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Rainbow Dash is shocked when she unmasks Mare Do Well! Instead of confronting her them about it, she decides to get back at her friends- by leaving Ponyville!

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Hey! It's EXACTLY what I would have done in that scenario!

Good fic. Honestly f&$k that episode

Rainbow Dash is such a troll... :trollestia: So, there's going to be more? Maybe the next chapter takes place in the future? :derpyderp2: Well, this story gets a like. :pinkiesmile:

It was interesting but you should look over it again I saw some noticeable mistakes (which I would point out if I wasn't on a phone)

I'll show them

What do you think?

Honestly, I think this would have made a better lesson than the one in the episode.

First story in new story list.

Already has over 100 views.

Well then...

Hi. I think this is good but as many people have told me, you need to check your work before posting it. Some of the spelling mistakes can take you out of the flow and be distracting. If you just take a quick look you should be able to find them easily! :pinkiehappy:

I hope you do "party of one".

4598432 Me too.

4598566 Maybe

4598433 I forgot to mark it as complete again, sorry. :twilightsheepish:

4598483 Fixed

4598708 Yeah, I go on and I have a million notices in my inbox!

4598768 Maybe I will! :pinkiehappy:

4598802 That's okay, I understand. :eeyup:

4598852 wait. what? that's it? no journey to find Rainbow? no reaction from Scootaloo? no seeing the town attack the girls for lying to them? It's complete?

4598939 I'd have to agree, but, it is the writers decision. :twilightsheepish:

4598939 The girls don't have to tell the townsponies they were Mare Do Well. Besides, it wasn't really lying, it was having a secret identity. Like Batman.
Maybe I'll do something with Scootaloo, but I intended this story to be like a slap in the face to the other 5, like they realized out doing Rainbow Dash wasn't the best way to handle things. Applejack's already said that it was Rainbow's decision to leave, and they can't interfere. Besides, ponies need independence in this world.

4599048 oh... not sure how to feel about this

All aboard the Feels train to Feelsville

Wait I just thought of something... wasn't Rainbow Dash pranking them when she said she was moving? Or maybe the writer is pranking us :pinkiegasp:

I also have similar scenarios for Pinkie Pie and Spike (Party of One and Power Ponies) but they probably won't get written.

Honestly, after reading this story, that's a darn shame.

4599385 That would be dark. :rainbowderp: I just read a fanfiction where Rainbow tries to slay the Hydra to be better than Mare Do Well, but she ends up dying.
4599502 She was mad at them for "betraying" her, so she actually went through with her plan.
4599613 I wasn't a part of the fandom when the episode aired, so I don't know the history of the fandom's reactions to episodes. Sorry! :twilightsheepish:
4599711 I've already got one request for Part of One. Do you think I should do that?

I want to see more i don't care what will happen a happy ending or not.

Yes. Saving her flank when she was too busy grandstanding to save ponies. That sounds like betrayal to me.

4601068 She didn't understand that they were doing this to teach her modesty. The way Rainbow saw it, it was betrayal that they tried to upstart her. She didn't know that they were doing this for her benefit, because then I would have had to put in a cheesy dialogue where Twilight explains everything, and nopony does that in real life.

Nlce; as the saying goes, revenge is a dish best served cold, and those five got an ice-cold dose of "You are all douchebags:flutterrage:!"
Liked and faved!:twilightsmile:

I'd like to see power ponies and party of one's alternate endings...:pinkiesad2:

4602112 Maybe. I've gotten lots of requests for those, specifically Party of One. :pinkiecrazy:

4600027 Out of the two, yes. But do both :pinkiehappy:

I feel like the entire cast fucked up, myself. The other five should have pulled Rainbow aside and called her out on her ego (and not resorted to this bizarre superhero plan if she wouldn't listen), but on the other hand they did end up saving lives that Rainbow wouldn't have. I wanted to write a short story where Rainbow is calling them out on their scheme like in most of these stories...and then Applejack asks how Rainbow was going to save that cart that AJ stopped.

I think the idea was that RD's head was so far up her flanks that she WOULDN'T have listened, and would have turned hostile on her friends for "stealing her thunder".

This was an amazing read, and I'm a bit sad there isn't more. Although it'd be great to see the other two. You have earned yourself a like, favorite, comment, and follow. Well done. :twilightsmile:

True, but they're never shown confronting her. It's not an unreasonable complaint when people say "they never even talked to her about it!" because as far as we can be sure, they didn't. I don't hate the episode (or any of them, really) but I do consider it one of the most flawed.


However, the fact they didn't even try to talk to her is the point, not speculation on what would have happened if they did or didn't because we really don't know. Sure they saved ponies as MDW, no one disputes that fact, but the reasoning for doing it was lackluster thanks mostly to the poor construction of the episode. As for the whole betrayal thing, when she came to them in need of a confidence boost and was laughed at for her pain, while her own friends went bragging about their own accomplishments that would constituent betrayal or abandonment, depending on the point of view.

But considering the series of episodes that sprung up concerning RD that season, MDW is par for the course along with the other two ones she starred in. The general response of the other 5 when it came to RD's stuff was to either whisper behind her back or laugh in her face.


Fluttershy also gets the mockery/laughter treatment, as does Twilight. Enjoying the emotional pain of their friends seems to be a hobby for the Mane 6.


Personally I had an idea for a comedy that never got written where the ponies try EVERYTHING before going with Mare Do Well from shouting the truth at her, to neon signs.

I sorta had the idea that Rainbow Dash was lying when she said she was leaving. Personally, I think she shouldn't have left like that. She's the Element of Loyalty, she'd never do that, but she would still prank her friends, which is why I'm going there. I liked the story a lot thought. I was good. :pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy:

4603777 Yeah, there's that.
There's actually a theory that Applejack and RD should switch elements.
Are you working on your story?

4603803 Did you read what you just posted? :rainbowlaugh:

4603807 Hey it was an accident! I'm still leaning!! Yeah I'm pretty stupid...:duck::pinkiehappy:

4603832 No you're not. How much progress have you made?

4603842 Shhhh!! I'm working!!! :flutterrage:


In other words, Rainbow Dash did it all to herself.


At least it sounds better than the 'turn all station of canon fights into curb stomp battles by making the baddies static and chained to narrative and the heroes dynamic.'

It was rushed a bit and the story and scene could of done with a bit more description.

Grammar needs some work that's not too big a problem.

All together, A damn good story. Keep it up

Very interesting twist :)

I can't wait to see more of this story :)

Wait, that's it? What happens next?!

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