Nightmares. Everypony has them. We all have those fears we never speak of, the ones that plague our minds. But when do such fears haunt us most? In our sleep. When our minds are open and free, they make us live what we fear. Our minds trap us with the fears we hold, hold us hostage until the waking of dawn. Few have the power to control their dreams and even then, they can still get lost in the dark.
A/N Each chapter will take us into the nightmare of a different pony, whose name will be the title of their chapter. You do not have to read these in any order. Changed my mind. Starting with chapter two, each chapter will include a mini-prologue before the dream/nightmare begins. I changed my mind again. Some chapters will have the mini-prologue, some will not. When this happens, it will be a slight connection between chapters and/or an introduction to the pony's nightmare/fear. But the nightmare will still begin after the title within the chapter. I will post them as I write them and write them as I think of ideas. Alt Uni tag because the Dream Land is not exactly the same as Equestria. Specific character tags are only for the ponies who are having the nightmares, not who is in them. The ones who are in but not centered around go under "other." More will be added as I write more.
It's a good concept, I look forward to the next one. In reference to mistakes, there is a clause that reads "The wold fled with Lightning". Simple spelling error, but if I'm going to be pedantic I would remind you that "Lightning" should not be capitalized.
Sorry my bad I, misunderstood that you were referring to the character Lightning
1842153 Heh, no problem. I added the second part of her name to avoid more confusion.
Anyway, I'm glad you liked it. I'm working on Celestia's right now, I should have it up within a week, maybe sooner.
Interesting concept. Look forward to more. My only criticism is that the font you chose is hard for me to read.
1842200 Wait, font? There are different fonts on this?!?! Wow! OK then, I will now go play around with that. You may have unleashed a monster. But the font will be different from now on, thanks for the feedback!
1842229 OK, I've been playing around with the fonts and apparently you can choose the font, regardless of if the story is yours or not. You just have to click the font thing at the top of the story and you get a drop-down menu from which you can choose the font. Same goes for the size and background colour. Hmm.
Who knew?
1842245 Lol don't go crazy now
1842250 Too late!!
I'm already crazy. I think I always have been.
(insert insane laughter)
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You might want to start running...
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"I'm.. gunna.. AHH!" 'runs away screaming' "Do keep up the good work"! shouts from a far away distance
1842461 "Aww, thanks! I will do my best!" I whisper from right next to you.
"Wait, how did you get here so fast?"
"I'm friends with Pinkie Pie. She has tough me well," I say with a wise nod. "You can run away for good now because I have to go. Ta ta for now!"
Getting lost in the dark can happen in more ways then one, sister. Hope you stay on your light.
Dark? Nightmares? Ponies?
You have my attention, Miss!
Good chapter!
Hey, you're not dead! Marvelous! More well-written words to read during the dull weekends!
Mistakes and letting you know? I'd say that I owe you something from your work in the comments of my stories. Here we have what I found (and it sure isn't a lot).
You're one "a" short there, at least I think so.
It seems that an extra pair of "ed" wanted to join your otherwise-perfect sentence.
I'd insert "any" before that "evidence" there, although it's not completely necessary. It just makes it sound a bit better.
Oh my, those little pranksters "i" and "l" seem to have switched places in the word "split" in your sentence. Better teach them a lesson, eh?
Well then, time to move towards the chapter-related stuff.
First off, it was, yet again, a good chapter and I must admit that it felt great to read it just after waking up. The emotions here struck me really well. It also had gore. And falling ponies. And rain and thunder and lightning bolts. Awesome!
A pattern? I have a few guesses, but I'm afraid that they are only good as guesses and not ready to be processed as suggestions or even answers.
Aaaaaand now I'm stuck with thinking about patterns.
Good job with the chapter, it's great to have you back and fuzziness
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I'll do more next time. I just really wanted to prove that I'm alive again.
Wow, I made a fair few mistakes...
Ah, well, that's what I get for posting it without editing it any more than what Word catches.
Anyway, it's good to hear from you again. I'm glad, as always, that you (and hopefully others) enjoyed this. I know that I enjoy falling fillies and rain and thunder and lightning, but that is not the pattern. The pattern is within this story only and should be gently nudging you, the reader, to who/what is causing this. Yes, there is a reason behind the nightmares. I'm just not saying what yet.
Up next is either Pinkie Pie or Fluttershy. I have ideas for both but sending Flutters back to Flight Camp sounds like fun!
Thanks again. I really enjoy having a friend who I can always count on for a smile.
MAY THE FUZZIENESS BE WITH YOU!
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Well, you're the only one who does that. I must say that you have found loads of more and bigger mistakes from my chapters.
Okay, now I'm filled with suspense. That might be a good sign.
Oh, the cruelty! 'Tis so overwhelming!
Me spreading smiles sounds really weird and creepy, but I'll take that as a compliment. Thanks, I'm happy to do whatever it is I can do to make someone I know feel good or something like that.
Awww... Poor Fluttershy...
This is a great story, I can really feel the pain of certain past experiences *coughcoughTEAMROCKETcoughcough* seeping through into this. Well done, my friend, and if I catch any mistakes reading it another time through, I'll be sure to let you know.
Damm that's harsh.
So this is what happens when the nightmare wins.