You are what you love, not who loves you.
Rainbow Dash is the hero of the town. She has saved many ponies, and she is very, very proud! But what happens when...
Another hero emerges?
Dash soon learns that this new hero, "Mare Do Well" is really her friends, and this upsets her. Could they really have betrayed her like that?
I don't own the picture.
(based off of Mysterious Mare Do Well) Enjoy:)
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Just what we need... Another follow up story to the events of The Mysterious Mare-Do-well. One with an out-of-character Rainbow Dash, more angst than Radiohead's entire back catalogue, and an open ending because the author couldn't think of a way to conclude it. That episode certainly left plenty of bronies with an axe to grind... no wonder Merriweather Williams no longer writes for the show. She probably wishes she possessed a costume Like MDW too when she goes out... to avoid the hordes of people who would like a little word in her ear...
5404348 Um, excuse me? I had the ending all planned out, thank you very much. And I tried to keep her in character, and I worked hard. So if you're just going to ruin my day, so be it. I don't care. I worked hard, and that's all that matters.
5404354 Meh, just voicing my opinion. Doesn't sound like RD from the show I know..... Far too short-tempered and melancholy. Nice that you value my critique enough to almost let it 'ruin your day'. Remember... this comment section underneath isn't just for people to kiss your botty... It's also for readers to offer honest POVs about your story. And I've just had my two cents. And 'working hard' sometimes isn't enough..... If the raw materials aren't present in the first place. Next time, try using cement, instead of sand.....
5404367 Okay, fine, just next time, please try to be more polite.
5404370 Considering the fact I didn't insult you or swear, I don't think there was anything wrong with my tone. I felt it ended unsatisfactory, with NO closure and not even a real cliffhanger. If you truly did plan that ending, fine. I wouldn't have been happy with it... But, hey... you're the author. Your rules. See ya.
5404348 actually she is in character, it's the others who were out of character in the show. Rainbow is dead on in this. if the other girls were so concerned about her boasting they should have tried to talk to her first. what they pulled should be a last resort. Here it was the first thing they tried. She has the absolute right to feel betrayed, because she was. The only worse then a wounded enemy is a comrade betrayed. Why do you think civil wars are so bloody? They don't hold back.
The only problem with this story is that it ended where it did. I would have liked to have seen more from the fallout of this. Heck I bet Celestia would rip the others a new one for that.
5404605 I still disagree. I don't think RD is as petty as that... And she certainly wouldn't dwell on it as if it was some kind of life-changing event. Anyone who frets THAT much over what is essentially a friendship lesson needs to CHILL. Betrayal? Please get a grip. And Celestia I'm sure has better things to do than chastise Twilight & co for an innocent prank. Besides, one of the side effects from all that tomfoolery was a lot of pony's lives were saved.... And what's wrong with that?
5404697 then we are at an empass. RD does admittedly have an ego problem. But she is loyal to a fault thus the thing she despises even more then losing is betrayal. And while they meant it as a way to help her they did it the wrong way. That hurts her more then anything else. Remember Discord didn't cause her to be disloyal, he got her on divided loyalties.
well...
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I for one think this is a very good fic...
now...for the next chapter where the traitors lives crumble around them, when they fall into despair when they realize what they have done
keep up the good work
5405812 Thank you!
I haven't actually seen any follow-ups to the MMDW episode around here... I came here way after the episode aired though.
This story could have been done better it's true. Rainbow Dash could have been less upset and instead just stewed quietly letting the wound fester until it all blew up on her 20 long laborous chapters later. She could have not assumed that they would keep up the act forever, or they could correct her when they did. She could have spent some time in long contemplation later at the Ponyville dam where she nearly died in her quest for heroism. There could have been more elaboration and leading up to her self defeating thoughts that nobody likes some dumb Wonderbolts fangirl instead of her just magically coming up with them on the spot when the author needed an excuse for her to badmouth herself.
I wouldn't call it out of character though. And compared to some stories this one isn't all that angsty. The ending wraps up relatively neatly, doesn't leave any dangling plot holes, only broken dreams. And I doubt hoards of people swarm Merriweather Williams on a daily basis demanding to know how she can live with herself for producing such a horrible episode, and also the episode called Mysterious Mare Do Well. So... it's really not that bad.
"Why would you even do something that needs freaking FORGIVENESS?" That line made me cackle
Well done.
5461884 Thanks!
5419572 Thank you.
I really appreciate your feedback!
Glad I made you cackle
WELL
DONE.
This was truly amazing and I love it and I think everyone should read it and I love it and i think my friends would like it and I love it!!!
5547578 Thanks so much!
5404605 Have you read my fanfic "Sister Dash" per chance? It may have been born from my venting, but I really wanted to make Rainbow's friends suffer... and I did!
5655980 putting it in the read it later. I also did my own called Shadow of Loyalty
5656267 Of course! And I praised yours for making the ponies suffer for their atrocities! I may be a crazed nutzo to say it, but I love it when they suffer for their foolish consequences!
Yes! Yes! Make them suffer!
5404348 Ummm there really isn't that many of them I should know I think I have read them all.
Best aftermath story ever. The reactions from Rainbow were spot on. Truly a great job you've done here. Thanks for the great read.
Pretty good, but I still hold that there are just a few to many "RD hates the Mane 6 for MDW" stories. Then again, this is probably one of the best I've read in that genera. Well, aside from super mega evil fun times.
5656318 I'll be honest I agree. This seems like a more realistic ending to the show.
6081440 Well, well... You speak my language. How admirable.
6081585 I try. XD
On behalf of my hate for the Mare Do Well episode... Take some pinkies. ^_^
This glorious string of Pinkies is suitable for any occasion. ^_^
6081603 Yay!
6081609 ^_^
6039142 Thanks so much!
6042064 Thanks XD
5656318
6081440
Yesssss...
For more suffering, make a sequel!
Also,
it needs a bit more detail in the story or a sequel
clearly, this story needs a sequel cos it's amazing!
5549537
needs more chapters
Dude. This needs more story. This is not enough
Yeah, this actually is a more realistic ending to THAT episode. I mean, I wouldn't forgive them.
one shot
this needs a sequel or more chapters
Welp, I’m pretty sure equestria is doomed now.
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Too bad this wasn't extended. I felt dash forgave them too easily in the show
5404348
While I accept your argument you must also respect others opinions.
she has a point in that if you are doing something that needs forgiveness then it's the wrong thing to do in the first place.
Everypony in that moment after hearing what Rainbow Dash said and what the Mane 6 did to her: