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Obselescence
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This one's an old, old story from a year back or so, when I was all fascinated by Party of One. Posting it now 'cause why not?
Thinking back on things, I was probably on some unfortunate medication when I wrote this.
Hope you guys enjoy it all the same.
I heartily approve.
Lovely.
:3
Obselescence you're just full of awesome!
Dark, twisted, and a very good look into her mind.
~Skeeter The Lurker
I liked it.
Very readable love-child compilation of poetry and story. The way Pinkie's mind is fixated, trying to rationalize the same truth again and again from different angles until she gets a different answer, it feels very genuine to her personality type.
Obs on too many drugs; Pinkie not on enough.
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In retrospect, recovering from surgical work has probably been responsible for a lot of my strangest fics.
"The Most Autistic Thing I've Ever Read." - Poultron
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Poultron knows I love him too.
Oh boy, a new fic, No-Beard!
Cutely deceptive story art is deceptive.
I've read a couple of stories that use this type of writing, its always made me want to try it out for myself.
Excellent story though, great job on writing Madame Le Flour
(I would assume she would sound something like that.
DJRD
...Words...fail...me...
CUPCAKES!!!!!!!!!!!!
...I have one thing to say to you...
How the hell did you right-align your text?!
*Ahem* Also, nice story. Just a little glimpse into Pinkie's growing psychosis. Nothing too big to worry about here. It's not like she's gonna go over the deep end, murder Rainbow Dash, and make cupcakes out of her that she'll feed to her friends one day. ALL IS GOOD HERE!
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There's a tag implemented for right aligned text now, which doesn't show up in the chapter editor, but functions all the same. (right)(/right), with the parenthesis replaced by square brackets, of course.
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I tried that once... didn't work. Must be a recent implement. Cool story brah!
I'll be honest here; I've never seen anyone use that kind of format for a story, so this was a real treat, even if it was a bit hard to understand at first.
The story itself was pretty interesting... and believable. This could have been a legit conversation among Pinkie and her "new friends". I wish that someone could squeeze this into the episode, so that I could be satisfied. Heck, get Hasbro to do it themselves, and I'll be elated! Though, that's kind of too ambitious...
I've heard great things about you, Obselescence, and something tells me that they weren't false.
~ Unstable Imagination
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Haha, well, dunno where you'd have heard anything like that about me, but it's very flattering all the same. Thanks!
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Fascinating.
I think this was both great and original. Well done, sir/ma'am.
I read Rocky's parts in narrator's voice from Bastion.
Obselesclaus
And here we have
A normal story
Nothing special.
Nothing special?
Zis eez a magnifique example
Of true poetic verse!
Of course, of course,
How could I mistake
The Bearded One's words
Are far too great.
Iz true, iz true! A work of art
Delightful and very zmart!
Our dear Obs, zee words ov gold!
Zee him write stories untold!
So yes, It's true I liked the piece
The emotions that His words release
A downvote would just be uncouth
Liked and faved, ain't that the truth!
________________________________
just a little something you inspired. enjoy.
Wow. I love the format of this deceptively dark story. Mad props for originality.
Exquisite. The sense of Pinkie's insecurity, her despair, the slow fracturing of her mind, all magnificently done. The girl defines herself by her ability to party, and when that ability is put into question, she finds herself in the midst of an existential crisis, something she is simply not equipped to handle.
So, out come the imaginary friends, and you can't be friends with something. Only with someone. So they need a little free agency. And once they get it, they're going to fight to keep it.
A fantastic look into the mind of poor, poor Pinkamena. Thank you for it.
Damn. Not what I was expecting from this, but I like it. I have to say, the title's clever as fuck.
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Well, you have a good ratio going here!
I finally decided to sit down and read this thing. I have to say, I am impressed. This is quite artistic. And the ending was rather interesting as well. I mean, overall, it was interesting, and you sure have outdone yourself with this.
Also, drugs are the greatest writing inspirators.
This was a great story. I liked it a lot.
It did hurt a lot to read though.
It was interesting to have split views, but it would hurt a lot less to read if the personas were different colors or fonts.
I do realize the effort that went into it.
I read this in Rainbow Dash colors. Bad idea
(P.S The facehoof is the closest emote i could find that reminded me of having a headache. besides this
I shall read this on my free time!
I like this...it's nice. Not big or flashy, but still nice.
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Okay, sir, I am here to give some light feedback on this story of yours. Thank Dancer for telling me to give it a shot.
This story is unique. I've never read anything like it. It's just so difficult to assess it by traditional reviewing methods. There is no scene. There is hardly any sort of structure. So many conventions of writing have been shattered that I just plain don't know how to react. Congratulations on filling my head with confusion. But that's not what you want to hear, no? What you want to know is what I think. Well, apart from the confusion, I honestly like this story. You win the Kalash93 seal of approval.
This is far from the best story I've ever read, but it's one of the most interesting and engaging. This piece really would need a top quality dramatic reading done by a group of people in order to be properly appreciated. Admittedly, I don't read all that many fics, despite being an active writer, community member, and WRITE group reviewer. However, out of all the ones I've seen in 2013, this one belongs in the top 5 (bugger me if I can remember names), not because it's the best written, but because it's the most interesting story. Okay, admittedly perhaps I'm feeling a little bit generous towards psychological strangeness, because I beat Spec Ops: The Line, yesterday.
This is one of those stories which should be read. And not only should it be read, it should be analyzed. You've written the single most interesting character study I've ever seen. Most fics which are dedicated canon character studies, bore me. Either that, or they only come to conclusions I'd already established long ago. And they never make me think. They never say anything new or meaningful. Nothing is ever done in a new way. Nothing ever makes me reinterpret a character in a new way. There are exceptions, such as Every Little Bit, by The Descendant, but those are the rare standouts. Be pleased, for this is one of those character studies which I actually like. Why? Because it made me reevaluate my entire outlook on a character. Prior to this fic, my reaction to seeing Pinkamena was to roll my eyes and grumble under my breath about another derivative fic written by a hack trying to be edgy by putting in a character who seemed to exist just because the fandom had an appetite for gore and bondage. Well, I now have a new understanding and appreciation for Pinkamena, at least when she's written well.
Let me say why this story works. This story works, in spite of it violating almost every single convention of storywriting, because you went all the way in subverting convention for the art. You were decisive, meaning that the reader has no choice but to plunge right into the strange narrative you've written. And the way you've written it is indeed fascinating. It's a conversation, but the different speakers are denoted based on where their speech is located on the page. It's intimate, almost troublingly so. It's like the reader is being addressed directly by the characters. I really identified with Pinkie Pie. If anyone has ever felt snubbed or excluded, then they are going to really feel for Pinkie in this story. You've written a mix between dialogue and poetry. It's beautiful and really engaging. The story flows very well.
However, your story does have flaws. The interesting design of the story is what I would call too clever. After a while, I forgot who was whom. All I remembered was that Pinkie was on the left, and Madame LeFlour was the one with the funky, phonetic faux-French accent. The problem was that the construction ultimately caused it all to melt into one mess where I forgot who was speaking and to whom. As invested as I was, by the 700 word mark, it was melting into a puddle of good, and by 1200 words, I was fighting back the urge to skim. Perhaps it could have done with 300-500 fewer words, but you're a better wordsmith than I am. Perhaps I just didn't have the proper attention span or mindset when I came in, but that's just a personal note. The longer length definitely paid off when the ending came around, which makes the word slurry much more forgivable.
Overall, very well done. It's perhaps not a fantastic story, but it's unmatched as a very intimate and fascinating character study. 8/10 flutteryays.
I love this!
The fact that there's no scene, no imagery, makes it all the darker and insane-feeling. I just imagined darkness with voices. And it was perfect. I could hear the voices so clearly, and feel Pinkie's crazy.
Well done.
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3568798 There's nine flutteryays there.
I must say I really enjoyed this. Well done and carry on. I award you 5/5 Pinkies
3567888 I ALWAYS read in rainbow dash colors!
Well, that was creepy.
Huh...definitely different...I like it. It's an interesting take on Pinkie's descent into madness. Nice job. Plus, the idea for seperating the text into the three columns was brilliant.
I like this! The stark, dialogue-only approach works for providing a deeper look into Pinkie's deteriorating state in "Party of One." I was surprised to see her insecure about losing her friends again as recently as "Wonderbolt Academy." Makes me wonder if they have more places they want to go with that aspect of her character in the 4th season.
...
...do I dare, read this story?
...I am unsure...
...
ah fuck it.
GERONIMO
Edit: Well, just finished reading.
You know what's funny?
You don't need monsters, or scary-looking things to make a fic or any other piece of work scary.
What's truly scary is what's inside our own heads, that's where the true horror lies.
Nicely done fic. You've got a like and a fave.
This is something that perhaps only a nitpicky few among typographers and grammarians will care at all about, but just in case you think it has any importance, I'd like to point out that a proper apostrophe should only ever be a closing single quotation mark (’), not an opening one (‘).
This was a very different and unique story. I liked it.
At the recommendations of others in the group...
I'm adding this to Twilight's Library!
Congratulations.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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Where is the ribbon?
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Quiet you.
Right here:
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Happy?
~Skeeter The Lurker
3560439 Whatever meds they were, if they resulted in this, surely they couldn't have been all bad?