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She's just the dirty-by-trade tomboy.


"There's that face looking back." She doesn't feel like it's hers. She never has. Maybe there's something to be done about that.

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Sweetie knew she would often gaze at her own appearance, whether that be through a mirror or a photo.

If I looked like Sweetie Belle, then so would I. :unsuresweetie:

Interesting, I like it. Like and Fav.

combing her teeth and brushing her teeth…

Fairly sure the second one should be hair for the phrasing to work

Ennyhoo, after reading, I'm more confused than sated. Sweetie wants a change, which Rarity disagrees with... Oh, nevermind, I got it. It took me writing it down to understand the dilemma.

Not quite sure what the point of that was, but an interesting ride.

short, nice and could be made into a bigger thing

I like it 100% sure fav


Hnngh, my trans feels.

This is lovely. :heart:

Hm. This was rather deep for such a short piece. I've been reading a bunch of sorta fluffy, happy-go-lucky stories, and I really appreciate something like this. Keep up the good work

Really liked the emotions in this, even though it was short. Plus, already hit popular stories list, I see good things for this.
Thinking of doing any more little insights like this? You're really good at them :twilightsmile:

...Well fuck you Rarity. :unsuresweetie:

The beginning of realizing issues with gender identity? Sweetie Belle's confusion works (sure, some people look at themselves and just know "I'm not supposed to be [gender]", but a lot only come to the answer after a lot of difficulty. Can't say I much like Rarity here, but without actually seeing the conversation I don't want to prematurely judge (at least Rarity acknowledged that it might actually be important to Sweetie Belle, which is something).

It's not often I want to see more of a fic, but I definitely want to see more of this.
Should you write more is the real question, but I'm happy either way. Excellent job sir / madam.

Good job! This is generally how trans people first realize there is something wrong. I remember I figured it out in 5th grade. Then promptly buried for like 19 years so my parents wouldn't murder me with a shovel. Fortunately... I'm pretty sure that pony society is accepting of trans ponies and probably just has a spell to bamph somepony into whatever gender. After all... there is a freaking polymorph Breezies (communal) spell in existence.

Yes I know this is an Equestria Girls fic, but the magic portal is a freaking statue in front of the school and is now perma opened. I'm pretty sure it's just a revolving door for tourists now...

Missing a set of end quotation marks. To keep you on your toes, I won't say where.

Rather lovely. Sadly familiar.

5658696 I don't get where people are getting the gender thing from either. What I got from it is that Rarity is kinda living her life through Sweetie, and as such, Sweetie must comply to her sister's 'requests'

Either Sweetie has gender identity problems, or the mirror is a 'portal'to an R63 universe that influences her world, and vice versa.
I'm going for the former.

Sequel please :twilightsmile:

PLOT TWIST! Sweetie doesn't recognize her face because it's a changling looking back at her. :pinkiegasp:

I rather enjoyed this. Short, sweet, and to the point. I like that. You got yourself another thumbs up! :pinkiehappy:

I can't say I know those feelings, but good on all of you that do.

I can say though that this was a good short story. :twilightsmile:

I feel like the author actually left it like that so people could take it how they wanted. Rarity just being controlling, forcing Sweetie to be ladylike when she doesn't want to be. Sweetie just feeling like switching her look up for once. Or Sweetie struggling with gender identity and all that. But since it's in the LGBT group, I'd assume it's the last one.

Not the author, actually.

5659989 5659955 It was actually placed there with my permission. :twilightsmile:

5660035 As Accursed said, I left it open for interpretation.
Yes, yes it is.

5660094 Oh no, I'm actually serious. It's not a coincidence that so many people saw it as a gender issue story. :rainbowderp:

5660134 No worries! Just misunderstood what you were saying. :pinkiesmile:

"I should look more like a horse." :pinkiecrazy:

Yeah, I know.

Okay I read this. And I admit that the meaning behind it went completely over my head. I thought that it was going to be something else entirely other than gender identity disorder; something out of creepypasta works.

Still, it's an interesting idea. And it's a nice change to see a girl identifying as a boy rather than the other way around.

Huh. Subtle, but well done. And perhaps the worst possible sister for this sort of epiphany. I quite liked it.

Soooo.... Is this just going to stay a one shot?

5663536 Unless I get more inspiration, yes.

5664306 I walked right into that... :facehoof:

Well a good book is the best thing for clearing out writer's block.:raritywink:

Now, I'd primarily say this is a gender identity story, but there could be a hint of species dysphoria in here? I'm only throwing that in there because it reminds me of what I experienced when I realised that I didn't identify as human, but hey-ho!

Well I thought this was a Sweetie Bot story and she was questioning whether or not she was real, as such I think you did a pretty poor job of getting the message across so I'm giving this a dislike.

5666480 Um, it's not a sweetie bot story. Not at all.

I know. What I meant is that a lot of people didn't 'get' the story; some thought that Sweetie was just trying to change her hair style, others thought that she was questioning her gender, still others thought she was rebelling against her sister's influence, while I thought she was questioning her life and existence (Which made me think it was Sweetie Bot wondering if she's alive or not.)

My point being that the message of the story is not clear.

5666901 Oh, I see what you mean. That vagueness was completely intentional. When I was writing it, I worded it so people could relate to it differently and have their own interpretations. Sometimes a message is best left for the reader to take for themselves.

Nice, though to be honest, Sweetie Belle wasn't the best choice for this role. It's pretty obvious she's satisfied with being a mare/girl. Apple Bloom could've worked better, though in my humble opinion Scootaloo is definitely more likely than the both of them.

5666954 What made you decide to do that? ...Although to be fair I wasn't confused.

5678900 It's just a literary thing to do. There's a few reasons like allowing the reader to relate in their own way or giving the story a new range of meanings. Vague messages are actually quite common in literature.

I'm not usually one for sequel-begging, but... Okay, I'm totally sequel-begging.
I don't want some ginormous epic with a hollywood happy ending where everything's swell (which isn't to say that would be bad either), I just want exploration.
Maybe something from Rarity's perspective, showing her confusion at Sweetie's "strange behavior". Maybe something about Sweetie going through his day, and confiding in his friends.

5681910 A few people have asked about a sequel. I'm not against a sequel, in fact I would like to write one. The problem is that I have no ideas for where to go from here. I could do something like you suggested, but it just wouldn't sit right with me. :applejackunsure:

Yup, that was obvious. Mutual ignorance is painful.:unsuresweetie:

Already sunken
into the world so distant and dear,
unable to see the path,
unable to know.
Within the darkness you cannot help but stay,
for still you search for an answer;
fearing there might be none.

Excellent work, dear Author! :pinkiehappy:
A sequel would be appreciated yeah. Maybe you could read some other fiction for inspiration? I'd suggest Sweetie learning about someone with a similar situation kickstarting further questioning. It doesn't have to be another transperson.

5667573 I personally liked Sweetie Belle as the choice, mostly because I view her as the 'girly'-est of the crusaders, so for me gender identity issues in her would make for the most interesting story. For me, Scootaloo having gender identity issues would provide too little angst. Since she's already so tomboy-ish, would it matter as much if she did have these issues, or would they just get easily resolved because her personality is so much farther along in that direction already?

But that's just me. :twilightsmile:

5679845 the other thing is this seems to be early in Sweetie's journey so she might not be thinking of herself as transgender(if she is, like the author said it is vague), her reaction is all about how what she sees in the mirror isn't her. (Using female pronouns because Sweetie hasn't indifyed as male yet.)

That was a really interesting story! I know i can relate since my sister is much like Rarity, always wanting me to look way too stylish and not letting me do my thing when it comes to style!

Late to the party, but glad to see in the comments that the story was what I thought it was about. I actually found the story pretty depressing (especially since it stops here), what with Rarity's forcing Sweetie to conform.

Great work!

I really liked this! Although it saddened me to see that Rarity was going to be that person in this fic, I loved it. I also think a sequel would be awesome if you ever chose to write one (wow, the comments are becoming a broken record-).

The status says complete...yet why does this fic not FEEL complete?

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