"Uh, hi?"
Well...this is new.
Standing before me was something I was not prepared to see. It stopped me dead in my tracks. I was staring face to face with a bipedal, fat, purple lizard with green frills. He was the same height as me, and was carrying a brown paper bag full of groceries.
"Whoa, just what in the hell are YOU supposed to be?" I asked.
"Excuse me?" replied the creature.
"What are you?" I repeated.
"Uh, I'm a dragon," replied the lizard.
"Whoa, that's so cool! I've never seen a real dragon before!" The dragon took on a look of pride.
"He, yeah, I guess I am pretty cool," he replied.
"Hey, hey say; 'I will kill the dovakiin'!"
"I will what the what?"
"Oh, never mind. Well, I'll see you later," I said as I started to walk out the door. The dragon put a hand (or claw) to my chest, and held me back.
"Whoa, whoa, not so fast! You broke into my home, and you ransacked the library! You know, I have to clean that up. And, and is that Discord? Why is he stone again?"
"Uh...you know, we could sit here and listen to my boring explanations, but that would be a waste of time, so, I'm leaving." I tried to leave again, but he stopped me yet again.
"Not gonna happen, you're in big trouble!"
"Well, OK, I guess that's fair-OH MY GOD, THAT IS THAT!" I screamed while pointing my right hoof behind the dragon.
"Huh, what?" he said as he turned around to look at my distraction. Carefully, and quickly, I used my two front hooves to grab a nearby vase. I reared back on my hind legs, and brought the vase strait down on the dragons head. The vase shattered, and the dragon went down with an 'oomf'. I looked around to make sure no one saw. Then, I quickly dragged the dragon inside and shut the door. I moved him towards the Discord statue, and then checked to see if he was breathing. Don't worry, he was. After that, I walked to the door and opened it. I shut it behind me, and then focused on my horn, and cast the clairvoyance spell. A blue misty trail appeared in front of me, and ran strait ahead. The book said only the caster would be able to see the trail, which means it won't attract any unwanted attention. I then proceeded to follow the trail.
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About an hour later, the elements of harmony had teleported home, and Celestia had returned to her royal duties. However, Princess Luna was busy pacing in circles, and running a groove into the floor of her room.
"Oh, where are they? They should have been here by now," said Luna. AS she paced, her mind was trying to figure our what could be keeping Discord from bringing her son back. "What could be keeping them?" Just then, there was a knocking at her door. "Come in," she said. Her door opened, and in walked her sister Celestia.
"Luna, I have news about Midnight," said Celestia. Luna gasped and rushed towards her sister.
"Oh, that is wonderful!" cried Luna.
"Well, just note that I didn't say it was good news," replied Celestia. Luna stepped back, a look of worry on her face.
"Well, I received a letter from Twilight. Apparently, Midnight was last seen in Ponyville."
"And the bad news?"
"Well, apparently, he broke into Twilights home, ransacked her library, turned Discord into stone, and knocked Spike unconscious." Luna stood there in shock for about ten seconds before she responded.
"He did what!" she exclaimed.
"I'm not sure what caused him to do such things, but I assume it has somthing to do with finding a way home."
"Come sister, we must find him before he gets into more trouble," said Luna as she rushed out the door, followed by her sister.
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My search for the Alicorn Amulet brought me to the edge of a creepy looking forest. I was hesitant to enter, but the clairvoyance spell says the Amulet is in the forest. And I need that Amulet if I want to get home. So, without any other option, I went inside.
If the forest was creepy from the outside, Imagine how terrifying it was on the inside! All the trees had scary faces on them. And boy was it dark in here. And the wolf howls in the distance scared the crap out of me! But despite these things, I pushed on. Eventually, I came to a tribalistic hut that was carved into a tree. It looked like a witchdoctors hut, it had tribal masks lying around, and decorations made with bone hung form the roof.
"So, the Amulet is in there," I said to myself. What if someones in there? The owner of the hut must know what they have in there. I need a plan.
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Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy flew high above the streets of Ponyville, in their search for Lunas missing son. Pinkie, Rarity and Applejack searched on the ground below. Little did they know that the colt they were searching for was no longer in Ponyville. Meanwhile, Twilight and Spike were waiting in the front of the library with the statue of Discord sitting next to them. Twilight looked to the sky to see the royal chariot arriving, with Luna and Celestia in tow. The chariot touched down near the library, and Luna and Celestia walked off, and went over to Twilight.
"Princess's, I'm glad you're here!" Twilight ran over, and hugged Celestia. When there embrace finished, Twilight hugged Luna as well.
"Twilight, Spike, I must apologize for what my son did to you and your library. I take full responsibility for what happened," said Luna.
"Oh, it's OK Princess. Isn't that right Spike?" asked Twilight.
"Are you kidding? That little bastard hit me on the head! And who do you think has to clean up all those books!" yelled Spike.
"SPIKE!" yelled Twilight, as she hit Spike upside the head. "Go clean the library!" Spike walked towards the library, while muttering something about being a slave. When he was gone, Twilight turned to face Luna.
"I'm sorry about that Princess," said Twilight.
"Um, i-it's alright Twilight. I understand Spikes frustration, and I promise to pay for your broken window," said Luna.
"Well thank you princess," replied Twilight.
"Well now that that is out of the way, I suggest that we begin our search for Midnight," said Celestia.
"Right," said Twilight. And with that, they set out on their search for the missing colt.
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Luckily for me, no one was in the hut. It's as if some lazy guy controlling events was simplifying my situation in an attempt to avoid thinking about complex situations! Well, I found what I was looking for. It was a little black box on a shelf above what appeared to be a bed. I hopped up onto the bed, and grabbed the box. I set it down on the floor, and opened it. Inside was the Amulet. It had a red gem in the center. There where two feathered wings and a pony head surrounding the gem.
"Yes! Mom, Dad, I'm coming!" I reached into the box and grabbed the necklace. As soon as I put it on, I could feel it's power. I decided to test it. I focused on levitating this black cauldron. It glowed grey, and levitated a few feet into the air. I let it drop back down. Now that I knew the amulet worked, it was time for me to leave.
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Celestia and Luna found themselves on the outskirts of town, by the edge of the Everfree forest.
"We've searched the whole town, and still we cannot find Midnight! Where is he!" said Luna. Suddenly, Celestia saw something coming out of the forest.
"Sister, Look!" said Celestia as she pointed towards the forest. The two turned to see none other than Midnight trotting out of the forest.
"Midnight!" exclaimed Luna as she ran towards her son, but stopped when she saw what was around his neck.
"Oh, hello Luna," said Midnight coldly.
"Midnight! What is that around your neck?" asked Luna. Celestia trotted next to her, and gasped when she saw the Amulet around Midnights neck.
"My name is Tristan! And this is the Alicorn Amulet, or as I like to call it, my way home," said Midnight.
"You don't understand! The Alicorn Amulet will corrupt your mind!" said Luna.
"Yeah right. You just want to stop me from going home! But with this Amulet, I will have the power to send myself back to the human world, and restore my parents memory!"
"She speaks the truth," said Celestia. "The Alicorn Amulet grants an increase in power, but it corrupts the users mind!"
"I don't care!" shouted Midnight. "I'm going home, and if you won't send me back, then I'll get there myself!"
"Please, take off that Amulet, and come back to the castle! We can work this out!" cried Luna.
"Not a chance!" yelled Midnight. "Now tell me the spells to get home, and fix my parents memory!"
"I'm sorry, but I cannot do that," said Luna.
"Then you leave me no choice," said Midnight. "If you won't tell me how to get home, then I'll have to force you to tell me!"
"W-what?" said Luna. Midnights eyes glowed red, as he lowered his head, and shot a blast of magic towards the two princesses. And with that, the battle between the royal family began.
GO MIDNIGHT!
RIP
Celestia and Luna
Both died from being assholes
*Ahem*
YYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH!!!!!!
*Wheeze* I've been having to do that a lot lately...
I just know somepony is gonna be sent to the moon.
Awww yeaaah Alicorn battle begin !!
I love it~
*squee*
Please keep going on!
~Flow
A spell to get home & fix his parents' memory? Why would either have any effect?
Unless of course he meant a spell to travel back to the world he had been living in & restore the memories of him that the Humans who raised him had, in which case he should have said so.
He also should have thrown in a request for a spell to change his natural form to a Human one, but I get that he's not really thinking clearly even before he put amulet on.
Awesome chapter! I really hope Tristan will kick their asses!
No forgiveness for wenches!
4517012 You and me both. Let's root for Tristan! Tristan Tristan Tristan
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That is all that needs to be said.
4516792 It's not gonna be Tristan on my watch! I am joining the battle!
DAYUMN!!! Dis is gettin intense!!
Damn this getting good
4# ooooo
So, the battle royale begins......
Let see how its go i hope Tristan learn and love his new family right?
Oh snap!
[OH MY GOD, THAT IS THAT!] Tristan, I think you meant what is that.
Awesomeness to you on the new chapter. Can't wait to read the up-coming alicorn battle!
Quick question; Why didn't they turn Discord back to normal? I would think that the Elements of Harmony would easily be able to turn him back.
I can do art yes
Luna has to be the worst mother... EVER! I hope Tristan teaches them a lesson like a badass and gets back home
Okay, first of. All, tristan you're an idiot.
Second, luna, celestia, twilight, you're all idiots. Three of you together could have freed discord from his stone prison, since only one alicorn out him in it, yet you just left him outside twilight's house
4518071 Or is it the royale battle?
Anyways, nice chapter. I look forward to the next.
Well, it's pretty obvious what'll happen, Tristan will win. Why? Because Luna won't attack her own son and I have a feeling that that spell is going to hit Celestia knock her out. So, yeah. GG Luna and Celestia, but Tristan has won this.
He's probably going to lose. However, I hope he refuses to give up his name, his humanity, and his chance to go home.
4518324 I am not sure if that will ever happen, first of all, it was stated in the first chapter he didn't care about Luna being his "original mother" and has shown no signs of working with her or any other ponies. It's even in the title I am NOT a Pony. He would not and will not care about Luna, Celestia, Cadence or anypony else. While it uses the plot device (shutter) of Magic Duel, I don't think it'll have the same ending.
4520327 I was actually referring to the book Battle Royale, I wasn't implying the word royal.
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Thank you very much.
4521360 I figured as much, but I felt it was just too good an opportunity to pass up for the pun.
4521063 Yeah i know but normally story end that way
4519076 their gonna do that later maybe
4519927 cool
4522006 Fortunately, not all stories end so. I think that if you are looking for a sugary end you picked the wrong story .
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shill man is just a story
4521544 Understandable
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4522634 agreed
Oookkaayyy... read it, now see what is wrong with this story. I think you guys already know about the pacing, it's already mentioned. But that is not the worst part. The worst part is the story itself.
The kid chills out and is changing his clothes, then he is suddenly pulled into a fantastical universe that his little sister would love, he is suddenly a horse, he is the long-lost son of the princess, so his whole life is a lie, and then it turns out the horses have destroyed his entire existence and nobody remembers him. What the alicorns did here is complete insanity and even worse than what Discord did. They didn't let him go through a transition, it just sort of -BOOM!- happened. And then we haven't included the fact that he is now clinically immortal and probably will live for thousands of years, he is only not aware of this.
He should not only be going nuts, he should collapse. If he's not getting post-traumatic stress from this, I don't know what will. The fact that he's looking for a way to resolve things while destroying everything in his path is very logical.
And the fact that his entire existence is gone doesn't really matter for the audience. He's a blank slate and I really don't see anything interesting about him. And him referencing pop culture doesn't give him a personality. Give us some reason to care about him, man!
And this story also doesn't follow the FIM-lore very well, we are way past that. He suddenly learns magic and quite advanced too. That doesn't really happen with colts/fillies in the series, now does it? And also, since Discord was the one who did it, and since he is remorseful, why can't he perform the needed spells? You didn't need 4 alicorns for this!
And in what timeframe is this? It is stated that Twilight's introduction would lead to the spells being performed, but since 12 years before that Discord was still imprisoned that would be completely impossible. Or do we have a my-little-dashie-timeframe here, where time passes slowly in Equestria than it does on Earth? If so, then the narrative has to go into this, with detail and exposition.
So, my recommendation is; rewrite it, at a slower pace, and provide more context for our main hero and the side characters.
4584283 You're my hero.....You get a follow just for this!
the was an awesome chapter true the amulet will corrupt his mind but not by much my reason his mind is already corrupted by his trauma of being forced to come to Equestria so I am actually on his side on this one I hope he can get home as it is obvious he hates his new predicament
Pointing out youre problems dosent make the go away!
Luckily for me, no one was in the hut. It's as if some lazy guy controlling events was simplifying my situation in an attempt to avoid thinking about complex situations!
Dis gunna good
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I'd so make cover art... If I could draw even slightly better than something crudely made from a few lines and dots.
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Did no one notice the Skyrim refrence? Or am I the first one to Point it out? It's: "i will kill the dovakiin" BTW, i was thinking about an animation for this storie, buuuuuuut my Brain Said no. DO you even want an animation? Prooooobably not. Sorry for this stupid idea.
I will to into the shame position
WHAT IS THAT!"
And with that, the battle between the royal family began.
It begins
this guy is digging a grave that just keeps getting bigger. swears in public, turns discord to stone, knocks out spike, ransacks the library, i could go on.
and what about discord?
There is a 'h' in dovahkiin.
PFFFT
I have read this far and I am frustrated. There is no pacing, spelling errors galore, and the main character is an entitled, selfish, rude little sh!t who thinks he can do whatever he wants to anybody and will suffer no repercussions for it.