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She is Loyalty. She will be the last one standing by her friends, in peril, torture and death.

This is what everyone believes. This is what Twilight and the other Spirits of Harmony, Rainbow's friends, believe. And they took it entirely for granted. After the Mare-do-well incident, Rainbow Dash's Loyalty began to falter. She still felt the terrible sorrow of being deserted by everypony, to be forgotten in the shadow of a greater hero.

Over time sorrow grew to anger. As the powerful bond of friendship crumbles as Rainbow begins to drift away, The others discover just how powerful the Element of Loyalty is, and how its absence might have caused the downfall of the greatest heroes Equestria has ever known.

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Comment posted by ShootingRainbowStar13 deleted Nov 1st, 2013

Something tells me that Twilight and the others are going to learn a real hard lesson in friendship.

I wonder who the first target is...

3424366 Oh, they'd better. Mare-Do-Well was the worst thing ever. Even some fans didn't like the episode at all.

Do you have this whole story planned out? Do you know exactly how it's going to go?

AAAAAHHHHHHH!!! I LOVE THIS! :pinkiehappy: :heart:

got any idea how often this will update?

Saddening. This sort of feels like how Rainbow became insane from nightmares, only with the pain of jealously that took her over, making her slowly become unloyal and possibly make her snap into thinking that she is good for anything, which she clearly is.javascript:smilie(':fluttercry:');



Yes, I do. And you would fall to your knees if you knew what I was planning. :rainbowdetermined2:

Try reading this chapter listening to 'End of Loyalty': http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hP28YlFaLBM

It sets the scene. :pinkiehappy:

OMG this is amazing. You sure like rainbow dash.


3428575 Try me! :derpytongue2: Black Kyurem doesn't care about what happens in the real series!

Awesome story! Really well written


Naw, jk. You decide wether the rest will be okay, its up to you. :derpytongue2:

3440555 anytime! You deserve it :scootangel:

Yes! To all of this! :heart::moustache:I like how you made her go through the motions of the canon ending. The question now is...:applejackunsure:
Will she become a hero :duck:
or a villain:flutterrage:

Hm... this is a premise that, so far, I've yet to see any difference in execution from the whole 'Rainbow does not forgive' plot. I mean, don't get me wrong, I look upon the actual episode with unfathomable, yet definable, rage, but... well, I hope to NOT see Rainbow Dash go villain. It's been done.


Oh hell no. I'd never turn my favorite character into a monster... like SOME fanfic writers have... involving factories and rainbows... :rainbowderp:

But she's not quite loyalty anymore either... you'll just have to wait to find out... and you won't have to wait much longer.... :rainbowkiss:


Okay then.

Hm... I might make a blog about Fix Fics and Mare Do Well. XD A venting blog, but still.

The moment the sun rose, 'Soul on Display' started to play. I am quite curious as to where this is going


I will be watching the next chapters.

3472950 sent 2 weeks 1 day ago


Yeah, I'm soo sorry for the long waits in between chapters. :twilightoops: I've got two stories and one faulty wi-fi, and it sucks. :trixieshiftleft: PLEEEASE be patient with me :raritydespair:, and even if you don't I won't blame you. :fluttershbad:

Amazing Story :pinkiehappy: guess who I am! :derpytongue2: monkeys can't wait for the next chapter :scootangel:


Hey there, Banana Split!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Glad to see you! I haven't been able to work on this chapter because I have two stories, one fautly wi-fi, and not enough time. I guess you'll have to wait a while...:applecry:

But if I'm feeling generous, I might give you sneak peeks...

Wub the story can't wait for next update

Yes, put up posters, and treat her like a criminal, i'm sure it won't backfire on you

Well that was an eventful chapter can't wait for the next keep up the good work please don't take to long with the next chapter that is if you wouldn't mind I really like this story

I love this

But I think 'the hunt' will backfire horribly

rainbow dash you have chosen well.
of course put up posters to make rainbow dash the bad guy.idiots.

Well...she did just foalnap Scootaloo. Even if Scootaloo is going along willingly, she and Rainbow are the only ones who know about that. To everyone else, it just looks like Rainbow swooped in and stole her away. That's not exactly the kind of thing you just write off.

i swear, it's like all of ponyville was born stupid. also, while i don't agree with her methods, i am in total agreement with rainbows way of thinking. cheers to the author! may he release the next chapter much sooner than he did this one!


Uf, this will be bad...

Good gravy, this is turning out bad faster than a Sonic Rainboom. Why haven't the Princesses stepped into this situation yet ?

Surely the likes of Princess Luna could understand WHERE Rainbow Dash is coming from, right ?

Either way this situation has gone from bad and is headed into worse.

I'm scared to see what fights are coming for the other Elements.

Please do keep up the good work.


Wow, thank you! And I will try really really hard not to mess up and spend a month doing nothing. :pinkiesmile:


I feel so incredibly loved!!! I'm soo happy!!:twilightblush::twilightblush::twilightblush:

And the author is a girl, BTW. A Rainbow Dash fan and a Sonic brony.:rainbowkiss::pinkiehappy:

Hey pretty ponies,

I just simply cannot belive the amount of veiws I have on this peice of work. I was so happy I cried a little!! :fluttercry:

I love to write, it's what lights up my day. I'll try my hardest to focus on it and speed up on my updates. Cross your hoovsies, ponies!!! I will succed!!!:yay:

3609076 huh, didn't know you were a girl. now i do, so it's all good! also, rainbow dash is best pony, and i can't wait for the next chapter of this incredible story.


Of course Rainbow Dash is best pony! :rainbowkiss:


She's the one who brought them together in the first place! Think about it: in an act of Loyalty for Fluttershy she broke the barrier. That day six ponies got their cutie marks. And we all know how important PRINCESS Twilight will end up. If it wasn't for Dash, Twilight would have never learnt about friendship, never defeated Nightmare Moon, never met her friends and fellow Spirits of Harmony... she would have never fulfilled her destiny. The show, My Little Pony Friendship is Magic, would not exist.

Rainbow Dash is best pony. I rest my case.

3610970 i realized that as soon as i got all that information. but my admiration for her started before then. the exact name of the episode escapes me, though.

LOVE YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Ever action has an equal reaction...
"You've left us, in flesh an' in spirit."
Funny... you left her when you did that stunt


If you like this fanfic, and you look like you like sonic, read my other fanfiction!

I do hope that other voice in Dash's head is Nightmare Moon. You can guess why.

when is this going to be updated? i really want to see where this goes!

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