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Night--Mist


Son of Princess Luna. A Bat Pony Alicorn who's small for his age.

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An ordinary man is working as simple movie theater ticket master, when suddenly he is stripped away from his life on Earth. Little did he know, he has a different destiny that awaits him, in a land he seems to have never heard of before, nor can he remember anything before he was, well, born into the magical world of Equestria."

Months after Princess Twilight Sparkle's coronation, Princess Luna has learned to speak normal and more modern and has found a special somepony, only to have him taken from her by an unforeseen accident. But he left part of himself behind as Luna gives birth to an alicorn colt a few months after his death and Twilight's Coronation. Follow her son, Moon Dust's immortal life from the time he is but a little foal, whom everypony adores, to a rambunctious troublemaker in his kid years, and then to a brave strong alicorn stallion, defending his subjects, and the mare he loves, against the forces of evil that threaten them as a grown up.

What new adventures await him as he is taught the values of friendship? What will he learn from his experiences? And what does this reoccurring dream of some sort of machine running into him mean once he is older? Does his mom and Aunt Celestia possibly know? Only one way to find out. Please read and review. This story is told from my OC character's point of view, who is the main character, but some parts may switch to other ponies' points of view for certain scenes.

(For Chapters that focus on his days as a baby foal, and for some other chapters afterwards: "CUTENESS WARNING! Attention: Do not read if you have a weak heart.")

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 172 )

Hmmm. This story is interesting.

You got my curiosity.
Now you got my interest.
And also a like and a fav.:twilightsmile:

Very interesting indeed, but I hope, Night Shimmers' human live will matter at some point. In your description you say, that he loses his memory of everything before his "birth", so I kinda fear, you've done that just because you can and that nothing of this will play a part in the whole of the story.
Anyway, I'll stay tuned and hope for a good story. Cheers.

It does seem from the description and this chapter that his human life doesn't matter. If it doesn't really hold any weight in the story I would suggest re-writing the start to be like the start of Fallout 3, which you pretty much already have.

Also a like and favourite I like where this is going.

So, let me level with you.
Electrical engineering, pretty smart.
Genarl relativity, pretty bucking smart.
The set up and premise of this story . . .BUCKING GENIUS!!!!!

mabey, he could remember his Human life through dreams or random flashbacks? I hope his humanity has a place later in the story.

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A shout out to BlackKenji, Ocbaker, and lockpick, I was planning on having his past life matter in very later chapters. I guess I forgot to add that into the summary. Sorry :derpytongue2::facehoof::twilightblush: that's my bad. I added it in though, thanks for pointing that out.:twilightsmile:

Yesh, this one... It's good. And I'm pretty sure it's going to be awesome! :pinkiehappy:

Here, take my like! Ohh, and also my fave!

His human perspective and his later pony/new born one are too disconnected - it's like one story was cut in half and posted onto another.

If your aim is to have his thought processes transition due to his situation, it needs to be redone, methinks.

Honestly, though? Mixing in his new born perspective with good old fashioned human snark would make this fucking hilarious.

(Like him giving Shining Armour a deadpan look, or something. Something to show greater intelligence).

Cadence's history was revealed and expanded upon in a book - she was a pegasus who did something, became an alicorn, and then was adopted by Celestia.

Check the MLP wiki for more information.

» Mike

This story is a bit different, but in a good way. I think that it shows much promise, and the writing looks to be of good quality. I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes.

this story has drawn yet another fav from me. I like where this is going but the writing style is very proper. It makes the story feel a little stiff. I suggest you add a few more conjunctions, but other than that love the story so far. Can't wait for the next chapter :pinkiehappy:

I absolutely :heart: this story,it is so heartwming to see Luna as a mother!:raritystarry:I liked what happened with Night Shimmer's magic at the end, but did it have to happen to Shining Armor? :facehoof::twilightoops::twilightblush::twilightangry2::raritycry::rainbowwild::pinkiesick::rainbowhuh::flutterrage::fluttershysad::fluttershyouch::unsuresweetie::duck:I give you a Trollestia and 9 out of 10 Moustashes.:trollestia::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Better you write a warning like:

CUTENESS WARNING!!!

Attention: Don't read with a weak :heart:

This story has great potential. You have my interest and I'm looking forward to the rest :twilightsmile:

At this story the big prospects. However now in it there is nothing especially interesting. The basic part is given how the newborn perceives world around, sucks a boob and spoils in a diaper. In the course of perusal my interest was raised only by reasonings of Luna on forthcoming difficulties and destiny of her son.

there is so much cuteness here, I d'awwwed a lot

OHHHHHH IT'S ADORBLE... my hart skiped a beat.

Aw it's so adorable:heart:!

More please!

Aw, cuteness level skyrocketing.

So.. Much.. Cuteness.

I wonder who is the father?

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It will come. I don't have a lot of time right now, but it will be up soon, patience my little pony.:twilightsmile:

i'm loving night shimmer way more than i thought i would...I LOOOOOVE IT!!!!!:pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss::heart:

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Right now I have a really busy schedule, and it gobbles up my time that I get no time to update, once things settle down a bit I'll put up the next chapter, I Pinkie Promise. :twilightsmile:

JBL

Can't........handle..... the.... cuteness!

JBL

Heh, where's Uncle Spike?

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Oh, snap dragon I almost forgot. :facehoof: I'll be sure to put him in the next chapter. Thanks for the reminder.:twilightblush:

JBL

2720782 Hahahahaha Spike is always forgotten and left behind! :rainbowlaugh: I feel sorry for him.

Well this is interesting!

"let's see where it goes, huh?"

Did you make another Chapter? I see one by Feed, called "The Big Party". But if I click on it, it requires a Password.:applejackunsure:

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It's not finished yet, I started on it but work has me busy, so I haven't had much time to update the chapter. It'll be up soon but be patient. I can only do so much with the little time I get these days.

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I couldnt say it better. :pinkiehappy:

Blueblood u bitch, I love to see him in the dungeon.

Odd. I wasn't notified of the update until I went through my ENTIRE favourites list.

what i wouldn't give to throw blue blood into a dungeon myself:ajbemused:

This story has given me an idea for a story to write.

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