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When the Sparkle family is torn apart by a divorce between Night Light and Twilight Velvet, Twilight is left with nothing but a shattered family and her newborn baby brother Spike left without a real mother.

Follow Twilight Sparkle as she learns what it takes to become not just a sister, but also a mother.

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Although it should be self-evident from the "Human" tag, I would suggest adding the "Alternate Universe" one as well, as the timeline takes a minute to get used to when reading the work.

Starting off with the letter was a good idea, as it instantly immerses the reader in the larger story.

The Twilight/Spike relationship is the most important part of the series to me, and I haven't seen nearly enough stories that explain the time that they spent together when Spike was still very young. You have my upvote, and I'll be interested in seeing where you go with this.

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Thanks for that. I added the AU tag.

That picture of Spike is so cute.

Oh, this is really touching my heart deeply already. I want to know what was in the letter that Twilight received, and also what is it about Spike that could have caused this family strife. :fluttershysad:

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I'm going to write the story in a way that if one of the characters reveal or say something, then the reader learns what's going on.

Hopefully that'll create a few good guessing games.

3093714 Ooh, I like that. Kind of suspenseful in a way, guessing. :twilightblush:

Glad to see you back around here Glitcy. I'll have to give this a read later, although I'm not one for the ponies as humans.

3093714 I'm gonna give it a guess and say Spikes not Twi's fathers child, but is her mothers.

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Yeah. I'm back on FIMFiction writing stories, however not full-time like I used to be. To make ensure I write and have time for my family 'n stuff like that I've decided to write shorter stories and little one-shots.

As for Pattycakes and Familiar Faces I don't know if I'll continue them, but we'll have to wait and see.

3094626 Hey man whatever you choose to do I support ya.

I see this is based off of the universe you created in "Pattycakes The Remake". And I take it the only reason you tagged this as "Alternative Universe" is because Spike is still a baby here while in the main "Remake" universe he's at least a few years old and Twilight's adopted son right? :trixieshiftright:

I look forward to more. :pinkiesmile:

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With Humanized stories I try and keep the same ideals and similarities for the pony puns and pony things that wouldn't work in a Humanized world. But my ideas and lore for the "Pattycakes" world is separate to the others despite the similarities. So that references are kept clean and it isn't hinted in other stories which could put others off.

3094626 I'd like you to at least finish "Pattycakes The Remake". Then you could put the bonus chapters up for auction and let other authors take them. But whatever you think is best will be fine. :eeyup:

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The final chapter for Pattycakes is on hold for the moment being. It's a mess behind the scenes wise and how I'm pacing it is making it a little longer than usual. But when I manage to get some more free time when my family isn't doing stuff then I could take a dive into what I wrote and maybe rewrite the entire chapter.

I'm not pleased with how the final chapter (so far) was handled by me personally and I don't think the bonus chapters will come until a later time. For an ending I've rewritten it loads of times and changed so many scenes and stuff which made it a mess. Despite my time taken I need to go through it again and change little details and major bits that bugged me and try to cut the fat.

3095459 I know it isn't easy to get back into the swing of things after being gone for so long. Just take your time, that's all I can ask for. :eeyup:

I kind of feel for Twilight. It is like she has given up her time with her friends, well, in reality she has, to watch after Spike. But I feel for Spike to, because he is just a baby, and Twilight is pushing him to cooperate with her. :fluttershysad: I hope somehow Twilight can form a bond with Spike where he will really understand her, and pay attention to her.

I hope Cup Cake can help. Twilight needs to understand that Spike is just a baby, and he is going to act like he does, but I can also see where Twilight is coming from. :fluttershysad:

Twilights parents are god awful. Leaving a child to take care of a baby. Any smart parent would know YOU DON'T FUCKING DO THAT UNLESS YOU INTEND TO COME BACK! Those two seriously need to grow a pair and MAN THE FUCK UP!

3100735 Well you do have a point, letting your teenage daughter look after her baby brother isn't a very good idea. Teenagers typically tend to be very emotionally unstable and often don't have a very steady income. Most don't even live on their own. But that doesn't automatically make them bad parents. It is possible they gave Twilight Spike for a reason.:eeyup:

As "Baby Cakes" even reminded us babies can and do take a lot of responsibility. They're a joy to have at times but they're also a lot of work.

He was quickly silenced feeling the nipple go into his mouth, somewhat confused at what it was but he quickly accepted it and began to suckle on it feeling the soft creamy milk soon disperse out of the tip. This is what he expected but it was starting to slowly fill him up.

:ajsmug:

So that's the reason? Well that was really rude of Mr. Sparkle, he should've supported his wife after she got pregnant not dumped her like a bad habbit. Good thing Twilight and Shining Armor are old enough to live on their own. :flutterrage:

3103113 tbf she didnt listen did she? they couldent adford another baby but she went and got knocked up anyway -.- so therefore its her falut

3103113>>3103155 Technically, you are both right. Her father didn't want another kid and the mother not listening just mean. She cheated on her husband. Not something you should do if you are married. And afterwards she just gave up her kid. Didn't even bother to save him. Grow a pair and take charge Mrs. Sparkle.:ajbemused:
Her father, also, should not have walked away from his responsibility. If I had met him on the street I would kick him in the nuts and yell MAN THE FUCK UP, COWARD!:flutterrage::flutterrage:
I have nothing to say to Shining Armor because he has done minimal effort to help and done jack shit. STEP UP MAN!
I can only say this about Twilight. She is a wonderful and loving sister. She stepped up to the plate and took responsibility for her baby brother when everyone else would have just been happy to leave the child on his own. Not only that, she is 19 years old. To have this kind of responsibility at that age takes some serious guts that the rest of her family seems to lack. GO TWILIGHT!

3103372 exctly twlight is the hero of the story maybe cadance if shes trying to help aswell

I don't blame this at all on Spike. I blame this on their dead beat daddy it sounds like to me. :flutterrage: Now Twilight needs to start bonding with Spike more affectionately, and also become the mommy that he needs. :fluttershysad:

3103372 Yeah I mean honestly Shining Armor was probably better equipped to deal with Spike, and he could've had his wife help him. But he stepped aside and did nothing thus forcing the responsiblity onto Twilight. I hope Cadence gives him a stern talking to and maybe even a "Reason You Suck Speech".

I like this idea. It's new and fascinating

I can relate to Twilight. I have three younger brothers and the oldest out of the three are 7 years younger than me. I had to play the temp parent if our parent are busy more than once and helped take care of them. It is a tiring job and can get beyond annoying at times but it does have its moments.:ajsleepy::pinkiesmile::twilightsmile:

Another very cute, yet very deep chapter with Cup Cake trying to get down to the bottom of why Spike acts like he does around Twilight. :twilightblush: Also, maybe this could be beginning of their bonding process if Spike is trying to give Twilight the teddy bear. :twilightsmile:

Woooooo. I can't wait to read this. ( I have no life ):twilightsheepish:

Ah Twilight and Spike are starting to bond. How nice. :twilightsmile:

Ugh, why does everyone think that 'Sparkle' is Twilight's last name?:applejackconfused:

"It's understandable Twilight. Things have been pretty rough for you and I atleast would have thought someone like you would've spent a tiny bit of time with him." Cup Cake crossed her arms.

Put a comma in front of someone's name when it is spoken in dialog. "It's understandable, Twilight." Also, put a space between "at least".

Other than that... hurgh! My heart! I'm glad to see that they are starting to bond.:twilightsmile:

i love twilight and spike getting closer :twilightsmile:

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Thanks for pointing that out. As for the bit with the comma I'll keep that in mind.

I feel something bad coming on. U better not hurt spikey-wikey:moustache:

3130775 I doubt he will. After all Twilight's not some heartless monster. :twilightsmile:

And I'm pretty much taking a shot in the dark but I think I know why Spike's crying. :duck:

3131254well I just hope it's a happy ending. I try to stay away from sad tags but they end up sneaking up on me

Glad to see Spike and Twilight are bonding.:scootangel: Also, I'm glad that Twilight is speaking to Spike as she would with an adult, rather than that cutesy baby talk. Kids learn to speak from their parents and siblings and language development is critical at a young age.:eeyup:

Aw.. the time alone with Spike should be good for Twilight. Also, maybe she can get to finally calm down after she goes into to see him crying.:twilightblush:

Huh the reason for Spike's crying wasn't what I thought it was. :duck:

Also I think Twilight is forgetting that at least Rarity and Sweetie Belle know about Spike since Sweetie Belle offered to babysit Spike. Guess I'll just chalk that up to the lack of sleep. :twilightoops:

:moustache: Nice story. I'm gonna keep reading.

Very heartwarming chapter with Spike warming up to Twilight a little bit more. :twilightblush: I just wonder what this letter was all about and it's effect it could have. :pinkiehappy:

Twilight breast fed Spike once? Do I dare to ask how it's possible for a 19 year old girl to do that? :twilightoops:

Wow that's really cruel of you Mr. Sparkle, not only do you divorce your wife but you don't even bother showing up to the court case? You're not making a good image for yourself. :ajsleepy:

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Probably not, but I'm sure Twilight has some magical/potion-like knowledge on how to lactate or something like that. I think that's one thing I didn't research that much when I was writing that tid-bit properly. So with that I'm going to take a risk and allow anyone to correct me on that.

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I wouldn't be that harsh on Mr. Sparkle just yet, we haven't heard his side of the story, maybe something happened during the pregnancy and it caused him to be the way he is.

I think it's pretty HOT. What? Too weird?:facehoof:

I can see why the husband had had enough. She seems to desperately want something in the moment, but never thinks of the future consequences of it. Also, by how quickly she transitioned from talking about Spike to talking about her new dude, I get the impression that the "Spike" part was mostly for show so that Twilight wouldn't feel ashamed or disappointed in her mother that stopped raising a child she had begged for, but you would have to be a pretty cynical person to think that was the case.

<<===== (Cynical person)

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Strange enough, that was my actual intention for the letter.

"Oh hey, how is Spike, yeah good enough. Wait a minute, fuck that look at this man I just bagged, let me go on about him for a while and trash daddy."

The bonding between Twilight and Spike is slowly growing.:pinkiehappy::twilightblush:

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