As winter looms, Fluttershy dreads the lonely months ahead. Surprisingly, she finds comfort in a small filly that shares her loneliness.
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DemonBrightSpirit
I dream of a man whose hopes never end.
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The only thing I see here is cuteness...however...what I don't get would be the whole "him" thing. Was that perhaps Angel?
So cute!
3524652 It was a Grey Squirrel that passed away, if I'm not mistaken. If I'm wrong, please correct me.
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mertio23 said:
This is correct.
3524800>>3524773 Oh, okay. Makes more sense.
Nice.
for you good sir.
A like, fave and
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*squee*
The feels, they hurt.... HNNGG
Well, this isn't too bad. Your characterization was decent, as was your content... though your writing could use a bit of improvement. I would suggest working on using less adverbs. rather than an adverb, think about how you could change the verb to make it more interesting! Same with adjectives and nouns. I'm afraid you didn't do anything else bad enough for me to make any more suggestions, except perhaps to work on imagery, but that comes with practice.
Rating:
You committed 0 of the 7 mortal sins of writing mlp fanfiction!
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The feels!!!
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I finished a review on this story! Click here if you wanna check it out, once again well done! I'm glad I followed you
This was a nice short fic. I really enjoyed it
There were a couple of parts that seemed a tad rushed, but it was a really good read.
Thank you for the read
I loved it. The feels.
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Well done. Very well done, and Fluttershy's explanation why everypony isn't immortal was one of, if not THE best explanations I've ever read. Do you mind if I quote this on my author's page:
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I'm quite flattered. Feel free to use it.
4841063 Thanks so much!
A nice little touching story. It is amazing how deep Fluttershy can get about certain things. Though I see her being far more accepting of death because of what she does. When one cares or lives with creatures of lesser lifespan, facing their inevitable death is just part of it.
Again, a cute little story.
I enjoyed this story. It showed how Fluttershy deals with death, and how she is so understanding. I also like how you hint at Scootaloo losing someone but never go out and say who. It was a nice touch.
There's a reason this fic is universally praised.
Hit me right at the emotions.
Them feels.. 5/5 mustaches
Also have a fav and- ooh 100th like.
I love how you caught a child's ego-centric perspective.