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Doctor Perseus


I'm just a guy who loves to write.

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In an alternate timeline, Twilight Sparkle never became an alicorn princess. Instead, Star-Swirl the Bearded's spell and the Elements of Harmony brought about the end of her life. Two months later, her friends and loved ones are still in mourning from her passing. But just because Twilight's dead it doesn't mean her friends don't see her anymore...

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Perfect ghost story! I love how it ended too, sad but hopeful.

i had a different idea of what this would be about when i first saw the summary i thought it would be about her ghost going around and killling her friends so they could spend eternity together but i was wrong i still liked it though

4146334 i remember a story like that! the princesses start receiving 'friendship letters' from twilight after she died, and they're all about how she's taking her friends to the other side so that they can spend eternity together. loved that story!

4146352 i dont know that story and ive never seen or read a story with that plot do you remember the name of it? i sure would like to read it

You should have published this for Halloween...it's perfect for that!

Very well done story!:twilightsmile:

Absolutely perfect

Comment posted by Apoc deleted Mar 28th, 2014

4146356 It's called Forever faithful
It's an awesome story and a must read in my books.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/17548/forever-faithful

Holy cr.... This was more than I expected... I give a thumbs up nice job enjoyed the read. :pinkiehappy:

:raritycry::raritydespair::pinkiesad2:
This is... beautiful in it's own way. Third story on this site to make me cry, and I've read a lot. Also, probably shouldn't have read this a 2 in the morning... WHAT WAS THAT KNOCKING!?!?! :pinkiecrazy:

Creepy, with a happy-ish ending, I liked it

What a great and sad story

I have never seen a ghost story with a happy ending. Bravo, good sir/madam.

good story, but ending is... blah.

T4

man that was depressing. Like, it's a really well done story, best I've read in months, but DAMN it bummed me out.

I liked that... I think you captured the emotions pretty well. :pinkiesmile:

What a well-written, interesting, creative, and terrifying story... :twilightoops::raritycry:

Damn, did not expect that ending after that beginning and middle.

Bravo! :heart:

Very Monkey's Paw. Much suspense. Great emotion.

I love it. :pinkiehappy:

Damn. Very well done grimdark story, didn't expect Celestia to be haunted too.

Really loved this, a really great story to read before you go to bed. Though it really was a tear-jerker for my sister.:fluttercry::raritycry::raritydespair::fluttershysad:

I love stories like this. It really pulls at your emotions. Great Work.

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

4146495 i read it now and i gotta say it was a good fic but i wish it had more chapters

Wow! I didn't even know you had a fimfic account!
I follow you on www.fanfiction.net and I'm glad to see you on here! :ajsmug:

Well, I'm gonna go cry in a corner now. Is it really that strange that cartoon ponies dying makes me really sad... not always, just when the writing is done well. Like here...

So I guess kudos are in order... Kudos and thumbs and also points(I have a slight surplus because of a shipping error so I'll pass the savings on to you with 1500 points)

I can feel it in my bones! Man, after reading that my whole body sort of shut down. Not really, just, moving was real sluggish for a moment. And that feeling in the eyes. Horror and gross at the image of It, and tears threatening to fall at the end. Great work, I say, great work. :pinkiehappy::fluttercry:

And now I'm getting the shivers. Always enjoyed dark stories wit Twilight as the "dark entity" or main victim best, and the thought of this one just sets me off. In a good, but crawly way. Thank you for writing this!

On a final note, the beginning seemed a bit odd, at least to me. Not quite sure what I'm picking up on, but when Rarity was struggling with It I didn't really get the feeling that "shit's going down", if that makes any sense. It was just, too calmly written I suppose... Personal opinion aside, this is a great read!

you hit my feels and rustled my jimmies at the same time

*Sniff*... a close friend of mine died on March 16th, 2014, and for a few days I thought I heard his voice in my head whenever I tried to sleep, but his voice was broken...
Brilliant story. I love every part of it. :pinkiesad2:

My feels... They hurt! :fluttercry:

I'm just going to fall over and cry.

Holy Shit...

What the hell was that?

That was....AWESOME!!!

Loved it, was a great story.

You my friend earn a mustache.
Here you go: :moustache:

Even when she's an an eldritch horror/undead/wight/wraith/banshee/whatever you wanna call it Twilight somehow manages to keep a tight schedule. I really enjoyed this story. Just the right amount of dark and a satisfying ending :yay:

Its been a while since Ive read something so heart wrenching... Thank you for that.

"A ghost that scares me might pay a visit to may little sister...I'll lock her door!" :facehoof:

I think I'm dying.

MY FEELS ARE EXPLODING! ARGHHRG

But in all seriousness, I loved it. It's tear provoking, even in a flipping cracker without tear glands like me.

*sniff* that was so beautiful that last part:fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::applecry::applecry:

4148421 Except she was late, like, thrice! :twilightoops:

"Your hoof on my shoulder. It's really cold,"

Ooh, this bit. I love this bit. No ghost story is complete without it - an oldie but a goodie. :pinkiesmile:

That... that ending :fluttercry:

This was so good I don't even know what to say!:fluttercry::raritycry:

Not gonna lie, this is one of the more well-developed horror fics I've seen on this sight. Nice touch of spookiness and chills along with a satisfactory, but still sad and morbid, ending. Nice job.

i look forward to reading this. wonder if this'll creep me out more than Forever Faithful?

Different...fun...interesting...creepy...sad...tragic...serious Pinkie...broken husk of a soul of Twilight...needless to say, I loved it and wish to see more from you. :twilightsmile:

Brilliant.

Absolutely brilliant.

I am still crying.

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