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SPOILERS FOR EPISODE 7!


Scootaloo finally has the loving parents she always wished for- or as close as she can get, anyways. Rainbow Dash is curious to hear more about Scootaloo's own foalhood.

First Published
18th May 2017
Last Modified
18th May 2017
#1 · 1w, 3d ago · 1 · · Lack of Faith ·

Good fic, an interesting take on the line, I liked it.

#2 · 1w, 3d ago · 1 · · Lack of Faith ·

Liek to see a confronation with scoota Dead Beat Parents, too late for them to do anything but still need to be told off.

Love to see them react to Rainbow and her parents offering the support they should given her, and the love she gives in return.

Bet that pop thier little world.

#4 · 1w, 3d ago · 4 · · Lack of Faith ·

...this does not feel finished.

This feels like a start.

Please. Continue.

#5 · 1w, 3d ago · 1 · · Lack of Faith ·

>>8174185 I agree, this needs to happen.

#6 · 1w, 2d ago · 1 · · Lack of Faith ·

Scootaloo's parents need a Talk, badly. They can't Let her Daughter down, just because of a Handicap. They should give her any Support they can give, so scootaloo can live a normal as it is possible. Nice to See the Handicap idea, i always Think she just needs more Time to Fly then other Pegasus.

#7 · 1w, 2d ago · 1 · 1 · Lack of Faith ·

This fic is my old canon. Pegasus magic, NOorphan. It just made my day.

Finally someone made it up and wrote! Sweet Celestia, thank you!

#8 · 1w, 2d ago · 1 · 1 · Lack of Faith ·

>>8174886

Could easily be that weak Pegasus magic won't ground her forever.  She may never be the best or fastest flyer, but Scoots seems to be getting more flight capable in the show itself.  her parents might just find that with proper encouragement their little filly will someday fly

#9 · 1w, 2d ago · 1 · · Lack of Faith ·

>>8174886 Sadly, this is a common reaction by parents to kids who were born blind, or deaf, or with other defects.

>>8176745 Yeah ì'm Sure too she will Fly Someday

>>8176747 sadly too often we  have such Reactions

#12 · 1w, 1d ago · 3 · · Lack of Faith ·

This's an interesting idea, but like >>8174237 says, the story doesn't feel anywhere near finished.  You've shown your idea to us, but you haven't done anything with it; there's no full story to it yet.

#13 · 1w, 11h ago · 1 · · Lack of Faith ·

Hmm..... A nice idea. I can see a few problems with it, though:

"Weak Pegasus magic in the bloodstream. Your daughter might not even be able to fly as capably as other Pegasi do."

You establish here that it is magic that gives pegasi the ability to fly. The show has shown countless times that this is not the case, though, and that it's instead muscle strength, as you would expect it.

The most profound evidence for this can still be found in "Hurricane Fluttershy" to this day, as we saw pegasi training and strengthening the muscles in their wings to make them stronger in order to create more wingpower for creating the tornado that should lift the rainwater up to Cloudsdale.

This doesn't change anything for the fact that Scootaloo can't fly, but you might wanna replace it with muscle weakness to align it with what we've seen in the show.

The current reason feels out of place.

"I didn't figure out what they were talking about," Scootaloo admitted, "until the Equestrian Games a few years ago. Diamond Tiara brought that memory back... and I understood."

It is an interesting approach, that Scootaloo never knew why she can't fly, and only realized it as Diamond Tiara brought back the memory on this day. But she heard the doctor saying that she might never fly as well as other pegasi, was this really not enough for her to figure out that something is wrong with her wings?

Considering that she stood right in front of the door and heard that sentence, this seems like an awful stretch of logic.


The idea is intriguing, but the second issue is a plothole you should definitely fill somehow. This is a glaring issue that cripples the otherwise promising idea, so you should find a solution for this.

The chapter would also profit from a more thorough proofreading, as there are typos and some mismatched words.

>>8179429 Alrighty, thanks for the input. :twilightsmile:

#15 · 6d, 9m ago · 1 · · Lack of Faith ·

I don't think Rainbow Dash's parents ever had the chance to met her friends and her pet TORTOISE.

#16 · 5d, 22h ago · 2 · · Lack of Faith ·

I've been waiting anxiously for a fic based off of "Parental Glideance", and you delivered fantastically! The contrasts of parents RD and Scoots have play out fairly well, though for some reason it just felt like I was flung into the information a little too quickly. That's moreso a nitpick if anything. And even though Scootaloo's parents seemed rather cruel, it was a realistic kind of cruelty; not enough to make me feel sympathy, but enough for the whole situation to not feel forced either, which is a great blend.

The theory on how Scootaloo's incapability of flight is also intriguing. Even though there are instances in the show indicating the wing power is based off of muscle rather than magic, I always thought that they went hand in hand (hoof in hoof, in this case, lol...I'll let myself out... :twilightblush:) so it was both interesting and believable to me.

I also like that you left this as "incomplete", indicating that you'll be continuing this...right? :pinkiehappy:

>>8183066 Yup, I plan on adding onto this story some more, due to other people's encouragement that I should. :twilightsmile:

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