I had a perfectly decent life, until these ponies abducted me. Now this Luna lady is saying she's my birth mother.
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Synthetic Soul
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If this happened to me, I would react like this, I like your sense of realism.
Rushed as fuck.
Interesting premise though, I'll hold hope that it slows the feck down soon.
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A little rushed, but cool.
If this happen to me, this is how I will react: "Huh? Ok, cool." (Yes, I'm not really a normal person and I am being indifferent with a lot of things)
My reaction to everything: (Fluttershy voice) cool.
I agree fully with emerald blade. Plus nice story :)
Interesting premise, extremely rushed but all in all a nice start. I shall be watching from the shadows.... *fades away*
I hope she turns him back into a human. He's happiest that way (though he won't be for a long time, given she just killed off all memory of him in that world
).
Exactly how I would react unless actually no I would probably overreact I FRICKIN love my mom and dad
i love it this is great!
4307466 If it were to happen to me I would likely think im insane start sprouting gibberish and going crazy
4310711 And my point still stand because for me...I will just go with the flow of the river...
Is this a parody? If so it seems too serious, if not then the OC is way too generic.
Seems good to me, but is a little (ok maybe more than a little) rushed. Keep going please.
cool story dude
I like it
he should be turned human again as a way of getting him to trust his mother
Well I'm hooked. Must Read Next Chapter!
I like this.
Good start. Hope to see more in the near future.
This is a great start!
Even if a bit rushed...
But the point here is that he was kidnapped from his family by some freaks(from his POV) or monsters, they turned him into one and now they think that he will just accept them. I really like how this can develop into great Dark and Sad drama! The way the Luna will suffer for her stupidity and how she will never be forgiven for stealing someones life, the pain and anguish that she will go through. how she will try to love him and will receive only hatred in return. Beautiful idea!
I really hope you won't go for some 'Redemption' crap and Tristan Sharp will remain Tristan Sharp, will leave and will live as far from Canterlot as possible and will never forgive or forget who ruined his life and who he really is. No forgiveness or redemption for the wench who ruined his life. It will make an awesome story with Tristan always refusing to even speak with the monsters that stole him from his real family and home. Because family is not who you're related by blood but who raised and loved you, and Luna is just one of the monster that stole his family from him. Hell, he could even try and search for Discord so the Spirit could send him back to his real home.
Brilliant start!
So...he magically figured out how to use his legs in like ten seconds?
What next, flying away from Canterlot? Not trying to sound like a d%#$. But, when you live thirteen years of your life on two feet, you don't suddenly become a four legged Usain Bolt in the span of ten seconds.
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I probably wouldn't have insisted right away to simply be sent back. Rather I'd want to be able to talk with my family about it. After that, I'd probably react the same too.
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A valid point, but seeing as how supposedly he was born as a pony the magic likely gave him some basic instinctive control of his motor functions. The whole human turned pony thing can go both ways on that sometimes. Since it varies from story to story I've learned to just role with the choice unless there's a deliberately stated fact that contradicts the actions of the characters.
Yrah I agree with the general concensus that this is SUPER rushed, but it's a really interesting premise for sure. I assume its going to be pretty grimdark or you'd have some unbelievably unrealistic reactions going on here. To be fair its not something people deal with on a regular basis but if you found out someone or something erased you from existence I imagine you'd never forgive them. Regardless, looking forward to more.
Please contuine with this lovley work of art.
this reminds my of
Never Judge A Bug By Her Cover
Interesting start it a little rushed but it have the promise to be a excellent story.
hope he doesn't take a like to them so quickly down the road,
hope discord doesn't do his mind crap on him.
Well, several thing will make me happy:
1) Tristan never accepting the name Midnight.
2) Never forgiving Luna, hating her with passion and wishing her death.
3) Never becoming friends with any of the Ponies, and outrightly hating them.
4) Finding his way back home, to his real home in human world.(I know this one won't probably happen, but still...)
4356066 I agree with you.
I'm watching you Discord you try any of your mind crap and you'll have a fist full of glove in your face!
I really hope this kid finds a way home and gives Luna what she deserves.
You also should get an editor.
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Number one I agree with, as well as the idea of either turning himself back into a human or being turned back into a human by Luna or Celestia. 2 and 3, not so much (I disagree with the idea of never forgiving people - I know, most radical thing I've ever said, plz get over it).
Oh, did I mention his being turned back into a human?
4356256 I wasn't very specific about friends part. I was talking about Celestia, Luna, Candace and M6.
They deserve to be hated.
4356172 Thank you!
one flaw... luna couldn't have been prego since she was nightmare moon who didn't care about anypony since nopony liked and appreciated her night. that and she was evil at the time
Although it may seem rushed, if you're a person of adventure, and action you write that way, if you are a person of creativity, sorrow, and logic like I, you try to make things detailed, and seem natural.
I love the story, the whole message got to me, I shall be reading the next chapter, and keep up the good work!
~Flow
It's certainly an..... Interesting story. I think I'll keep reading before I pass a more decisive verdict on it.
4356354 I once read a story where she gave birth to trixie on the moon, I can believe this
Hmm, a word of advice.
These chapters are short. But if you update them regularly then you're more likely to attract a greater crowd.
It takes me all of about 45 minutes to write a 1000-2000 worded chapter, though it may be different for you
All in all though, still a bit rushed. But I'll stay for the concept
So Luna's a monster just because she wants her only son back? May I remind you that she also lost Midnight's father before he was born? Sure, I agree that family doesn't really matter by who you're related to, but by who you love and who you feel loved by.
Besides, if anyone's a monster in this story, it's Discord!!!!! He took Luna's only child away from her, and you people think Luna's a bigger monster because she brought her son back home (his real home)? I also believe that Discord may be responsible for how Midnight reacted, he may have altered how his mind would develop when he sent him to the human world. Sure it may be the most realistic response, but this is Discord I'm talking about remember!
I believe this story could develop into a nice fanfic about a mother/son relationship and later forgiveness. If you people want to see this story be mainly about hatred and unforgiveness, then shame on all of you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
4357889 He was a baby back then and grew to love his human family. Just wondering have you ever read No I am NOT a Brony Get Me Outta Equestria? In that story (spoiler alert) TD the main character was told he could never come back home, imagine being in both TD's and Tristan's shoes.
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Alright, well think about this, and really think about both options. Would his life have been better if Luna didn't bring him back to Equestria, or would it have been better if Discord didn't send him to the human world in the first place? Now just think about that for a while.
4360600 It would be better for Tristan the first way because he could be with the human family, it would have been better for Luna though if Discord never brought him to the human world. Still what Luna did was still monstrous and wrong, just like when Twilight erased Dashie's memories or in other words lobotomization.
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You did pay attention to both choices I said, right? I meant better for Midnight, not better for both him and Luna. What I meant is in what way his life would have been better. Would his life have been better if he grew up in Equestria with Luna, or would he have been better growing up in the human world?
And enough of calling Luna a monster!!!!!!!! As I said before, I believe Discord is the real monster in this story!!!!! He was the one who took Midnight away from Luna in the first place!!!!!!!! If it wasn't for him, Luna would have still had her son!!!!!!!!! WHAT DISCORD DID IN THE FIRST PLACE IS MORE MONSTROUS THAN ANYTHING LUNA EVER DID!!!!! HE SEPARATED A MOTHER FROM HER ONLY CHILD!!!!!!!! WHAT IS MORE MONSTROUS THAN THAT!!!!!??????
BTW, SINCE WHEN DID TWILIGHT ERASE RAINBOW'S MEMORIES!!!????
4360946 hey I'm not saying she's a monster I am saying she made a terrible decision and to answer your final question check the story My Little Dashie
I like it but is a little to short
Seems very rushed.
okay firstly I am really interested to see where this goes.
secondly the writing in the second chapter is much better then the first (keep refining it, you're doing brilliantly)
and thirdly, if it's possible I would recommend a flashback sequence or the character thinking about his past. rounding off the character and showing what he was before would make a much more powerful emotional impact (friends, crushes, likes and dislikes). don't just let him be a blank slate, build what he is.
this has great potential and you can definitely turn this into featured box material.