comments like this. It makes me feel good.

2498222 Thank you for the lovely comment. Comments like yours make me feel special. The fact that someone has taken the time to write out something longer than a single sentence or two (and with proper grammar no less!) makes me feel like people really care about my stories and enjoy them. So again, thank you. By the way, I love your sig.

2499957 Well, I was aiming at the "feels." I guess I have good aim. :rainbowdetermined2: Thank you for the compliment.

2500425 Hello again, my friend! I have been writing a lot these past few days, haven't I? Well, I just got over a writer's block that was plaguing me for over a month so now I have a month's worth of writing energy and ohcrapdidIjustjinxthat? OhcrapIthinkIdid! NowIwon'tbeabletowriteforamonthagain! NO! Crapcrapcrapcrapcrap! KNOCK ON WOOD! KNOCK ON WOOD! *knocks on wood*
My brain: You could have just deleted that part of the comment...
Me: What's the fun in that?
My brain: :facehoof:
I'm pleased that you enjoyed this as much as your comment says you did.
I fixed the typo. My fingers couldn't move at the speed my brain was sending out letters so I think they thought that the "b" just wasn't important enough. Yup, that is exactly what happened. :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:
Well, farewell for now, my friend. I shall see you again when one of us posts something that notifies the other.

Let me return the favor.:pinkiehappy:


And now, a reply. My day just officially got good!

Yes, you have been writing a lot. And I also see that you have one of those rational brain. That's good. Hello, Silver Moon's brain!

A good read is a good read, no matter if you serve it on a silver plate or roll it in grease and tell me to fetch it from the dumpster. And I generally find your stories to belong to this category of "good reads".

Yup, that tends to happen. Those silly brains, first they try to be sooo rational and then they just go all silly and fool your muscles. And now my brain is ranting about other brains. And now my brain hurt itself by thinking about things that are beyond its capacity. Ow.

Same to you from here, I will be around and lurking and such, so it should not take long for our paths to cross again!

You fiend! You made me pull my hand out of my amazing pocket that comes with my pj's, but all in all; good stuff.

Really nice short story :raritycry:

Those who were Mare-Do-Well...Twilight....Applejack.....Pinkie....Rarity....and Fluttershy...:ajsleepy:

They purposely tried to make Rainbow Dash feel bad, depressed and lonely all because they wanted to teach her a lesson..They never tried to speak with her and get to know the real her. As a result, Rainbow Dash's feelings and desires to be more then a face in the crowd found a way to kill her and punish the others for their cruelty and ignorance, with the news of the Hydra. As a result, Loyalty is dead and she went with a smile on her face, knowing she fulfilled the wish she had in her heart, a wish her friends never got to know until it was too late.

All are punished..:flutterrage:..ALL ARE PUNISHED!!

(I know I should like Shakesphere and it was a happy end for Rainbow Dash, but it didn't change the fact the tradgey of this story could had been easily prevented.)

4802032 While that episode is what gave me the idea of using the Hydra, it did not attack Ponyville. The Hydra itself was canon but its alleged attack on the town was my idea.

...I should really stop reading Rainbow Dash death fics when I start tearing my own heart apart.





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